Name: Kimiwimi reviewed Diagon Alley on Apr 01, 2005 04:18 pm

Gah! GAH! GAAAAH! WHY is it one of the last times they will see each other?!?!! *diiiiieeeees!* Needless to say, you've created a great sence of anticipation with that last line. For the majority of the chapter, I was reading happily, with sighs of contentment, thinking "yes! they are back together!" and then WHAM - OMGWTFHAMSTER! It created a nice effect. Well done. The only thing I could criticize was that it seemed like they got back together so quickly. A little more angst might have been nice, perhaps looking in on Draco to see his own perspective, how his mother felt, whether he was angry, etc, etc. That would have built THAT tension up as well, so the chapter would be gripping from beginning to end and then give an added punch with the whammy at the end. Otherwise, though, excellent. I can relate to the ideas of starting to feel more 'mature' about a relationship once you've been through a bit of a rough spot, though I worry for them when the get back to Hogwarts! Those Slytherins can be nasty! But we shall see. Looking forward to the next!