Ginny breathed deeply. It was all just a horrible dream. It was not possible that Vincent Crabbe was in her dorm trying to determine whether his bum looked big or not. It was not possible that boys were even in her dorm.Category: Long and Completed
She pinched herself and bit her lip as pain seared through her arm. Okay, it wasn’t a dream, but clearly something wasn’t right.
It *did* get serious, didn't it? But again, very believable. It'll be fascinating to see exactly what your Lucius Malfoy is up to, and what you end up doing with him as a character (I know that some authors have found his qualities-- personally, I've never been able to do it. :P
Author's Response: Well, I'm glad you still thought it was believable. When I was going over this again I wondered if some of these parts were too dramatic for the story, but I figured it wasn't so out there that it couldn't work. I have grown to love Lucius as a character over the years (in fact, I have written a few Lucius/Ginny fanfics), but I'm afraid he doesn't quite get the love and attention he deserves in this story. I think I would approach it very differently if I were writing this story now.
Wow, what a chapter. I think that you pulled this Lucius off, and I
ll tell you why. It's a long story, but you'll see the point... hopefully it WILL make sense in the end. ;)
Your Lucius reminds me of a character in an episode in *This American Life* I heard on NPR during the drive through Utah while I was moving from Nashville to Portland (it's a 2,500 mile drive... we listened to a lot of NPR... anyway...) An author for the New York Times was writing a nonfiction book in which his gangster uncle was a character. He went up to Attica (I think that was the federal prison) to interview him several times. The uncle had been very cooperative, but there kind of came this point where he just really, really wasn't. In fact, he eventually said to the author-- his nephew, remember-- that he wanted him to stop writing the book, and that if he didn't, he was going to kill him in this, that, and the other way. Well, the author's grandma intervened, and that's why the uncle didn't kill him. So the grandma reminded me of Narcissa.
The point is that I do think an analogy can be drawn: your Lucius does have some kind of limit to what he'll do, and some kind of appeal can be made to him on some level, so he's not totally inhuman, but he's a lot like a Mafia don (I think, anyway.) Authors can go a lot of different ways with him. A Lucius/Ginny fic, I could NOT do, and I know it, but I think you'd write a good one. And he lives in a world that is not like Ginny's world, or the Weasley world. That's one of the main things that, to me, is so fascinating about D/G-- Draco and Ginny really do come from such different worlds.
Anyway! It'll be fascinating to see where it all goes from here. :)
Author's Response: Oh, good. I'm glad you saw what I was trying to get across. I've never seen Lucius as completely inhuman -- I think his actions in Deathly Hallows is a testament of that -- so it seemed fitting to me for him to relent because of Narcissa appealing for Ginny and showing him how he would feel if it were his own son he was handing over to Voldemort.
What you said about Draco and Ginny coming from different worlds is exactly why I love the pairing. There are so many possibilities with these two, and each new setting you place them opens a whole new dimension of emotions and situations to explore.
So the question after the last chapter was, of course, how the story was going to develop from that point, because the original situation had been resolved. Draco and Ginny were back in their own bodies. One of your choices was to simply end it there, probably by adding something epilogue-ish along the lines of "Draco and Ginny realized that they cared about each other after all, they kissed, they started dating, the end." But while I guess that could have worked, it wouldn't have been very satisyfing, because too many unresolved issues still remained. You chose the more intriguing (and difficult) option, which was to continue the narrative.
You really did take it in a direction that worked. I know from your notes that this was a very early fic, but I think that you developed it in a direction that picked up unresolved threads. The B/G content needs to be completed, which wouldn't have happened if the fic had abruptly ended after Draco and Ginny returned to their original bodies. Personally, I think that Blaise doesn't care about Ginny very deeply, but it's something they do have to work through. And you continued the theme of something-- a character, an idea, a communication-- being "switched." I look forward to more! :)
Oh, btw... my first D/G shall never see the light of day. SPaG were most definitely not the problems. What makes it worse is that I'd actually had writing published then, and I should have been able to do a better job (non-fiction, though. That makes it okay, right? Right? No.) You just don't want to know. The Mall of America was involved.
