Reviews For Broken Mirrors
Name: harrypotterchick4ever reviewed III: Questions don't do the damage on Jun 13, 2010 09:23 am
interesting development!! i'm really loving this story
hope to see more soon!!
Name: idreamofdraco reviewed III: Questions don't do the damage on Jun 13, 2010 02:54 am
I feel like I'm reading a new Harry Potter book with all this new magic you're introducing. Pansy's job is awesome. I can only imagine she uses people's memories for more information, though I can't fathom how she got started in the business.

Ha! The Malfoys sending Ginny an invitation to tea? Priceless. And by sending her that invitation, they're totally making Ginny look more suspicious in the Order's eyes.

And it looks like we are starting to see exactly what led to Ginny's becoming pregnant. It's so sad that she can't trust anyone anymore--with good reason, of course. Bah. I feel really lame after the last review. Blame it on the five o'clock in the morning-ness. -_-

Oh! About the new Harry Potter book thing. It makes me want to keep reading because I want to know what else you're going to put into these chapters. And, if I may slide into gushy review really quickly, I WONDER WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN AT THIS TEA PARTY OMG!!!!1!

Okay. Done.

Lovely words and imagery and work. Looking forward to the next chapter. ^^
Name: idreamofdraco reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on Jun 13, 2010 01:42 am
Roma. Roma, Roma, Romaaaa. (This is a review, see? I'm reviewing.)

I don't want it to sound like I didn't think you could write before, but ohmygosh you've wowed me with your writing. Honestly, I'm reviewing chapter three for submission and I felt like I reeeaaaally should read the first chapter first, and I'm so glad I did. I mean, I was going to get to it eventually. BUT. Wow. I love this world that you've created, and maybe it's because I just finished watching Alice in Wonderland, but I've got this Tim Burton-like image of the world in my head. The darkness. The bleakness. How England has changed; how the characters have changed as a result. I love that stuff, and you've not only imagined such a reality, you wrote about it in an expert way. By the time Ginny had gotten to Fred and George's place, I was near tears. Fred and George! They're such carefree, happy people! But not anymore, and I'm still so sadface about it. D:

One thing I really appreciate with your writing is that you didn't have to show how Ginny became pregnant. The story totally isn't about how. The pacing, the timing, of the start of a story is everything and you did it so well. Totally pulled me in. I wanted to know why Ginny was fighting, so I kept on. I also appreciate how you didn't reveal what the green light was in this chapter. I love, love, love that this chapter is for setting the stage, familiarizing readers with the new world you've created and the new characters formed by that world. I think it says a lot about your storytelling that you held back.

I was going to say something else, but I've totally forgotten it now. Oh, right. Yes, color me impressed, because I AM. Your writing is beautiful and I read it thinking, "Crap. Why didn't I think of that?" (About your actually phrasing and imagery, I mean, not the story itself.) So great chapter. Great story. And I look forward to seeing what happens to Ginny and Draco.
Name: ogygiasylph reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 12, 2010 10:08 am
Ouh I liiiike. You write beautifully, and you keep us hanging, waiting for the next action. Your portrayal of Draco's dangerous temperament and the horrors of the war is chilling, realistic, and tremendously enjoyable. When's the next chappie coming out, then? ;)

Author's Response: So I may have spazzed out a bit when I saw you had reviewed. ;) And it's a lovely little review, too. The chapter, unfortunately, took a month to come out (maybe more if it takes longer than a day to be validated!), so I hope you aren't too disappointed when you read the third chapter. Thanks so much for the review! :D
Name: Incognito reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on May 12, 2010 09:46 am
Mmm, this is a very dark piece. I like how you have Ginny angry that the Order uses non-Dark spells, which are more effective, whereas the Death Eaters can inflict damage with a sort of impunity that she clearly envies. If I were Ginny, I'd be envious and rankled too.

Your imagery is colourful, to juxtapose against the darkness of the plot and actions themselves. Colours are very important here, as is the image of those involved--colours of spells, of bruises, and of bright lights. You also take time to describe the greasy hair, the unkempt appearances, and the numerous white scars. Nothing is grey, nor is it black and white. The colours symbolise, to me, a living, breathing tale. It signifies that this is a story of action. It is war that takes place in the here and now--war that is exploding with colour.

