reviewed Chapter 8
on Mar 07, 2018 09:37 pm
Your notes are super obnoxious and take away from the story. Im stopping here because its not interesting and seems inflated. I dont mind long stories but this is just so dull and unecessary.
reviewed Chapter 3
on Mar 07, 2018 08:22 pm
Really not digging the yoda voice. Real dumb choice imo.
reviewed Chapter 1
on Jul 04, 2017 10:52 am
I'm new-ish to FIA and have been advised to read everything you write as a place to start...with the fair caveat that I'm going to get sucked in. I have to say that this is a fantastic beginning and I'm already lamenting how late I'll stay up reading! Wonderful first chapter; thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks! :) I just saw this review... I really appreciate it.
reviewed Chapter 2
on Jun 16, 2017 11:08 am
“You know what I like about you, Ginny? Your shy, girlish modesty. But you really have to learn how to say what you think. Stop holding back.” --HA! Just starting to read this glorious piece and I already love the air of the story. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thanks!! :) Yay, I didn't know anybody was still reading this thing!! You know.... it's always a good idea to have a plan in place to cover what happens if you're marooned on a desert island with nothing but a laptop, and mine is to revise a lot of D/G fics. ;) This would be one of them. I love it... and it does get a little convoluted at times. But I think it's all worth it by the end. :) I will r and r the rest of your fic now that the spring quarter is finally over, too.
reviewed Chapter 8
on Aug 22, 2016 02:40 am
I'm rereading because I fancied an incredibly long and complicated and gloriously written DG fic, and it's been years(?) since I last read it and I just wanted to say how much I'm enjoying it.
I'm still gripped by what's going to happen next because I can't quite remember all the twists and turns, and I love how confusing and plotty everything is, like waiting for a grand reveal at the end of a murder mystery.
Your characterisations of Draco and Ginny are spot on, particularly when Draco goes into his "other" persona of being all cold and hard and then switches back out so quickly, or when Ginny lets her instincts take over and then realises she's been too hasty and it's gotten her into trouble.
I really love the hints you're dropping about everything that's going to unfold like the there "Wait for me, Ginny." Or how quickly Ginny forgot about the crates from Lyme Regis just like Draco told her to. And I can't remember but is Lucius Malfoy still alive or is there something else going on? I can remember what's happened to Narcissa but not Lucius and I don't want to read the reviews incase of Spoilers!
I'm kind of in awe by how much you write and plot everything, definitely writing goals.
Author's Response: I didn't see this until now, and even though the reviewer will probably never see it, I still want to respond to it!! ;) It means so, so much to get a review like this-- something so beautifully written and thoughtful. And even six months later, it's so great to find it.
reviewed Chapter 4
on Dec 19, 2014 05:51 am
I love that Ginny argues with her brain much like I do. I have this back and forths inside my own head that sound remarkably similar to what Ginny is having. It makes me feel a little less alone. This just further shows your ability to connect with the reader, and I love it.
[It must have been that errant part of her brain that grabbed her hand and placed it on Draco Malfoy’s chest, thought Ginny, because she certainly hadn’t decided to do it.
She’d never touched him before. Not really. And oh, he felt so good. It was all she could think of. His muscles were so warm and firm under her hand, and she just had to skim her fingers along them, from his collarbone on down. And down. And down.]
Oh, it’s something making her do it! Or someone. But to be honest if I had Draco Malfoy in my sights I might be doing the very same thing in the middle of the night, so I can’t even chastise Ginny for touching on him when he’s asleep.
[“Marie,” he said, softly, but clearly. “Marie.”]
Someone’s fantasy just go ruined. Whoops.