Author's Response: I believe this is is my 100th review for this story, and what a lovely one it was. That being said, I feel like I can't say anything to this, because I was basically nodding me head and going "yes, exactly" to everything you wrote. *laughs*
The Mall of America. Now that is intriguing . . . in a slightly morbid, "oh dear" kind of way. I'd still probably read it though. I have a fascination with reading author's early work, because you get to see a sense of their 'beginnings' and can piece together how their 'style' all came about. It's always an interesting experience.
I think that your Pansy might just have more sense than that. ;) She was very perceptive the first time she broke up with Draco, and I just don't think that anything has happened to make her change her mind. The characters have so many different motivations, and we have the Cyrano plot device! But it works here. Once again, it fits into the theme of something significant being switched and incorrectly interpreted.
Out of the group, Blaise clearly has the most to lose from the truth coming out. If Ginny learns that he isn't the truth author of the poem, not only does he lose her, but there's also the chance that his friendship with Draco will end up being strained. It's also intriguing that you didn't take the easy way out and keep Hermione in reserve as his love interest, because he'd be more likely to be nonchalant if he knew that he could simply turn to her. So it'll be very interesting to see where this goes! :) And, oh yes. Nobody will ever, ever, E.V.E.R. read the "Mall of America" story. Although maybe I should get points (which can be redeemed for valuable prizes in the sixty-fourth dimension, of course), for coming up with the idea that Ginny was going to brew a love potion *before* HBP even came out. See, she got in trouble for it, and Draco was involved, and Dumbledore sent them both to a location where they absolutely wouldn't be able to use magic. Nothing extinguishes the possiblity of magic like a mall. And the Mall of America is the biggest mall in the world... and I used to live only a few miles away from it... so it made sense, in a horrible way... (runs and hides)
Author's Response: Pansy . . . well, she's not stupid, but you'll see what happens. You're right in saying that the characters have so many different motivations.
I almost feel sorry for Blaise in this story. He's not a bad guy, but I have an intense dislike of people who appear 'perfect'. Not that he is, but you know what I mean. Anyway, he's definitely the one who will lose in this scenario should Ginny learn the truth. As much as I like Blaise/Hermione, I just didn't feel the two were right together for this story. It just felt a bit too convenient, since Hermione and Blaise were both the ones to help Draco and Ginny while they were in each other's bodies.
You intrigue me even more with your Mall of America story. I am incredibly fascinated at /how/ you made that work. :P
I'll review these two chapters separately, but I think that there will inevitably be some spillover... anyway...
Plots here, there, and everywhere! ;) Well, Blaise isn't as manipulative (so far, ast least) as Draco is turning out to be. I think that some of those plans just MAY come back to bite him on that perfect arse of his. What Pansy did in taking him back does make sense, although I still think it would have better for *her* if she hadn't. Still, I can easily see how, and why, she would have been weak. Deep down, I think that she knows it isn't going to work with Draco in the long run. (Maybe she'll smack him upside the head a few times...)
Author's Response: Draco really isn't a nice person. Well, I wouldn't say he's /awful/, but selfish definitely sums him up. Pansy probably should have known better, but I think we all make silly mistakes like that sometimes when we're young.
There's something I just love about Crabbe and Goyle in this fic. I'm not even sure what it is, but they're very endearing. :)
Hermione is great here, and your characterization works so well for this fic. (You're doing a really really job of keeping up the same light, easy touch that you need in order to make this work, btw.) She's hilarious as the not-outstandingly-suave matchmaker. Again, I kind of hope that Pansy hits Draco upside the head with something here... (pictures a final Pansy/Crabbe/Goyle pairing...) Well, maybe not so much. ;) Draco really *does* have an annoying side to his character; it's very realistic, and we can see why it's taken so long for him and Ginny to get to this point. The barriers between them aren't artificial. Anyway... looking forward to more!