Then you place someone like Fred, who cannot see at all, in the middle of it. We are given an entirely different point of view: war with no sight. I wonder if he will introduce us to the taste, touch, and smells of war. And I also wonder if his lack of sight provides him with another type of sight: insight. Will he provide us with the emotionless facets of war? I can already sense that he is cold. He does not see war the way the others do. This could make him a rather good leader, if he could get over his own self-pity. To me, he’s almost like a Mad-Eye Moony now. Perhaps I am reading way too much into the twins, especially since they are not the focal point of the story. Lol. But, I like how you have Fred, so let’s leave it at that.

Out of the transformations of the Trio, I especially like how you kept Hermione the same. I never saw her as one to break unless one of the others died, particularly Harry. Since Ron is the one who is now broken, it makes sense that Hermione builds herself up to be even stronger, for him. I do hope we see more of Ron, because I am very much intrigued by him.

I shall do my analysis of Ginny and Draco as I read more. I don’t like to assess them from the get-go. I will say that Ginny does seem a little dark--in a good way. Obviously, I already know that Ginny is pregnant with Draco’s child. The question is why. I shall have to read on and find out.

Lovely premise, my dear, and very well-written and thought out. Kudos.

~Lia
Name: thistattooedbody reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 11, 2010 10:35 pm
Oh, holy frick! Ugh, please update?! I'm dying here!!! Super sad face... :"(

I love the way you're writing Draco, kinda OOC, but I can see him acting like that after a good taste of war.

Keep up the good work!!!

Author's Response: I'm so sorry the update took a MONTH to happen! (And even as I type this, it hasn't been approved yet!) D: D: D: Forgive me? :( I'm glad you like the way Draco's turned out, though. He's super fun to write! And of course he's going to be a bit OOC. They ALL are. Like you said, it's more believable in context. Thanks so much for the review!
Name: GoldenFawkes reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 11, 2010 02:59 pm
I can't remember the last time I hated Draco so much, which means you did a really good job. I've been reading fanon Draco for so long I've forgotten how I could have hated him in the first few books (before I started reading fan-fiction.) So - well done, Roma!

Of course, I hate him and that doesn't do good things for me, but I suspect you've got a plan here.

Author's Response: Wow, I'm so glad I managed to make you hate him again (which is sort of weird to say, y'know, because most writers want their readers to love their characters . . . ). But yes! There is a plan to this. Somewhat of one, at least, and a little fuzzy on the details, but eventually you're learn to . . . er, maybe hate him less? Haha. IT'S ALL A SEKRIT. Thanks for the review, Goldie. ^_^
Name: LoversLoveLiarsLie reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 11, 2010 03:17 am
Okay, I usually abhor reviewing on FIA, because I favour FF.N, but I am too impatient for Thursday to come around so I can get on the website, I am drained and I am as smashed as a drunken hobo. In fact, I am currently writing this on Word so I don't misspell anything in my inebriated state. I am also using my thesaurus so I can use diverse words today. YAY!

Okay, onto the reviewwwwww:

Reading this . . . was like eating melted chocolate. That may not make sense right now, but let me go into further detail of my logic in saying this chapter was like melted chocolate.

The plot *and* the prose is sinuous and smooth, the textures and flavours of the moods and characters melt together into one immensely obese, delectable, alluring pile that you want to delight in for every second you have it, and you miss it once it is gone.

The metaphors and descriptions in this chapter were fucking awesome. (Am I allowed to swear on here? I never use FIA, so I have no idea). I also like how perverse Draco acted in parts of this. His blasé air was disturbing and the outcome it had on Ginny was quite pragmatic.

