Name: Hopeless reviewed Chapter 3 on Mar 21, 2007 11:50 am
*crying like a madman , oh my goodness. this story was so amazingly written, though sad, it was still amazing.
Name: Kisou reviewed Chapter 3 on Mar 29, 2006 06:31 am
I like this a lot. It's very poetic. You have a couple little technical errors: triple comma splice and you changed from frist person to third person a couple of times. I'd suggest getting a beta, another one if you already have one. It doesn't have to be your job to make sure the grammar is good, but you should make sure someone is doing it.
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