Author's Response: I have a definite soft spot for Crabbe and Goyle. They feature in quite a few of my fics -- especially Goyle. One of these days I am going to write one-shots for both of them. I just need to find two females who can match their brilliance.
I'm glad you think Hermione's characterisation is good. I used to write a lot of fics around her, but Ginny is just so much more exciting to write about (and suits Draco better), so she has been shoved to the side of late. I do think she has her place as a supporting character, though. I certainly can't imagine using anyone else for her role in this one.
I've never been a fan of 'perfect' Draco. I like my characters to have flaws -- it makes it so much more interesting to write -- but I just don't see him as being a particularly nice guy in that 'typical' sense. He seems more like the person who would unintentially do a 'nice' thing for someone else while trying to get his own way. In any case, Ginny certainly knows that being with Draco Malfoy will be no picnic - hence, why she is happy to stay with Blaise. At least for now . . .
Mwah ha! I just love your Pansy. And she actually DID hit Draco upside the head! (does dance of glee) The boy richly deserved it, as well as being forced to listen to all the screeching. ;) Yes, she was a little over the top; she'd earned the right to go there, though. But when it reached the point where she couldn't help thawing towards Draco again, that was believable, too. I dearly love her evil plots in Blaise's direction. He's hardly an innocent victim in all of this, and I'd have to say that awarding him any medals for sheer niceness over our Draco would truly be drawing from facts not in evidence. :P
Oh, and also, I really, really appreciate that you didn't randomly make Draco into a male slut. That's much too common in Hogwarts-era D/G fics, and 90% of the time, it simply doesn't work. I've seen cases where it does, but *not* in this type of fic-- in fact, it's very jarring when it shows up at points just like this (as it generally does.) Here, I think what we're seeing is that even though there never really was anything between Draco and Pansy except long-standing friendship and attraction, he does like her, deep down, he does respect her, and he didn't just randomly have sex with her before moving on to the other 345,347.9 girls/boys/whatever (all by the age of 16 or 17, mind you.) So, it's a nice touch. :) More soon, I hope!
Author's Response: Hehe, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought Draco deserved to be hit upside the head for what he did. The boy thinks he can get away with far too much, and he is very much mistaken -- at least where Pansy is concerned. I like to think that they're such close friends she can't help but thaw towards him, but there are also other reasons . . . (which you have no doubt guessed already. *laughs*)
I really dislike Draco as the male slut character unless it suits the fic, and I find (like you) that Hogwarts Era fics do not work in that respect. Really, there isn't much more I can say. You've already said it, but it's always nice to know one's sentiments are shared. ^_^
A long, long day.... anyway... What I really enjoyed the most in this chapter was the subtle complexity of the characters. Pansy; oh, I just love your Pansy! Now, talk about someone who isn't a "nice" character... She isn't exactly pleasant to Ginny, and she certainly isn't sweet, but deep down, I think that she does like and admire her. I'm not so sure that given the situation as it is, Pansy and Ginny would succeed in forming a real friendship, but who knows-- over time, they might.
You *did* surprise me by revealing that Pansy had some kind of hand in sabotaging Blaise's relationships, although honestly, I wouldn't let him off the hook by saying that her influence was a decisive one. Again, Blaise was *far* from the innocent victim here (and for all his insistence that he really cared about Ginny, he stopped liking her as much when she had an artificially induced case of the flu... yes, some really deep emotions there. :P) And Draco was just a treat in this chapter. :) His feelings for Ginny are real and believable. It's obvious that they're probably not going to jump into bed together, and I don't really see any blatant smut coming up, but somewhere down the road, it would clearly happen for them. (Tender, yet hot smut, that is.)
There's something about that phrase... "slumbers of the night"... remember that song "Shadows of the Night"? REMEMBER it?
We're running with the Shadows Of The Night
So baby take my hand, you'll be all right
Surrender all your dreams to me tonight
They'll come true in the end
Mwah hahahaha!! Bet you remember it now. :) Vengeance is mine for making me remember not only The Final Countdown, but the techno version.
