A series of glimpses into the first few months after Draco and Ginny take their relationship to the next level. Based on my story, Not just friends any more, be forewarned - these are not for children.Category: Long and Completed
Aww! Thanks for the credit. Though I personally don't have any thong experience, I think it fits rather well with our duo, don't you think? Keep the interludes coming!
Author's Response: I definitely see more thongs for Ginny but I do fancy Draco in black silk boxers with green accents.
I wanted to take a few moments to discuss your summary and chapter. You might want to think about changing the summary to something reflecting Draco/Ginny and how they fit into the story. We know it's fine to post stories here about DG's children (think the lovely Rainpuddle) but give us some background. Second, your exposition is too rushed. Take more time to explain who everyone is. You've introduced characters with very little or no info about them. Third, remember canon. You have Molly hanging up a phone in this chapter. There are no phones (except for Ron's occasional felly-tone) in canon. Also, JK Rowling has made it public that Ginny's name is Ginevra, not Virginia. Fourth, watch your spelling. As you have named Virginia, you keep misspelling it as "Virgina" which doesn't transmit the same meaning. The best way to catch these and other mistakes is to read your work out loud. If it doesn't flow correctly, or something seems out of place, chances are your readers will feel the same way. This is not meant to offend. If you'd like to discuss anything more with me, you may contact me through my author page here.