Although Ginny is kaput and part of her old self is lost, you still see little odds and ends of it searing through. I don’t know if that’s premeditated or not, but it’s superior. ^_____^

“Ginny thought it fitting that she now had visible proof of his guilt. Bloody hands for a bloody conscience.” –One of my favourite lines. I would say why, but I am too drunk to think of a reason. I like it, though.
"On second thought, however, that other body had far larger breasts—“ -- *giggles*
“That was the chuckle of someone who found something genuinely funny and simply couldn't resist the laughter that bubbled out.” -- *Still* my favourite line just because it’s so real and twisted.
You know, sometimes you flabbergast me, or should I say your writing flabbergasts me (not that you aren’t flabbergasting yourself). Anyway, what I’m trying to get at is how remarkable this was. At the end, I had this philosophical sense of shock when I realised this . . . world you’ve built up in this story . . . ? It isn’t real. The characters who snatch at your mind, and who mesmerize your imagination? They aren’t in the room with you. It’s just maddening and grand at the same time. Like magic. :O

Okay, I have no idea how much you can comprehend *any* of what I’m saying right now. I think I’m just saying things out of my ass in an endeavour to sound first-class but really I’m just baffling my thoughts and yours. I do hope you take pleasure in my tremendous review and I also hope you enjoyed the use of Microsoft Word’s thesaurus.

I think I’m going to do another review on FF.N on Thursday, too. I am quite fond of that bugger of a website.

For now, I am off to drink some more, watch Little Miss Sunshine, torture Buzz while finding some B/G smut to read, ‘cause *sings* I am in the moooood.

Lotsa love, Porsha.
Name: steppin_razur reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 10, 2010 06:47 pm
I Like it. Very dark. Will be looking forward to more.
Name: Anise reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 10, 2010 06:30 pm
I'm really enjoying this fic. Your Draco is very dark (quite the Captain Obvious statement), but... it's hard to explain, but there are DarkDracos that kind of slip over into characterizations that are just too much, and yours manages to walk that tightrope without falling off so far. It isn't necessarily about the terrible things that this character has done (because he's clearly done quite a few), but there's *some* kind of line that (IMHO) Draco just can't cross and still remain readable. Yours is on the believable side of that line, and that's hard to pull off.

Author's Response: Okay, I'll have to admit that I might have squeed a bit when I got your review. (I don't think that it's a coincidence that "squee" rhymes with "pee," either.)(That doesn't mean I peed. >_>) The way you described the line that all Dark!Dracos walk was fantastic, and makes me blush to see that I seem to have gotten it right (at least for that chapter . . . ). I never want any of my characters to seem overdone or cliched, so it's always rewarding as a writer to be assured that they weren't. Thanks for the lovely review!
Name: CCC reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 10, 2010 04:06 pm
Your Draco is scary-crazy.

Author's Response: Sometimes he gives me goosebumps. o.o Thanks for the review!
Name: Jack Tamara reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on May 09, 2010 05:15 pm
Ah, such a good ending to the first chapter! I have to sy I'm really enjoying this. I'm just in the mood for some dark stories, and this seems to fit the bill. can't wait to see some draco and ginny goodness in action. :)

XOXO, JT

Author's Response: JT! Uh, so, when/if you get this, remind me to reply to your message. >_> I am terrible about that.

Yay! I'm so glad you're enjoying it. And actually, I was in the mood for dark stories when I started writing this, because I was a little fed up with the lack of dark stories I actually liked reading. Don't worry, the Draco/Ginny goodness is going to happen. ;)

Late reply=lame, but I hope you'll excuse me. :)
Name: msm_2011simonebb reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 12:53 pm
love the scene between draco & ginny...

Author's Response: Why thank you! Let me tell you now that there will be many more in the near future . . . ;) Thanks for the review!
Name: msm_2011simonebb reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on May 09, 2010 12:42 pm

i like this plot...



Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you read more of it (there are another three chapters) and I also hope you excuse the fact that this reply is like ages late! :S
Name: gracie reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 11:59 am
loved draco thinking of baby names aries very funny!