Author's Response: Nooooooooooooooo! *clamps hands over ears* Er . . . eyes? Well, either way, I am not going to succumb. I shall resist!
No, I don't see Pansy as particularly nice. She's got heart, but it's whether she feels like responding to that and actually allowing herself to mellow that's the main thing. Actually, I don't really see Blaise, Draco or Pansy as particularly nice characters. They're all very flawed, though I think all have their good points -- as any human does. And Ginny is just as flawed as the rest of them when you think about it -- though her intentions are often more innocent. I don't know if I see Pansy and Ginny ever being close friends. I think they will learn to tolerate each other, but, as you said, it would take a long, long time for them to become real friends.
I completely agree about Blaise not being innocent. Pansy may have helped in little ways to sabotage his relationships out of jealousy, but it was Blaise who really made the decision to ditch the girls. I doubt he would have needed much help from her, and a lot of his 'rant' was more venting his feelings than the truth. I think all of us like to find someone to blame when we know we're in the wrong. I do see Blaise as being quite shallow, but I was rather amused when I was editing this and discovered I had used an almost identical plot in A Marriage of Convenience (Ginny getting given a flu-inducing potion and having Draco catch her; I clearly need to get new ideas, haha). Still, I think while Blaise's feelings for Ginny were "pond" depth at best, he probably will do much better with Pansy. If anything, she will keep him on his toes.
I never wanted the DG relationship in this to be particularly smutty -- not just because I don't like writing smut, either. It just didn't seem to fit for them to have an overly 'passionate' relationship straight away -- and I definitely don't see them having sex any time soon. They were friends first, and it took them quite a while to get beyond that. I think they'd be the type to slowly work up to it, as you said.
Sometimes, Ginny just wanted to break mirrors so she'd be certain to live for another seven years. She wondered if seeing her face splinter like Draco's mind already had would be worth it.Category: Works in Progress
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I'm really enjoying this fic. Your Draco is very dark (quite the Captain Obvious statement), but... it's hard to explain, but there are DarkDracos that kind of slip over into characterizations that are just too much, and yours manages to walk that tightrope without falling off so far. It isn't necessarily about the terrible things that this character has done (because he's clearly done quite a few), but there's *some* kind of line that (IMHO) Draco just can't cross and still remain readable. Yours is on the believable side of that line, and that's hard to pull off.
Author's Response: Okay, I'll have to admit that I might have squeed a bit when I got your review. (I don't think that it's a coincidence that "squee" rhymes with "pee," either.)(That doesn't mean I peed. >_>) The way you described the line that all Dark!Dracos walk was fantastic, and makes me blush to see that I seem to have gotten it right (at least for that chapter . . . ). I never want any of my characters to seem overdone or cliched, so it's always rewarding as a writer to be assured that they weren't. Thanks for the lovely review!
Clearly-- a very disturbing chapter, creepy characters, and you really do get Malfoy Manor right, which I don't think almost anybody ever does!!! The creepy creepiness of it all... (shudders) But again, it works very well.
It really is so difficult to write a good dark Draco, because there are so many pitfalls into which the writer can, well, fall. But I think you've captured the key to what makes this Draco work in Narcissa's cold statement that her son is right on the edge of losing his sanity. This Draco is being torn apart by the acts he's committed and continues to commit; the carnage he wades through rips his mind to shreds, and the dark Draco's that don't work are the ones whose minds remain so carelessly whole. It's as if this Draco has a part of his character very deep within that still is horrified beyond words by what the rest of him is doing, but this part is so deeply buried that it's hard to believe right now it could ever come out. That's the part, I think, that really wants to care about Ginny, that reaches out for her even when his hands are stained with blood.
Ultimately, I really don't know if this Draco can come back from what he's seen and what he's done (or Ginny either,) but it'll be fascinating to see how it all plays out.