Author's Response: You're reminding me of what I wrote! :) And thanks so much... okay, if you've read this before, then you know that Marie doesn't really get her due yet here. And in Shadow of the Past, she finally does. Which is a good reason to actually continue with Shadow. And one day, I WILL. So here's how it needs to work... if you watch Orange Is the New Black, you know how scared everyone is of getting thrown into solitary? (The shoe... except the word might not be "shoe", but just something that sounds like "shoe"... so because I don't want to sound like an idiot... I will just call it "solitary". :) Well, THAT would be the way to finally finish, post, revise, etc., all the Anisefics on FIA! Except that they weren't letting prisoners have computers in there... so it would need to be a revised version. Um, I'm not trying to give anybody any ideas... (backs slowly, slowly away)
Anyway. Wonderful review!
reviewed Chapter 3
on Dec 18, 2014 06:25 pm
[“Confidential much information is,” said the goblin. He rose to his feet, although it took Ginny a minute to figure out that he had actually done it. “For doing business with us, Miss Weasley, thanked you are.”]
The goblins speak Yoda, I see. I like how Draco is influencing from outside. It’s subtle, but it’s there. I also like that Ginny is a sculptor. It speaks to me on so many levels. You really mention little details that let me know you know your stuff. You don’t just breeze through it and hope to get it right. You’ve either sculpted or really done your research, and it shows.
[She started a few letters to Harry that she never finished, because there was nothing to say, really, and she crumpled them up and threw them away. He sent one owl to her that she returned.]
I think you just summarized that stage of a breakup where you realize it doesn’t matter what they have to say because it’s all just excuses anyway. I find myself cheering Ginny on for seeing that. I recently saw that. Go us!
[ cherry-flavored sextuple espressos]
Virginity, sex, and coffee? Nice job working that all into one repeatedly without over doing it. But every time I see it I want to make coffee. I’m not even kidding I need coffee now. Is this like product placement? I’m on to you, Anise!
[ Neville deserved a girl who had something in her heart to offer him.]
I love this nod to Neville because yes, he does deserve that, and I’m glad he got it. It also says a lot about Ginny that she recognizes that he is worthy of that. She sees the worth in others even when not seeing it in herself all the time.
[For a fleeting, perfectly mad instant, the only possible explanation seemed to be that her mother had somehow found out where she was going and what she was doing and had sent Draco Malfoy after her to give her a stern talking-to.]
This is perfect. I’m literally trying not to laugh because I’d interrupt everyone’s show. But this line is perfect and you need to know that I love it with everything in my heart because I have had those wild, crazy thoughts before. Moms are crazy and they will stop at nothing. Especially my mom.
I love that you insert a lot of blink and you miss it moments. It really amps the quality of the writing up in my opinion. It gives it something more. It makes me work for it. I don’t want an easy read, I want to be engaged, and you give me that. Apparently since you give me that, it means I’ll leave an epically long review. This has almost reached five hundred words. Whoops? I didn’t mean for it to get so long, I just got a bit carried away. But you deserve it, I suppose.
[“Oh, this car’s steered by a Global Elf-Positioning System, Weasley, never fear,” Draco said cheerfully, breaking off the odd stare. “Where to, by the way?” ]
THIS IS HOW SANTA WORKS, ISN’T IT?! I KNOW IT IS.
Author's Response: Oh... thank you! :) I just saw these reviews.... I'm so incredibly flattered and it's so sweet of you... well, anyway. I think when I look back on DDD that there are parts of it I would definitely revise. There are chapters that just go on too long (especially about 3/4 of the way through, I think.) And someday, it really would be great to do that. I actually have this entire other version of DDD that was based on the earliest draft... I think I really WILL post that, someday, somehow. It's not ready to go as is at all, so probably not anytime incredibly soon. :P
reviewed Chapter 2
on Dec 17, 2014 04:34 pm
[Did he just say something about tennis? There’s nothing particularly tragic about tennis…]
That line. Loved it! We get to see that Ginny is fascinated with Draco and his change. She doesn’t want to even admit it yet, which is realistic. Who really wants to ever admit something like that? I know I don’t. I’d also like to add that the fact the cellphone is pink has a certain charm to it as well. I snorted while trying not to laugh!
