Name: beckysue2 reviewed Fading on Oct 11, 2005 08:13 am
Great chapter again! I was surprised to see Ron taking her side in this, but it was a welcome surprise!
Name: Esus reviewed The Medrautian Order on Oct 01, 2005 11:56 pm
So sweet *_*!
How can you think I can believe he deliberately hurt her? Surely, there is a reason that we don't know... and I also recall that he was so sad that she showed up in the cellar. Probably because he knew what he had to do against her. Surely he loves her, but we all know that your Draco won't ever be stopped by anything and anyone, especially if he is sure he's doing the right thing.
Even if I can't really accept he hurt his love...
Apart from that, it's perfectly clear your explanation about Ginny's flashbacks and narrator's flashback's... and, at least now we know how it happened that Ginny got involved with the Italian minister.
So, the mysterious sword should be Excalibur? But you're talking about the one from the legends? In that case, how it happened that its fate is related with the Wizarding World? And it wasn't thrown in the Lake? How it was taken and brought in a cellar in Italy?
LOL, as usual, too many questions... I can't wait to read the next chapter! Keep up the good work!
Name: Esus reviewed Diplomatic relations on Oct 01, 2005 11:41 pm
Would you care to comment on the allegations that Draco Malfoy, your fiancé, almost killed you and is reportedly still at large
HE.REALLY.DID.THIS?!
*outraged gasp*
No, it's not possible. Surely there is a reason behind this... the sword is cursed by any chance?
There, surely this is the explanation.
*nodding satisfied*
And don't try to delude my hopes... I can't possibly believe that Draco hurt her without a reason. He should have be obliged by someone else. What I can't understand id how the press knew about this accident. If I recall properly, it happened in a hidden cellar of a abbey somewhere in Italy, didn't it? So, who revealed everything?
And why Ginny was sacked? Because she was looking for the truth?
And this Mr. Ruggiero... I don't know if I like him or not. Telling the truth, it's just a bit strange that he is helping her with her quest... unless he had a personal goal to reach. Ginny should be really careful with her research, since it seems that even the diplomatic warned her of the danger.
And, why everybody thinks she a paranoid? Can't they understand her thirst of knowledge and explanations?
Okay, go on with the next chapter!
Name: Esus reviewed Old Wounds on Sep 29, 2005 05:00 am
I'm back! And I am finally able to read the new chapters you wrote... it's just great that you have already written three chapters, so I can see immediately what it is going to happen after....
So, Draco diappeared to find a sword? Okay, a sword full of power, but still a sword from my point of view. What I don't understand is why a man so brilliant and clever could be subdued by a sword... unless he did it for a specific reason. You know, after VI, I've learnt that there is always a hidden reason behind Draco's actions.
And I don't think he was seeking the power to rule the world, not after what he did.
What I can't understand is why Ginny speaks about a year of her life, as if she doesn't remember it. Or that's because it took her a year to recover from the injury?
Apart from that, I'm always more surprised by Darien and his familiarity with Ginny: he appears into her appartment at every hour, saying that he *has* to look after her... but, for who? I dare say Draco, but it's a bit unrealistic, since what I learned in these first chapters.
Honestly, you're confusing me... but I know that the answer to all my doubts is just here, under my nose... and i'm not able to see it *sigh*.
Name: HO Geek reviewed The Medrautian Order on Sep 28, 2005 05:10 am
I so love this story!! Well maybe not the evil Draco, cutting a hole in Ginny's belly and all. But I know that there has to be a good reason for him to have done that. I am looking forward to find out the why!!
Name: goddessofyesterday reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 23, 2005 01:41 pm
Oh you're evil, that's for sure. I'm so excited there's a sequel! Probably more excited than one person should be, but still. Is she going to go chasing after this object? What does it have to do with her?Why am I asking when I know you won't answer? Sigh. I'm starting to think you like confusing people.
Name: ser reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 18, 2005 07:01 am
About my last review-I knew that Darien wasn't evil per se, but I was so used to seeing Dravo protecting Ginny from Darien and not the other way round! You've really caught my attention here.