Draco is in love with Astoria. Astoria is in love with Harry. Harry is in love with Ginny. So, how did Draco end up married to Ginny?Category: Works in Progress
This should be interesting, because the way in which Draco and Ginny will work things out is far from obvious. The idea that Draco would already have been pursuing someone else is actually quite believable, and it points up the theme of just how oblivious he is to *everyone's* feelings here. (snerk) I look forward to Ginny slapping him down a bit.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really honored that you read this, since I always get excited when well-known DG authors read and review my work. :) The DG relationship will kind of change from time and time, and should fluctuate and get kinda rocky at points. Don't worry--they'll work it all out though. As for Ginny....with someone like Draco antagonizing her so much, I think you could be right about the slap. Or at least a verbal bashing. :) Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Highly, highly amusing! I really think it works extremely well for Draco to be jerk-like (jerkesque? jerkoid?) at this point. It would not be in character or believable for this Draco to develop in any other way... yet. And it makes sense that the first positive things he'd notice about Ginny would be physical, such as the apples-and-vanilla scent and the nice arse. I particularly liked Ginny going for the kitchen knives, too. They've both got a long way to go, and it's far from obvious how they're really going to get there, which is much more interesting.
All Ginny wants is to get the upper hand just once with drool-worthy hunk of man candy and callous playboy Draco Malfoy before he moves on to his next careless conquest. So how did this simple plan lead to time travel, nefarious plots involving the most infamous whorehouse in the wizarding world, and the teenaged Draco’s achingly sweet, chocolate-flavored kisses? Even Draco Malfoy was innocent once, as Ginny learns all too well…Category: Long and Completed
Chapter ONE HUNDRED EIGHTEEN Quote of the Day:
THE LAST CHAPTER
The minutes ticked by, long enough for Ginny to know that against all reason, all common sense, she still wanted impossible things from him. But she would leave. Even after today, even when her body ached from him and for him, when she could feel that he had begun to shape her to him, she would turn around and leave him. I will, I will, she thought.
“You don’t understand,” said Draco.
“Oh?” Ginny said stiffly. “At least he hadn’t touched her, she thought. She would not be able to find the strength to pull herself away from him, and she knew it.
I have decided to stop posting any more of DDD until the entire fic is completed to the end. I probably should have done this a couple of months ago when I originally considered simply stopping 100%. However, I’m doing it now. I just feel too tired and beaten up to want to continue this process of putting it out there anymore at the moment. If anybody wants to know more, I can be reached through email in the author link.
Draco's deepest, darkest secret is accidentally revealed to the world. A hissy fit ensues.Category: Completed Short Stories
I loved this and laughed a LOT. And I must, MUST ask... was it in any way inspired by Tom Felton's comment about Draco's character. "He's so evil, and what's with that hair? How does he have time to get his roots touched up every two weeks?" Poor Tom, he's had to do the same thing all along...
Author's Response: Oh my God, did he really say that? That's so funny, was it part of an interview/do you know where I can find it? (So in answer to your question, no it wasn't inspired by that comment, but I might pretend it was in the future... shh!) And I'm so glad you liked it.
Living in captivity can only last so long. ***COMPLETE***Category: Completed Fiction, Works in Progress
Written for the LJ DG Fic Exchange 2010 and winner of the Best Angst award. The rating is for the warnings.
Well, now I can FINALLY leave a review. I like to read other people's reviews, you see, and there have been some unfortunate incidents of endings being revealed early IN reviews when these multichapter fic-exchange fics are published here.
Anyway... a beautifully heartbreaking fic, of course, and it became apparent at some indefinable point that Draco and
Ginny just weren't going to escape in a traditional sense. But I still think that they *did* escape, because they learned to love each other. All I can say is that this particular afterlife had better follow the Nicene Creed (or is it the Apostle's Creed?), which includes a resurrection of the body, so that they can have heavenly sex. :) After that kiss, though, I think it's likely.
Author's Response: yeah, i was a little bummed by the early spoilers, but i didn't know what to say about them. :(
i feel kinda fan-girlish that you are reviewing btw! lol
i haven't heard of heavenly sex, but i am all for it! woo! and yes, it did become really clear when i was doing a 2nd draft that they were not going to reasonable "escape" so my betas convinced me to scrap the ending i had a write a new one. thank you for reviewing!
