Name: MrsDanielRadcliffe reviewed Bureaucracy on Feb 03, 2006 03:23 pm

Ooh, cliffie! Intrigued yet again.

Name: goddessofyesterday reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 23, 2005 01:41 pm

Oh you're evil, that's for sure. I'm so excited there's a sequel! Probably more excited than one person should be, but still. Is she going to go chasing after this object? What does it have to do with her?Why am I asking when I know you won't answer? Sigh. I'm starting to think you like confusing people.

Name: wcoast_girl reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 15, 2005 09:03 pm

Ooooh - I am so intrigued. I really enjoyed The Visible Invisible and I was completely confused in the first chapter like everyone else. :) Can I tell you that I think your writing is really much stronger now than it was in the first chapters of VI? The exchange between Draco and Ginny was great - very real. And you've totally got me hooked - what happened? Was Draco under the Imperius? Did someone polyjuice themselves to look like him? What is the artifact? AHHHHH!!!! Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: *dances in glee* I'm so happy that you're intrigued! I never really thought of myself as a kind of 'mystery' writer, but the more and more I read of peoples reactions, the more I realize that I totally am writing a mystery (but also a romance!) And thank you for the comment re: my writing between the beginning of The Visible Invisible and this one... I go back now and read some of those chapters and almost cringe, because it seems so different from what I write like now... of course, in a month, I'll probably be doing the same with these chapters, but it's nice to know that my style is changing, and adapting and stuff.

Name: Esus reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 15, 2005 10:01 am

You, evil, vicious… awesome writer! How come that you already wrote a new chapter? And what a chapter!
A lot of mystery and D/G stuff there that makes me wonder a lot. So, at the end of VI, they started to date seriously and they were even engaged. Not that I didn’t hoped for something like that, but I also thought that Draco and Ginny had a lot of stuff to sorter out.
So, you’re bringing on Tuscany? And she is going to be involved with an Italian minister? I hope you aren’t going to describe him as a pain in the ass… you know, there’s a lot of national pride in your most annoying reviewer *pointing at me*!
Well, apart from that, I should admit that now I’m majorly confused… I know, it’s funny, since I wasn’t disturbed by the first chapter (well, by now I’m almost accustomed to your evil way of putting hints and cliffhangers… but, almost), but now I don’t understand. What is Ginny looking for? And why Draco isn’t there with her? And why, instead, DARIEN is with her?!
*me shakes head vigorously*
Stop with the questions and back to the chapter: I loved how you made Draco ad Ginny interact… not just because it’s them acting, but because it was a real memory, as if the scene was displayed in front of us in that moment: no present thoughts, no hints of what happened next… just a scene taken from their life, that explained something about their year together, but nothing about the present (I’ve already told you that you’re frustrating? No? Well, I’m telling you now -.-). The only thing that I didn’t like much is the end of the chapter: apart from the cliffhanger (and just this should make me dislike it :p), I was under the impression that it was a bit rushed… I’d liked to see a bit more of Ginny’s feelings, especially since she admitted that she was reassured by her memories. Why? Hoe she’s feeling now? How is her own house (often, the environment gives away much more than people generally thinks about characters’ emotions).
And who is spying on her? I really, really hope that we aren’t going to find out that she is observed but someone died, in ghost form, nor that she has another mad stalker around!
Well, keep on the good job and I really hope you’re going to update soon! (and I also hope to see more Italian environments XD).

Author's Response: I was so nervous about the whole Italian thing that I almost changed it, but it's an important little detail, so I held on... I worry about getting stuff horribly horribly wrong and upsetting people, but I figured, no matter what country I chose (even my own), I stand the chance of offending people, so I just went with what the story told me to do! (Plus, Italy is just so much prettier than Canada *where I'm from*). There is going to be a lot of 'flashbacks' like the one in this chapter - moments from the past told in that kind of narrative, so I'm glad you liked it!! haha