Nothing like that sucker punch line "They were suspicious of him, however, and didn’t let him see the girl – and so it was only when she died that he heard any news of her."
Very powerful. Nothing warms the cockles of my heart like well-done angst. I love the open ending.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I don't consider myself a primarily angst-writer, so whenever I get some done succesfully I always feel just a little extra bit proud. :)
this is GORGEOUS. i adore how draco loves ginny so intensely, he hates her. this is *so* him. i was also pretty taken with how you introduce her death. it was a total shock, and yet...it was kind of like a velvet fist; it makes an impression, but draco (and me! the reader) doesn't really notice the hurt that it inflicts until the very end, when he wishes she's in hell for leaving him alone with people who don't trust him, who are locking him in after he's let this unassuming girl break down all of his defenses. bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I was really trying with my Draco characterization in this one, glad it's getting across well. I really intended that to be sort of out of the blue. It's why I put it so bluntly... but 'velvet fist' is an excellent term I never would have expected to be on the recieving end of. Thanks!
and so it was only when she died that he heard any news of her.
This line smacked me upside the head. I reread it hoping I'd misread it the first time. No such luck. This was a powerful story.
I'd like to suggest you change the summary because I passed this fic over several times before deciding to read. The summary made me think it was a poem and I don't read a lot of poems. Just a suggestion. The fic is wonderful.
Author's Response:Thank you. :)
Both for the review and the tip about the summary. I think I will, if not get rid of the poem, at least accompany it with something more summary-ish. I certainly don't want to lose potential readers. Thanks.
It seems very appropriate that Draco would be angry at Ginny for her actions. It also seems appropriate that he turns fully to the 'other' side after her death. It would seem that he gave his all just as she had done.
And in the end he is still alone and unappreciated. Poor, poor Draco.
I love your use of Poe. He always adds that special heartfelt angst and sorrow.
Great job, Vicky.
Author's Response:Thank you for the review... again. :)
I do love Poe. He made it so easy to emotionally pick Draco apart in this.
Wow. I have chills. That was haunting and filled with enough anger, confusion, frustration and eventual listlessness that I feel almost drained upon coming to the end.
Poor Draco.
I think I'm adding this fic to my faves. It's so meaningful for such a short piece. :)
Author's Response: Thank you. 'Drained' is what I was going for. Glad you like it.
Aww.... this was so sad, and quite a bit frustrating, but lovely in its own right.
Author's Response: Thank you. :)