Draco and Ginny overcome the effects of war one moment at a time. A series of connected drabbles. EWE.Category: Works in Progress
An ongoing response to the 100 Days, 100 Drabbles challenge on the DG Forum.
Another great drabble set! :) Draco and Ginny have such an interesting relationship here. There's clearly more caring involved than either one is willing to admit... but there's something almost chilling about where they end up by the end, which shows that we are not getting fluff here. He's risking both himself and her... but then, she's going along with it. What a fascinating dynamic, and looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Yay, thanks! So glad that all these interesting details about their relationship are getting through, despite the limiting word count. Sometimes I wish I had more words to really dig into these complexities, but I think the format I'm using is forcing me to highlight those complexities in different ways. It's hard, but I'm enjoying it, and I hope others are too. :)
Erhg-- I've gotten SO behind on R and R'ing fics here!! (Yes, "erhg" is now a word. ;) But in my defense, I'm beta reading for about a zillion people, and I'm working REALLy hard on the big site transfer. These were really good... I love drabbles that are interconnected, but could actually kind of stand on their own as individual pieces. We are certainly left wondering at the end of "Clothes." ;)
Author's Response: Hopefully you won't be left wondering for long! I just need to write two more drabbles before I can post again. One thing I have been trying to do is make sure these drabbles CAN stand alone, even if the context isn't always clear without the rest of the story as background. I don't think I've succeeded in that for EVERY drabble, but I'm pretty proud of what I've been able to accomplish so far. Now, if I can write all 100 drabbles and make this a decent story, then I think that's something I could really be proud of. No wonder this has been a three-year effort (so far!). Anyway, glad you enjoyed! And can't wait to see what you have in store for FIA!
I promise... pROMISE a real review for this one. I'm just losing my mind from everythign I have to do right now. But it WILL happen!! :)
Author's Response: It's no problem, Anise. ;)
Ginny is tired of being pushed into the background as if nothing she endured counted for anything. It turns out, Katie feels the same way. They plan on making a difference in the war, even if no one takes them seriously.Category: Long and Completed
This is really, really well written. It's been a long time since I've seen something that actually could have come from canon (or particularly cared about seeing that, to be perfectly honest!) But you're doing it *so* well that I just had to tell you. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I've been playing around with the DH timeline a lot lately, probably because canon is so full of holes for that time period, and the actual bits of canon are awful anyway. :) I'm so glad you like this!
This really is so believable as a "missing piece"fic for DH. First of all, Harry's lack of interest in what actually happened to Ginny during that year was just awful and made me want to shoot him (um... except that he was a fictional character... yes, that's it. :P ) But we get CLEAR information that things just like this have got to be happening to her. And the Draco in the film version of HBP (which is another type of canon, for reasons explored at great length in essays which will not be reprinted here, to everyone's relief) is obviously experiencing some of the guilt that your Draco does in relation to Katie. Everything fits, and you actually make me care that it does. :)
Author's Response: Thank you SO much! I checked the timelines for DH so many times to be sure that events would fit neatly into it. I don't buy JK's handwaving of trauma for the plot purposes. I know that Harry wasn't around and he wouldn't know about it, but he should've known about *Ginny* of all people. Draco's behavior, of what little Harry actually saw, tells me that he was waffling even as he was doing things he had to do. I don't believe he's the evil git that JK does. He was a prat and an idiot, but still a boy. The war forced him to grow up in all sorts of ways he wasn't ready for, IMHO. And this was a chapter full of uneasy choices and ramifications, so it was time for Draco to face his guilt. Hopefully you think I take it to a reasonable conclusion. :D
Fascinating chapter. The contrast between the two couples works really well-- we can see both the similarities and the differences. Marcus knows that he would do anything he had to do to save Katie, for instance; I think that Draco has kind of convinced himself that he might not do the same for Ginny if he were actually put in that situation. But if it *did* happen, yes, I think that he would. And yet it also makes sense that *Ginny* would be the one who would owl Draco and attempt to break off the relationship because she thinks she's doing for his own good.
