This has a very, urban combat feeling to it. I like how it feels war like but isn't the war plotline from canon. Keep it up :)
Hey, you got to posting it here! Love this story to bits. Awesome, unique premise and masterful execution. So how's the next chapter coming? :P And psst...you should increase the picture's size to better show it off.
Author's Response: Sure did! The next chapter is posted, not that you've reviewed it here or at FFN yet, missy. Picture is fixed, feel free to fawn over Hannah's brilliant. ;) Haz
I really like what you've done with this Draco. It's funny how Ginny is kind of the typical Draco character in this story, and even though Draco isn't characterized as a typical Ginny - he very much is himself - he seems tamer and less obnoxious because Ginny is filling that role. Not that she's obnoxious as a character - I think she's wonderful proof of what growing up in Malfoy Manor does to a person - but she's definitely obnoxious as a person. What you've done with the possibilities for these characters is way more awesome than I can express. You're not only showing what growing up as a Malfoy does to someone's personality and world view - or proving it, because we have canon Draco to show it, and YOU writing Ginny the same way only supports that idea - but you're also showing how the war changed Draco. He's not the same Draco that Ginny knows from her universe and the reason is because of the war and how Draco had to adapt to his lot in life afterwards. IT'S SO GOOD. I can already see how complicated the plot is going to get, and that is only enhanced by how well you've portrayed the characters. I can't wait to see them grow more as people. I can't believe I've read so little of your writing. Yours is a talent I've truly missed out on these past few years.
And last comment: It's funny how Draco had this nice inner dialogue about trying to get Ginny out of prison/hospital without tying himself to the crime, and yet he goes and kicks in a door and announces his presence. Yeah, no one has to know he was the one who did it... except for the Healer he knocked out when he got inside. Good going, Draco. You deserve to sit in a secret chamber inside Malfoy Manor and hide.
That's all.
Author's Response: I know, I think this Draco is my favourite (and actually I think this Ginevra is my favourite too, in some ways) that I've written. The thing to remember about my Draco here is that he has a strong sense of familial loyalty, and he's willing to work hard for his family's success - so I suppose he's a tiny bit of a Puffle in that sense - but at the same time he's quite ruthless and willing to throw anyone who gets in his way under the Knight Bus. u_u I don't think any of my fics, especially my older ones, are as good as this one so far so I'll excuse you for not reading much of my stuff. ;)Haha, thanks for the last comment - Hannah and I didn't pick this up (clearly we aren't cut out to be Aurors) so I'll have to fix that up when (if) I revise the story after I finish it.
Thanks for reviewing! Haz
I'm validating your next three chapters and figured I'd go ahead and read the first two before doing that. :) You've crafted a really intriguing story here. You don't give away too much information too soon, which makes the mystery all that more interesting. I'm really curious about this alternate reality Ginny arrived from. Is she merely jumping from one universe to another (and if so, how/why?) or is she time traveling? Or will she time travel in this universe? I think the best stories are the ones that make us constantly ask questions, and you're doing a great job of that. :)
Author's Response: Haha, you are an asset to this site. ;) I'm really glad you enjoyed what I've got so far, hopefully I don't drop the ball later (pressure's on!). There's a note in my FFN profile and in the Story Notes here sort-of explaining the alternate reality, since I've had a few questions on it, so feel free to check it out. Thanks for reviewing! Haz :)
I anxiously await to see what happens with this plotline, I haven't a damn clue whats going on at this point :)
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woah. This is dark and twisty. I like it.
Author's Response: Thanks, hope you've enjoyed what's up so far. :)
Wow, this is such an interesting premise! Loving the AU aspect and how mean Ginny is!
Author's Response: My version of Ginevra is one of those characters I love to hate - she's a bigoted bitch, yet at the same time I love her attitude. ;) Thanks for reviewing!
I completely adore what you have up so far! I must confess though that I looked up the one on ffn and I'm just really excited to see the rest of this unfold. Your Ginevra's reaction to Harry is priceless as is Harry's to his Ginny threatening with unforgivables. ;) Fantastic work!
Author's Response: Haha, very sneaky. I'm glad you like it, thanks for reviewing!
Wonderful I love it when Harry is talked down to at all and you are good at it! I can't wait to see what you write next. YAY YAY YAY!
Author's Response: It's true, Harry sucks. ;) The next chapter will be up soon! Thanks for reviewing.