Aww, very sweet ending.
This chapter was a bit of a roller coaster. I loved the fluffy parts, but Ginny is right to wonder about Draco's stand on blood purity. The thing is, even if he doesn't feel Muggleborns should be killed, he probably will carry that 'purebloods are superior' thing for a long time.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) I love the fluff, as you can probably tell. And the blood purity issue will be addressed. And yeah, Draco is Draco, so there's no "let's adopt a Muggle baby" plan for him.
I really like your story, it is lovely. Please don't be discouraged and continue :)
Author's Response: Thank you. I am hoping to get back into it very soon. Thanks so much for taking the time to review and give me some encouragement. :)
Its a good story but Ginny seems to be forgiving Malfoy way to early. He was a Death Eater, and proud of it, who got one of her brothers maimed and another poisioned. She just seems way to willing to essentially sell out her family.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review and for the compliment. In my story, we only are HBP compliant, and as far as I can tell in canon, Draco was not very happy about being a Death Eater (physical changes and the crying etc from the book). And so far in my story, he has confessed to acting as a spy or being basically hidden away at Durmstrang.As for Ginny, she was attracted to him in school, and she believes his explanation of what and where he has been. Now they are completely isolated from the world, and it's been three months since she arrived. This may not be a lot of time, but she has never once considered this as selling out her family.
Thoroughly enjoying this fix, so please be inspired to keep writing. Nice calm before the next storm.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! For the review and the encouragement. I do get discouraged sometimes. I have been having a hard time working on this lately so I really do appreciate your kind words. And the next storm? Well, it's coming but not for a little while. Please keep reading - and reviewing, of course :)
I liked the concept of your spell -- that was very fascinating! I was a bit surprised Ginny didn't just accio the chocolate afterwards, but then you explained she couldn't use magic after already using so much magic, and it made sense.
I did feel Draco was a bit, hrm, too open with some of his feelings in this one, but we'll just lay that down to circumstance. Sickly people are always more vocal and sentimental. ^_~
Author's Response: Thank you. I really loved this spell. I even threw in the old "fire and ice" description for fun. And I try so hard to keep track of things like why she didn't accio the chocolate. It makes me crazy when I am going over it again and again, looking for loopholes or little inconsistencies. Not that I catch them all, but I know as a reader I always am thinking about those things.As for Draco, I think that yes he is emotional after what has happened, but also he is tired of denying himself what he wants, not something he has ever really done before. He's been in that house almost a year at this point, and I think it has definitely changed him.
Thank you again for the review!
so happy that ginny was able to heal draco... love the fluff!!
Author's Response: Yes, I don't know where this came from, but once it was in my head, I had to write it out. I love that Ginny is able to save him, too. Because it makes them more equals. It also really changes the dynamics of their relationship. So the fluff will definitely continue for quite a while. Thank you so much for reviewing!
:) I really did enjoy reading this. I mean not the pain... but the way you tell it! looking forward to more
Author's Response: Thank you! I really loved this scene. Not the pain :) but what it does for them. Thank you for reviewing, it means so much to get some feedback. I hope to post again soon.
Wow, I love this! Even though it's not beta'd, it still reads perfectly. I read the whole thing this evening, I can't wait for the next chapter. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I have worked really hard on the writing of this fic. I have relearned a lot of SPaG that I hadn't really used for many years. I'm so glad you are enjoying it. I hope that you do continue to read and, of course, review! Thanks again!
no broom light for you because you ended that chapter LIKE THAT. aaaah... more more :P
Author's Response: sorry :( More to come very soon. Thank you for reviewing again!
Hrm, I do wonder what Ginny saw Draco doing. I don't think it's 'evil stuff' somehow.
Cute chapter. ^_^
Author's Response: Thank you. I personally like the fluff, so it was nice to finally get to some of it. Hmmm, evil stuff. Well, I can't really say anything. Thank you for reviewing, as always. Glad you liked the chapter.
what could the noise be?? love that ginny & draco are friends now..
Author's Response: Yes, I love that they are friends, too. And as for the noise, I'm assuming you're referring to the end? Well, you will find out in the next chapter! Thanks again for reviewing!
cute chapie!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
not sure, where i let off, on this great story!! so i am reading from this chapter.. now ginny know the real deal: draco being spy,etc.. great chapies, onward to the other chapters!!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, now we know a lot of the back story, but not quite all. That won't come out until later. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
I only just started reading your story - and it's great!! I really love it and am looking forward to read more :)
Author's Response: Thank you! For the review and the compliment! I have been working like mad on this fic. It is so close to being finished. I will probably start updating more frequently. I hope you continue to enjoy it - and review it :)
This is so good! How embarassing for Ginny. Who was really following her I wonder? Or was it her imagination?
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, that would be a scene I would not want to live - totally embarassing. As for who was out there? It really was her imagination. I don't want you to keep reading and wondering when that's going to be answered. But I'm glad you asked; I never considered that someone would think that. Thanks again for the review!
You know, whenever I read scenes like that last one, I always feel this little pride that I am not a vocal sleeper. All that humiliation is just not an issue for me, but for Ginny. Well, I laughed. Poor thing, and Draco's reaction was priceless.
I enjoyed this chapter, though I admit I wanted to chuck something at Ginny when she decided to lock herself in her room for three days. Talk about immature.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review -again! Yeah, poor Ginny, right? I almost didn't put that scene in there because Draco had such a similar dream, but I hope it still works because hers was definitely much worse - and I needed something to get the ball rolling between the two of them. Plus, his reaction was one of my favourite parts. It's funny you didn't like her behaviour during the "fight", someone else blamed him. Thanks, as always.