It's hard to write Draco and Ginny so that they're completely believable according to canon and yet also believable as a couple at Hogwarts that seventh year (I don't know if I've seen anyone do it all that well), and the strange part is that it's not because it's hard to believe it would have happened. It could be because Harry's interest in what was happening to Ginny at Hogwarts during DH was either totally missing, focused on remembering the physical aspects, or very dismissive (laughing when he heard about her being punished for trying to steal the sword, for instance. That was pretty much it for me and Harry after that moment in DH.) That POV was so overwhelming that for me, anyway, it made it hard to imagine what Ginny actually might have been doing. But you're really pulling it off! :) (Katie and Marcus are easier in that way because we don't know anywhere near as much about them.)
Reading D/G as it is written here, we *know* there's a direction it could go in which would make the DH epilogue believable as an ending, which it certainly isn't at the end of the actual DH (pause for hisses and boos... oh, never mind.) But it would also be very sad, because it would mean that this Draco AND this Ginny decided not to grow as people. (In the actual DH, of course, this was sold as a fake happy ending, and-- slap slap slap. I'm better now...;) But the point is that we know and feel the divided loyalties that pull them in different directions. Good stuff. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, well, I'm one of those for whom the Epilogue doesn't exist. So yeah, if I were *completely* into sticking with canon, I could go that way. But HELL NO. (Prolly spoiling my ending, but OMG, that Epilogue is dead to me. DEAD. If I felt better about desecrating books I'd razor it out of my copy.) I've written a few different iterations of Katie and Marcus now, which is really easy to do because we have next to nothing about them in canon, but I'm really fond of this iteration, actually. They're much more grounded, I think. The D/G scenes in this chapter and the last were difficult for me to write because I was trying to keep them in character though this. (At least, what little we know about them as characters in DH, because Harry has no interest or interaction, really. That's another reason the Epilogue of Doom bugs me. Ginny goes from being badass DA member/leader to simpering housewife that obviously has no input into even her children's names? HELL NO. She's capable of more than that, and I really wanted that to come across in this story.
Really fascinating and a great job, as always! There's a wonderful compare-and-contrast with the motivations and behavior of all the characters involved, and I think it's really a strength of this fic overall. Some thoughts:
Katie: She starts out with the same very strong, capable persona she's had all along, but I think she begins to realize in the Death Eater party situation just how little she really may be able to control. She's gotten in too deep with Marcus at this point (from everything that she knows, not from where the story might be going.) He'll do anything to protect her, but he's still a Death Eater.
The readers really feel the bind that Draco is in here, and so does he. Draco's strength, maybe, is that he fully understands his own weaknesses, and he isn't fooling himself about them. I like that Goyle is smarter than he looks. ;)
Oh, and Bella! This is very true to how this character would actuallly think, and would really explain why she goes after Ginny so specifically at the last battle at Hogwarts. But I also think she underestimates both the depth of Draco's feelings for Ginny and his capacity for self-determination.
Looking forward to the last two chapters! :) But sad that this fic will be over...
Author's Response: I love how much you're enjoying the story! I really wanted Katie to realize over time that yes, she can be strong and capable, but that doesn't mean she can do everything on her own. There's so much she doesn't know and she really only started realizing it once she put herself out there. By contrast, the Death Eaters understand who and what they are, and try to play up their strengths. As for Crabbe and Goyle... in the books they're flat, one-dimensional idiots. I wanted to flesh them out a bit more, even if I didn't go into much detail. So Crabbe pulled away and feels self important, and Goyle is the one that is more reflective. I think it explains their behavior in the Room of Requirement at the end, too. And I love how singleminded Bella was in this, too. :) I'll be posting the next two chapters this week.
