Name: shadieladie reviewed His Newly Realized Hell on Apr 14, 2006 03:14 pm

Oh you horrible person how could you do that toDraco? You should be a shamed! Fix it Fix it, NOW!!!

Author's Response: **hangs head** I know. I know. Fix it? How can I fix it when she went off and got pregnant? Alright, I'll go and speak to Ginny about this. I'm sure she'll think of something, and then we'll spend the rest of the fic working on it. Thanks for your review and your outrage. I appreciate them both. -fallenwitch

Name: Scanty Slytherin reviewed Breaking His Goddamn Heart on Apr 14, 2006 01:05 pm

I think it's a pretty good start. It's a bit vague but I think that's what brings the reader in and leaves them wanting to read more. Keep going because now I'm curious hahaha. By the way your actual writing is very beautiful and articulate. Keep it up!!

Author's Response: You're absolutely right. It's just a brief snapshot into Draco's head. It's vague - no external context to help orient us. It's experimental. I thought I'd try a different sort of opening chapter. This fic has its issues, no doubt about it. Thanks for your thoughts! - fallenwitch

Name: Marcia reviewed Breaking His Goddamn Heart on Apr 14, 2006 06:07 am

Yay, you're giving this another shot! I thought the plot you'd set up when you first posted it was intriguing and am looking forward to seeing how it develops.

My heart always dances with joy when I see you've updated, so I was very excited last night and read this chapter right away. There are some wonderful phrases and images throughout. I think my favorite is:
"Fear? His greatest fear wasn't The War or the pain or even the possibility of death. It was forgetting. He wanted to sear her into his body's memory so he could never forget."

I love your use of language. It's powerful and evocative and very believable. I believe that I'm inside Draco's head as I read.

One heads up: you've used the word 'frame' three times in these sentences and then again at the end of the chapter; a bit too many:
"Not knowing what else to do, the Slytherin took his frightened witch into his arms, holding her fast to him, cradling her slight frame to his, attempting to comfort her with his love. When she clung to him, desperately throwing her arms around his frame, he knew she wasn't fooled."

And, before I go, how are you doing with writing The Slytherin's Witch and Along Came a Wizard? Dying to read the rest of those two as well!

As always, many, many thanks for sharing your imagination with us. You are much appreciated.

xo!
Marcia



Author's Response: Hi Marcia! **blushes profusely while reading your kind words** I have gone back and changed that sentence. Thanks for pointing that out! This is why I need a beta, badly. If I could only find one that would put up with the crazy way I put my fics together without wanting to kill me... As for those other stories... The Slytherin's Witch is waiting for me to find a large chunk of time to finish it up with one big writing spree as it is almost done! And Along Came A Wizard - well - I'm not proud of this fact, but I'm burnt out on it!!! Working non-stop on it since November has left my Quill bone dry. I am halfway through the next chapter and sitting and fiddling so who knows? I'm a little over all over the place these days. Sorry! Thanks for your review. It was wonderful! -fallenwitch

Name: starry_laa reviewed Breaking His Goddamn Heart on Apr 14, 2006 12:07 am

As usual beautifully written- I just love your style of writing. It's the same from Along Came...but in a different scenario and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with it

Author's Response: Wow, what a wonderful review! It's funny that you see a bit of Along Came A Wizard in it because this is the fic that crashed and burned and led directly to Along Came A Wizard! Maybe it'll crash and burn again and lead to something else! - fallenwitch

Name: Alyssa reviewed Breaking His Goddamn Heart on Apr 13, 2006 06:18 pm

OMFG. You are amazing. Can't wait for the next chapter. And making Draco a potty-mouth makes him actually believable and more true to the book. Although I do hope the next chapter will get into Ginny's head a bit more. And you are truly evil, ending it on a cliffie!!! :sigh: Again, can't wait for the next chapter.


Author's Response: This is the second review I've EVER gotten in favor of my foul mouthed Draco. It's good to know I'm not alone in the world! Most of my fic are written from Draco's POV so we'll have to see how much I can manage to wiggle into Ginny's head. Glad you are enjoying this one so far. Thanks for your review! -fallenwitch