Hehe, I rather enjoyed the banter in this one. There was a nice balance of humour and seriousness as well, which I think worked.
I was a bit confused about the name thing. I mean, they're discussing the fact he's not comfortable using her name, and then they both say each other's name and don't even blink. Then, of course, they go back to surnames. It's nothing major, just something I noticed.
Author's Response: Thanks.He calls her Ginevra because they are drinking and she is upset. He drops the mask for her. She also lets her guard down when he comforts her. She decides to go back to Malfoy the next day, and he notices it so he goes back to Weasley. He said he wasn't comfortable calling her Weasley cuz it reminded him of her brother, but that was a lie. He was not wanting to discuss how or why he said Ginevra when he woke up from his naughty dream.
Sorry for the confusion. All of those name things were done intentionally. I wanted to show that, especially for Draco, their relationship already has potential for being more than house mates.
Okay, hopefully the paragraph things work! If not, sorry. Also, thanks again for the review.
loved it!!
Author's Response: Thank You!!!
Cliffhanger end of sorts! I really liked this chapter though. It's nice to get some answers and here Draco's side of the events! Great writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the compliment, too. More to come very soon.
How embarassing for Draco to get caught in that situation, but it certainly was funny for me to read.
I liked this chapter, and there were some really lovely moments where I felt the emotions of the characters, but I do think you could work a bit harder on getting that emotion coming through the words. A lot of the time I felt the conversation was a bit abrupt and without feeling, if that makes sense. If you're struggling with getting the dialogue to show that emotion, then consider using action to emphasise what is not being said. I think it would make your characters much stronger and more believable.
That's not to say they are not believable. I just felt, particularly in this chapter since they were discussing such emotional things, that there was an almost robotic feel about the way they were saying the words, as if they were just reading scripts. I know you can get that emotion, so I really encourage you to keep that in mind for future chapters. This story has a lot of potential, and I think with a bit of polishing it could be something really special. ^_^
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I think I was trying to keep Ginny distant because she is trying to not get emotionally involved with him. But I do see your point. It's interesting that you reference a script because I have been a performer for years. Maybe I am used to just fleshing out the words and emotions for myself. That's not an excuse, but it's something I should be aware of when writing. As for using action to describe it, I noticed that I did not do that very much in much of the dialogue. I'm such a subtext kind of girl, and again, this is something I need to work on. I will keep this in mind as I continue working on this fic. It's kind of kicking my butt right now. Thanks again.
Can't wait for next chapter. Can't wait to find out more. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I should be posting very soon.
Wasn't sure how else to respond to you, so here we go with another review.
I got that she was attracted to him, and I guess that's why I was confused by the 'raping' and 'torture' comment. I would understand more if she thought herself a whore because 'she' was attracted to him and wanted to be physically intimate with him. But she called herself a whore because she thought he was going to rape her, and rape, as we know, is a very violent and traumatising act (and certainly not something you throw around lightly). I don't know, I suppose I was just a bit confused.
Author's Response: Okay. I get your confusion. I think it is missing something in her thoughts. Thank you. I will look at it again. Also, I forgot to tell you that their ages when Ginny enters the house are 23 and 24. I have the entire thing outlined and have tried to make sure all the dates line up, but let me know if it gets confusing. Thanks for taking the time to reply (review) again.
Very interesting. So now we know why Voldemort wants Ginny. I'm assuming since Hermione married Ron three years ago that Ginny and Draco are much older than I originally thought them. How old are they exactly?
This one part confused me: Ginny stood in the kitchen for a moment berating herself. Oh my God, Ginny. Were you or were you not just thinking that he was going to torture and rape you? Maybe you really are a whore. Harry was right all along. No wonder he never married you. He knows you are a pathetic little whore!
I don't understand why Ginny is calling herself a whore when she apparently thought he was going to torture and rape her. It seems a very twisted logic, and makes me wonder what has happened to her before that for her to even think such a thing.
I'll admit, I do find your Draco very 'nice', and while that's not necessarily a bad thing, there are moments where he seems to not really have anything of his old personality. Does that make sense? I also found the switching between 'thoughts' a bit choppy and confusing again -- especially that part where Draco brushes against her.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, even the criticism. Well, I just looked back over it and realized that the italics didn't transfer for the thoughts in this chapter. I will be going back over this. Sorry. As for her reaction, she was inhaling his scent when he came up behind her and that was directly after she had been thinking about him raping, etc. Maybe this was not clear enough that she was feeling an attraction to him. That's what I was going for. She keeps finding herself attracted to him and wanting him to be someone that it would be okay for her to be attracted to, but she believes she shouldn't. And Harry pretty much treated her like a whore for years, and that has affected her. So Draco is nice. I know and I was not intending him to be such a nice guy, but I think that in this vaccuum they are living in, he can let his guard down with her unlike anyone else. Or I just can't seem to write him that way. I still am struggling with this part of his personality, and I hope that at some point in the fic (when they leave?) we will get to see a bit more of the snarky Draco. Thanks again for the review. I really do appreciate the constructive criticism.
Intrigued! :)
Author's Response: I will take that as a good thing. Thank you!
keep writing... what to see where the plot will go?
Author's Response: I have been. A lot. And I am discovering that the more I write the harder it gets, to finish and to post. Don't worry, I already know how it ends so it will be finished. I should be posting the next chapter very soon. Thanks for the review!