Name: wcoast_girl reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 15, 2005 09:03 pm
Ooooh - I am so intrigued. I really enjoyed The Visible Invisible and I was completely confused in the first chapter like everyone else. :) Can I tell you that I think your writing is really much stronger now than it was in the first chapters of VI? The exchange between Draco and Ginny was great - very real. And you've totally got me hooked - what happened? Was Draco under the Imperius? Did someone polyjuice themselves to look like him? What is the artifact? AHHHHH!!!! Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: *dances in glee* I'm so happy that you're intrigued! I never really thought of myself as a kind of 'mystery' writer, but the more and more I read of peoples reactions, the more I realize that I totally am writing a mystery (but also a romance!) And thank you for the comment re: my writing between the beginning of The Visible Invisible and this one... I go back now and read some of those chapters and almost cringe, because it seems so different from what I write like now... of course, in a month, I'll probably be doing the same with these chapters, but it's nice to know that my style is changing, and adapting and stuff.
Name: a fan reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 15, 2005 12:30 pm
please please please update soon, this story (and its predecessor) are fantastic
Name: Esus reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 15, 2005 10:01 am
You, evil, vicious… awesome writer! How come that you already wrote a new chapter? And what a chapter!
A lot of mystery and D/G stuff there that makes me wonder a lot. So, at the end of VI, they started to date seriously and they were even engaged. Not that I didn’t hoped for something like that, but I also thought that Draco and Ginny had a lot of stuff to sorter out.
So, you’re bringing on Tuscany? And she is going to be involved with an Italian minister? I hope you aren’t going to describe him as a pain in the ass… you know, there’s a lot of national pride in your most annoying reviewer *pointing at me*!
Well, apart from that, I should admit that now I’m majorly confused… I know, it’s funny, since I wasn’t disturbed by the first chapter (well, by now I’m almost accustomed to your evil way of putting hints and cliffhangers… but, almost), but now I don’t understand. What is Ginny looking for? And why Draco isn’t there with her? And why, instead, DARIEN is with her?!
*me shakes head vigorously*
Stop with the questions and back to the chapter: I loved how you made Draco ad Ginny interact… not just because it’s them acting, but because it was a real memory, as if the scene was displayed in front of us in that moment: no present thoughts, no hints of what happened next… just a scene taken from their life, that explained something about their year together, but nothing about the present (I’ve already told you that you’re frustrating? No? Well, I’m telling you now -.-). The only thing that I didn’t like much is the end of the chapter: apart from the cliffhanger (and just this should make me dislike it :p), I was under the impression that it was a bit rushed… I’d liked to see a bit more of Ginny’s feelings, especially since she admitted that she was reassured by her memories. Why? Hoe she’s feeling now? How is her own house (often, the environment gives away much more than people generally thinks about characters’ emotions).
And who is spying on her? I really, really hope that we aren’t going to find out that she is observed but someone died, in ghost form, nor that she has another mad stalker around!
Well, keep on the good job and I really hope you’re going to update soon! (and I also hope to see more Italian environments XD).

Author's Response: I was so nervous about the whole Italian thing that I almost changed it, but it's an important little detail, so I held on... I worry about getting stuff horribly horribly wrong and upsetting people, but I figured, no matter what country I chose (even my own), I stand the chance of offending people, so I just went with what the story told me to do! (Plus, Italy is just so much prettier than Canada *where I'm from*). There is going to be a lot of 'flashbacks' like the one in this chapter - moments from the past told in that kind of narrative, so I'm glad you liked it!! haha
Name: listentodraco reviewed Time Warp on Aug 15, 2005 07:14 am
whoa, i'm confused. But you're probably enjoying the confusion... I will go think for a moment. Yah still confused.