Author's Response: Haha, thanks. That's actually one of the little snippets I wrote out when I was first brainstorming Broken Mirrors. I've got a couple of them that I plan to fit into the story, and that worked perfectly. I'm glad you liked it! It seemed like something that my Draco would do. Thanks for the review!
Name: The_Real_Weaslette reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 10:59 am
Its gettin' good. I enjoy the assholery Malfoy provides. :D

Author's Response: Thanks! And omg, iknorite? Malfoy is so much fun to write in this story because he's such a chillingly unpredictable asshole that he practically writes himself. And I think I may steal the word "assholery" from you. It's very awesome. ;D
Name: shezachica85 reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 09:53 am
i like it a lot so far. hope at some point we get some hot angry sex> lol they both seem like it would be very entertaining. pg women and hormones.. its bound to happen sometime.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like like it! And um, hello? Did you see the rating? EXTREMELY NAUGHTY means there is going to be at LEAST one bout of hot angry sex. Mmm, yeah. ;) And LOL, I love that you practically gave me an excuse for Ginny: "I didn't fuck you because I wanted to! It's those damn hormones of mine! They practically commanded me to jump you!" Yeah, it's definitely bound to happen. Thanks so much for the review! (Now I want to go write hot angry sex . . . )
Name: dancingonstars reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 07:35 am
this was really a really good suspenseful chapter. and i did like your draco. cant wait for more d/g interaction. and i cant wait to see how evyerone handles the news that ginnys pregnant with draco malfoy, the death eater. cant wait for the next update.
Name: bingobaby reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on May 09, 2010 02:36 am
I think this is good start am very interested in finding out more..

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm hoping you've read further now that other chapters are posted (not that they reveal terribly much) but I'm glad you enjoyed it!

And apologies for the late reply, of course!
Name: Shwadi reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 02:19 am
awesome chapter. update soon pls

Author's Response: Thank you! And if by "soon" you meant a month and two days, then I definitely did! :D
Name: babyangel reviewed II: Our adversaries are insane on May 09, 2010 12:15 am
i love the story!! T.T more! more!!!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! The third chapter is on its way as soon as I format it (as of midnight June 11th). ^_^ Thanks for the review!
Name: ficklepeach reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on Apr 06, 2010 07:45 pm
I love the way this has started! It is so gritty and unflinching to the affects of being in a war-torn country. The writing is extremely well done, with a great grasp on the imagery needed to create such a dark new world.
I hope that you update with more soon, because I am officially hooked!

Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to make the world as noir-esque as possible, and to really show the hopelessness of the entire situation, and I'm glad that it seemed to work. The update took a little bit longer than I was expecting, but that's because my high school and college officially ended as of yesterday (which is so exciting for me! NO MORE HIGH SCHOOL YAY!). So updates will probably be a lot quicker than the wait from chapter one to chapter two. :D
Name: ginnywitch reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on Mar 03, 2010 09:52 am
Love it muchly so far. Can't wait for next chapter =]

Author's Response: Hehe, thanks. Sorry for the wait on chapter two; life got busy. :S
Name: GoldenFawkes reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on Mar 01, 2010 01:41 am
Oh, boy. This is new and different. I'm not quite sure what to make of it at this point. I've never seen Fred and George this way, and it's got me intrigued. There's a lot of behind-the-scenes stuff going on, and I'm looking forward to finding out more with coming chapters.

Author's Response: It IS different, huh? It's so completely different from what I usually write that it sort of throws me for a loop every time I go to try to write it because I'm scared I won't be able to do it justice. The first chapter was more of a wham-and-bam introduction, so if you're a bit confused, well . . . that's the intention. ^_^ It'll all get explained--eventually. Fred and George were interesting to write especially because I wanted to completely screw them up while keeping them the same. A lot of people were surprised at how Fred and George are in here, but a lot more are just happy that Fred and George aren't dead. Thanks for the review, Goldie, and things will get explained in due time.
Name: mchen reviewed I: Defiance is beautiful on Mar 01, 2010 01:27 am
I'm pretty sure I know what the spell with green or red possible outcomes is all about, and that Draco is the cause of it being green, but to avoid possibly spoiling it for other readers, I shall keep it to myself. Great start -- can't help but wonder how you conceived of the elaborate entrance to the twins' place.

Author's Response: Hehehe. I actually thought that was the most transparent part of the entire chapter, but I figured I'd keep it a little on the DL until later. THAT particular thing isn't going to be the mystery of the entire story. There will be more, trust me. And honestly? I have no idea (about the twins' place). I think I just sat there and went, huh, that'd be cool, and so would this, and etc. I think I did that a bunch with the chapter. ^^;; Thank you for the review!
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