[“I’ll bet all of you could catch up with Malfoy, if you hurry,” she muttered under her breath, and was less than amused to see more than one person scamper off in his direction as if chased by wild kneazles in heat.]
Oh, look, it’s me. I love that we see in this chapter another side to Ginny. She is sarcastic as all hell. First chapter we saw independence. It’s like every chapter you reveal a bit more of her to us, so we get to know her a bit better. She becomes a friend in a way. It makes it feel real if you know what I mean.
reviewed Chapter 1
on Dec 16, 2014 07:58 am
I love the back and forth between Ginny and Hermione. It sets the stage for your version of Hermione very well in my opinion. I also love how independent you make Ginny. She doesn't back down when things get tough. You set up her character very well from jump.
Yes, I'm rereading this. But I love it so much, and it has been entirely too long. I'm also still bent on taking over the world.
I also like the mention of Valhalla. It makes me think of Skyrim. Now I want to read this and game. Instead I am reading this and doing laundry. Can't have everything we want in life, I suppose.
reviewed Chapter 12
on Dec 04, 2012 07:13 am
I really do love your writing and everything- Ginny is wonderful and Draco is simply perfect! But I think that Harry and Hermione are a triple mean-no offense meant! :) This is definitely one of my favorite series.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) This was just one of those fics where Harry had... some issues, let's just say. But Hermione does change for the better in the sequel.
reviewed Chapter 118
on Nov 26, 2012 07:27 pm
That horrid moment when a story you have grown attached to ends :(
Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked it! :) There's more coming soon, especially the rewrite project.
reviewed Chapter 36
on Nov 12, 2012 09:20 pm
I have been wondering where Ron was :)) Love the Weasley siblings solidarity
Author's Response: I tend to write a Ron and Ginny who are really close, although he can really go overboard. In this fic, he may have reason to...
reviewed Chapter 35
on Nov 12, 2012 09:01 pm
You know I've always been the tiniest bit fascinated by evolution and umm evolution in this chapter- science and art. I'm giggling over evolution, not something I ever thought I'd say but there you go
Author's Response: Thanks! I liked putting that content in here too.
reviewed Chapter 118
on Jun 28, 2012 05:25 am
It was good, but took a long time to get to the end. I found myself skipping some bits that I found a bit unnecessary. And there wasnt enough D/G :(
Author's Response: It did get to be too long, no doubt about that. But I think that in the revised version, the D/G will shine through the way it should.
reviewed Chapter 118
on Jun 11, 2012 09:31 am
Loved it,loved it,loved it!WOW what a wonderful ending,so beautiful and PERFECT!So looking forward to the sequel.This story is a perfect example of why u are one of my fav fanfic writers Anise-LOVED IT!
Author's Response: Thanks!! I loved this fic, even though it did get away from me to a degree (and I WILL fix and repost.)
reviewed Chapter 118
on Apr 02, 2012 02:34 pm
This was bloody fantastic! I loved the interaction with Draco and Ginny. I want to see Narcissa more in the sequel!!!
Author's Response: I'll definitely write more Narcissa. And I WILL update the sequel soon, too!
reviewed Chapter 118
on Mar 20, 2012 06:22 pm
I’d like to say I loved your story, it was a long journey, but I stuck through, and it kept me reading well into the night for days on end. I had to post pone my recent addiction just to read this until it’s end. However there were a few things that disappointed me through out this adventure. I must add first, that you are an incredible writer and please don’t take this in the wrong way. Of course, we love the world of Harry Potter, and fan fiction helps us to open our imaginations with endless possibilities. I do like when stories stick with the strict order of J.K. Rowling’s world, but I do enjoy those who step out of the boundaries. I being a rebel myself, can never walk a straight line in anything. -evil grin-
There are just a few things that I couldn’t accept. This is a world of witches and wizards and would always have their wands at the ready. It seemed a lot of the situations of the characters, were solved by muggle logic to meet the ends. It was hard to believe that someone gone to a school such as Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry would not use their knowledge of spells and physical training more, like a samurai would his sword. They’ve been through a war, no one quite heals from that really, and I would believe them to always be at the ready. There was just too much muggle technology involved and situations solved as a muggle would. For example, Ginny has a hard time know what to do in situations, when it was obvious she could use a spell to attain what she needed or help her in her tight situation. It’s kind of weird when I would know what I would do if I were a wizard, and yet the wizard in question is at a loss. A writer has to put themselves in other shoes and open up a world that the reader has never seen before. Something new and fascinating. I ,as a avid reader need that escape from the mundane world. It was just hard to believe that these were witches and wizards at all, and it was as if they let that world go. Ginny and Draco are purebloods, the wizarding world is all they know. Ginny may know a few muggle things because of Arthur, but I do believe that magic would be at the root of their being and she is a witch through and through.