Author's Response: Yep, definitely enjoying your confusions! *evil grin*
Name: Funnykido reviewed Bureaucracy on Aug 15, 2005 07:02 am
You really are evil, I hope you know it. But nonetheless I love the interaction between Draco and Ginny, how Draco is acting like himself, yet still a bit desperate about the wedding. (Am wondering how THAT was broken off, by the way, you have some serious explaining to do!) If you still need a beta I'm STILL here. Don't mean to be annoying, lol, so just tell me to shutup if you already have one! Brilliant as always!
Name: Esus reviewed Time Warp on Aug 10, 2005 07:03 pm
You need a beta? I don't think I can help you, since my poor knwoledge of English... the best I could do is "plot" help, observations about how the story flows, if there are points where you could get deeper, stuff like that. And, I don't really think you could need an help like that... you do a great job just by yourself! Of course, let me know if you still think that I can help you in any way. (since we are speaking of it, IMHO there's a typo there: "Harry was slightly relieved to see the flicker of determination in her eyes, a sign that were was still fire behind them".
Back to the chapter...
*squeeeee* You wrote a sequel! Don't worry of being a liar, I can easily forgive you, since you're writing again about ones of my favourites characters!
About this chapter... well, not much to say. Suddenly it seemed that Darien built about a backbone (not that he didn't have it before, but now it seems stronger) and that Ginny is completely freaked out.
Of course, I can understand why, after what happened in VI... but, why Draco now is the bad guy. Of course, I remembered how things ended (and I'm *so* happy that that wasn't the final end!), but still...
I really hope that they'll figure out their problem!
And now, I'm dying to know what is written in that file... what is Ginny looking for that Harry could explain to her? Darien didn't know enough? And how it happened that they are in such a friendly relation?
As usual, a lot of question in a small space (and I'm holding myself XD!)... I can't wait to read next chapter!
Name: Funnykido reviewed Time Warp on Aug 10, 2005 12:45 pm
Hey, saw that you needed a beta! Nobody's offered yet, YES! Lol, I'd love to do it! My email's yellowpages20@yahoo.com I've read Visible Invisible and obviously this first chapter. Great chapter as usual, brilliant writing!
Name: ser reviewed Time Warp on Aug 10, 2005 08:01 am
I'm intrigued. I adored the Visible Invisible and I was lucky to find it when you'd finished so there was no agonizing waiting for updates! You really kept my attention here. Why did Draco turn on Ginny? Is there more to the story? And since when is Darien a 'good' guy? Update soon! Ah and if you're still interested in a beta I could give you a go. Let me know.

Author's Response: There is so much more to the story. Other than writing for the pure enjoyment of it, I also have this sick fetish for torturing readers with revealing the secrets of the plot very slowly, misdirecting readers and leaving massive cliffhangers. And there is going to be SO much more to the sotry! Darien has always been a 'good' guy, the only reason he came off as evil is because he's a) a snarky Malfoy with serious attitude, and b) he 'became' a Death Eater because of his sister, Danika, to protect her. He's very Snape-like, as in he may not be evil in the same way as, say, Voldemort, but he's not exactly a nice guy. He does have a soft spot for Ginny, though and his previous super-snarkiness towards her was motivated because he found her ability to know that he was a Death Eater a little unnerving, and he wasn't sure if he could trust her.
Name: Christine reviewed Time Warp on Aug 10, 2005 06:41 am
Whoa! That was confusing. I loved your story the Visible Invisible. I love the way you write and all that too. But this story, like I thought I knew what was going on but then I didn't. So I looked back on the other story and I was still confused. Update soon! Please?! Christine

Author's Response: *evil grin* I'm so glad you found it confusing! I think you probably thought that the person she was talking to at the end was going to be Draco, and that the 'dangerous person' was gonna be Neville or someone. But, this story takes a whole other plot vein, and it's going to be told in a series of flashbacks that mesh with the present...so slowly but surely, it won't be confusing anymore! And I'm so glad that you like the Visible Invisible, and that you're reading this one! After all that talk about never writing a sequel, this plot bunny just had to be told with these characters, so I relented! Update will be coming soon, thanks for reviewing!
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