Well, now that I'm FINALLY at the end of the Oregon Trail (and it might have been easier to take a covered wagon), I can actually get online again. :) A great and very realistic end to it all! While you've obviously gone *beyond* canon, everything that happened also fit potentially into canon, if you see what I mean. What happened between Katie and Marcus made perfect sense given how their characters have been delineated up to this point-- she herself knew that he really might do anything at all to save her, I think, and she wouldn't let him destroy himself by giving him the choice. They both made it through, and actually it wasn't a foregone conclusion, because if I remember correctly, we really *aren't* told in canon whether they did or not.
Draco and Ginny's journey is extremely believable, and a very intriguing thing about it is that everything you've written could have happened within the boundaries of canon (because we're ignoring the Epilogue of Doom, because it was clearly written by evil aliens from the planet Zoofelfutz.) Given that all we have is Harry's POV in DH, he easily would have been oblivious enough to miss all of the D/G interactions. Of course, even HE might have figured it out at SOME point afterwards.... I really, really liked your final ending for them, because I think it had to be. It was a different choice from what some readers would expect, no doubt about it, but again, it was realistic as the *best* choice for them. While we don't know exactly what's going to happen in their future, we do know that they've built something real between them in the past. A short D/G sequel to this fic would be fascinating to read (although I don't know if you would write it), because there are still a lot of issues for them to work out, and the way that they'll manage to do it is very much up in the air. But I don't think it could be any other way at this point.
Happy to read this fic, sad to see it end, looking forward to more from you! :)
Author's Response: woo for being online! Having moved recently, I can feel the pain. :D No, we're never told what happens to either Katie or Marcus in canon, and it's not even mentioned if they're at the Final Battle or not. But given that Katie was in the DA, I can't see her *not* being there, and especially not in this iteration of her that I've written. So yay for adding that element of suspense for you. :D And thank you so much for feeling that the D/G could have been canon. I was trying very hard to have this fit into what we do know of DH and still have it believable. (Harry conveniently ignores things that don't immediately apply to the situation, after all...) In keeping with canon!Draco, though, I couldn't have him immediately sweep Ginny off of her feet and declare his love with wine and roses. This simply wasn't that kind of a story. I don't know if there's a sequel to this, so I can't promise anything. Some other stories I thought for sure I wouldn't write one, yet I did... even if it was a few years later. ^^; We'll see about this one. I do want to write more D/G, and I do have some more boxes left on my hc_bingo card before I get a blackout. :D
When Lord Voldemort gives an order, no one dares defy him. So when he orders Draco to reform one of the biggest blood traitors, Draco has no choice but to follow through, even if it means risking his heart in the process.Category: Works in Progress
Quite, quite intriguing. Clearly, this will be a dark Draco, but on the whole I think he'll walk the right side of the fine line they have to walk in order to still be readable and believable (because the darker ones definitely can go too far overboard.) The premise is very snicker-worthy. (Is that a word? Well, it is now.) The fascinating part will be to see where it all goes from here, especially in terms of the interaction between Draco and Ginny given the type of relationship set up between them from the beginning. Looking forward to seeing more!
Author's Response: First off, I'm amazed that my favorite fanfic writer actually reviwed my story. Give me a sec, having a huge fangirl moment....okay. In the second chapter, we will see the more human side of him. It's all intricately planned out. I'm so glad you like it! I need to stop writing before I have another fangirl moment. lol.
This second chapter works very well, particularly when it comes to the new OC's. Don't worry about how fast the action is going-- I think it's better to show how Ginny is beginning to adapt to her new environment. (Of course, this can get out of hand and turn into 345,876.76 chapter fics... ;)
Non-canon characters are hard to handle a lot of the time, but Kora is really fitting in so far. I'm a little nervous about heading over to your LJ because I'd rather be surprised by what shows up in this fic I think... but IMHO you're smart to keep things on LJ. Facebook has *serious* security and privacy issues. Anyway... looking forward to seeing more soon! :)
Author's Response: Besides Kora, there will only be one other OC character...but she isn't original. More of a Hindu goddess. But thank you! I have yet to put up Kora's picture on my LJ. But I will sometime later today. Glad to have your approval!