Another thing that bothered me, was Ginny’s character. I know we don’t get to see much of her in the books and we really have nothing to base her personality on, but she seemed a bit frilly an weak and too childish. I would have figured her to be more of a stronger spitfire, less innocent and aware of her womanly powers and mind, despite being a virgin. It was said in the books that she was quite the strong spell caster. I being a strong willed and head strong woman, I get tired of seeing such fragile women in stories taking up all the lime light. However, I loved Draco’s character, he was very amusing and I really enjoyed his dialog more than you can say. You made him the apple of my eye. -wink- Damn pale marble god! He was quite comparable to Marius from Anne Rice’s Vampire Chronicles. Of course as the little devil we know and love him as!
I suppose the last thing that I noticed, was that this story was like a very well put together outfit, but with just too much accessories adorned. There is saying, something along the lines of “take one piece of jewelry off before you leave the house” Sometimes it seems there is just too much muck to tread through to get the meaning of a chapter. I’m sorry to say, that sometimes I’d find myself wanting to skim through a chapter, because there was just unnecessary dialog, or there seemed to be a filler situation that only just made me feel overly stuffed and wanting to just move on already.
All in all, with all that said, I really did enjoy this story and I do plan on reading more of your work. I especially like how you incorporated knowledge of art. I guess I could consider myself and artist, and I just loved how it was something I could totally relate too. You did a very terrific job of describing a world that I could totally see happening in my head, I guess you could say you painted a great piece of work in my mind!
May your pen never run out of ink! -Wednesday
Author's Response: Hey Wednesday! I don't know if you'll ever see this, but I haven't checked the reviews for DDD in a long time (clearly), so I wanted to respond. :) I love, LOVE long and detailed reviews like this one. The character of Ginny was hard to get a handle on, and I'm not at all sure that I succeeded. She is a person who had been through tremendous trauma, and that leaves scars that never heal. Some real personality problems can ensue. Even more to the point, DDD absolutely did get out of hand. The rabid plot bunnies escaped the pen, rampaged through the garden, and ate all the carrots. :P I'm going to revise it and repost a shorter version.
Thank you again! :)
reviewed Chapter 103
on Mar 19, 2012 10:35 pm
I dont want to be a poop head, but it's actually stalactites and stalagmites. The 'c' in stalactites can remind you they are on the ceiling and the 'g' in stalagmites, can remind you they are on the ground....
Author's Response: !!! HOW did I get that one wrong... I always learned that they're called stalagmites because you "might" trip over them. ;)
reviewed Chapter 3
on Mar 13, 2012 10:35 am
All I could think about was Gob Bluth syphoning gas out of girls' cars just so he could drive up and say "Car troubles?"
Author's Response: Snerk! Yes, I think it was very similar. Anyway, you have a lot of DDD left to go, so enjoy... ;)
And yay for the 1400th review!!
reviewed Chapter 52
on Mar 12, 2012 05:41 am
“Colin Creevey fucking mutant squids up the arse while they all swim about in giant vats of rotten tapioca pudding!” burst out Draco.
That image even gave Ginny pause for a moment.
What a laugh! XD
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I was amused by that one too. Maybe I'm easily amused. Anyway, there's much more of the fic to come after Ch. 52!