All Ginny wants is to get the upper hand just once with drool-worthy hunk of man candy and callous playboy Draco Malfoy before he moves on to his next careless conquest. So how did this simple plan lead to time travel, nefarious plots involving the most infamous whorehouse in the wizarding world, and the teenaged Draco’s achingly sweet, chocolate-flavored kisses? Even Draco Malfoy was innocent once, as Ginny learns all too well…Category: Long and Completed
Chapter ONE HUNDRED EIGHTEEN Quote of the Day:
THE LAST CHAPTER
The minutes ticked by, long enough for Ginny to know that against all reason, all common sense, she still wanted impossible things from him. But she would leave. Even after today, even when her body ached from him and for him, when she could feel that he had begun to shape her to him, she would turn around and leave him. I will, I will, she thought.
“You don’t understand,” said Draco.
“Oh?” Ginny said stiffly. “At least he hadn’t touched her, she thought. She would not be able to find the strength to pull herself away from him, and she knew it.
I dislike Hermione already, good job. ^_^
Ginny's 'voice' in this is so strong and well done, you've really got her character down in this first chapter, and Ginny's dealings with Hermione were perfect; Ginny was biting and mean, she really held her own.
The pieces you've thrown in about masturbation I, (can you tell I'm slightly blushing/cringing?) felt were right. I hardly ever see stories where the author just comes out and chucks it in front of you. It seems almost not to exist in the Wizarding World according to fanfiction. The whole thread about Ginny and her virginity was very funny.
The only part I wasn't too sure on was the actual DG interaction. I just feel it was a bit too, too, suddenly appearing? When Ginny visited Draco in the Hospital Wing, I suppose I could put that down to her curiosity about Draco, but them looking at each other and their almost kissing . . . I don't know, for me it felt strange; almost as if there is already a relationship that I haven't seen/read.
Or maybe I'm reading it wrong and there has . . . .
Nice opening chapter. I would end this with the usual 'update soon please!' but I've got thirty eight chapters to go before I need to. ;P
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Sarah
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, there's quite a bit left to go.... happy reading... ;)
'The salary of a junior graphic designer at Sans and Serif, after all…'
I laughed aloud at that bit, very funny!
Draco is . . . strange. Strange in a good way. To be clichéd for a moment: he seems to be a puzzle that needs to be worked out, and I've heard Ginny is a very good . . . puzzler.
That kinda fell a bit flat, but you see what I mean.
Adoring Ginny by the way, her unabashed say-what-you-think attitude is refreshing and plays really well with Colin.
On the subject of Colin, the recurring 'must find him a girlfriend' is funny, and I would love it if he was straight after all, just very in touch with his feminine side.
Author's Response: Draco's a puzzle, all right, and Ginny does have a way of saying what she thinks. ;) And Colin does have his moments...
Has this turned into a Starwars crossover? With, uh, whatshisface, Yodi? *snorts* Oh, this is such a massive fail.
Y'know, the guy who talks strangely. I haven't actually watched all the films and none of them all the way through, so that's my excuse.
That's bugging me now.
ANYWAY. I take it Draco is the co-signer? And he's the time traveller? Or Ginny is and she's came back and told him all about it? Hmm.
'I wonder, is he eating chocolate? Would he give me some if I asked?' LOVE!
Author's Response: I don't know. That's how the goblins talk every time they show up at the back door, and-- wait a minute... Oh, there's that white van again. The men in the white coats are chasing me with the butterfly nets, so the rest of this will have to be fast. Draco's the co-signer, the time travel comes later, and more chocolate to come.... (takes off on new Nikes)
Ginny was used to not dealing with things that bothered her. She was used to ignoring when things went wrong. She's not used to having to deal with things, and she's not used to sharing her thoughts. This is now something entirely new to deal with, and she never expected Draco Malfoy to be able to help her. Or become as important as he does.Category: Completed Short Stories
I don't normally get all teared up, but I couldn't help getting all teary eyed. That was beautifully done; it's hard to write about traumatic events and really show them realistically but I think you have done it.
I like the use of the support group and how it wasn't only a meeting place to get the initial DG meeting, but it had a place in the story too.
As soon as you mentioned Draco's first cough my heart sank, I'm glad he didn't die because I don't think *I* could have handled that, and I can't even begin to contemplate what it would have done to Ginny.
It's unusual to see both DG being ill - seriously ill - and the temptation to just allow Draco to die would have made the romance all the more bittersweet, but would have caused readers to electrocute themselves, as the tears they would be crying would fall into the keyboard and causing some short-circuiting and whatnot and big sparks and eventual electrocution.
Your descriptions of Draco (and Ginny) were stunningly well done, it made the cancer all the more real and made me feel so blim'ing sad at the same time.
Finally, I would like to say how amazing it is you managed to write so much in so little, really good job.
Thank you for an amazing story!
Sarah
Author's Response: This was a very difficult story to write, and not just because of the major illness component. It kept heading toward Draco's death, but I *couldn't* do that and I really didn't want to. I love them too much to do that to them. It was bad enough that Draco had a relapse in the story. I'm really glad you liked it.