reviewed Chapter 1
on Jun 17, 2011 11:50 pm
I have very mixed feelings about this story, and it has nothing to do with your writing and everything to do with the relationship you have constructed for Draco and Ginny. Thing is, these two are both a little broken, both suffering in the dark, and two people of that kind don't make a healthy relationship. So there's a part of me that thinks they shouldn't be together at all - especially since it is based on sex. Yet it's Draco and Ginny, and I naturally want Draco and Ginny to be together because that is the pairing I like. Hrrrmmm.
So, to compensate for this, I'm going to pretend that after a few encounters like this, Draco and Ginny discover there really is more; that the light Draco sensed in her is indeed real, and that they do find their place in the world again.
Imagined futures aside, I thought this was a very interesting one-shot. I would have liked to have seen it expanded on, but it's really not necessary. You did capture what you needed, and while I feel that Ginny is putting more stock on an imagined darkness, that in itself is still realistic. A lot of the times we do surround ourself with a weird, distorted sense of worth, almost guilt when we undergo dark or traumatising events. I think your Ginny illustrates that, but I believe Draco is right and that she can find her light again.
Right, now that I've rambled your ear (eyes?) off, I'll end my review. :P
Author's Response: I love that you reviewed because you are one of my top three favourite D/G writers. As to your feelings on the story, that is almost exactly the sort of impression I was going for as I wrote it, so I feel very pleased that that came across. Especially since this sort of writing isn't my usual; it was a random plot bunny that wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it; I wrote it in about an hour... I kind of feel that if it had been a longer story, that would have been exactly what happened.