Mm Mynuet, I generally really enjoy your stories and writing.

Your author's note really bothered me in this chapter though because I haven't read the book yet and you've somewhat spoiled part of it for me. I've been avoiding reading the news, e-mails, etc because I know there are a lot of people that will post the ending or spoil parts of the book. What I didn't expect, however, was to find that you, a dedicated Harry Potter (or rather DG) fan, doing the same in just a few short sentences of your author's note.

Author's Response: As I just added to the author\'s note:\r\n\r\nTo clarify: I uploaded this and wrote this note before reading the book - I still haven\'t finished it. Thus, there are no spoilers lurking either in the author\'s note or in the text. The closest thing to a spoiler is the expectation that D/G will not become canon, but that\'s not so much a spoiler as a realistic projection. If that ruins something for you, I apologize, but it\'s nothing that hasn\'t been said for quite a few years now, by many people.\r\n

Oh thank you thank you thank you! For updating the link to the The Broken Road 2! I have been eagerly waiting to read the continuation of this awesome story.

I love how you write - when reading it, you feel completely immersed in an entirely different world, see things from the character's perspective. When I read poorly written material I pay all my attention to the atrocious grammar or terrible spelling or just plain out bad writing, rather than the story the author is trying to convey.

You do a wonderful job allowing the reader to picture and imagine the story that you are telling.

Good luck with your kids :P. I imagine they're a handful, but please don't forget about your dedicated fans!

I can't wait to read more of this exciting sequel! It's awesome so far - I love your characterizations, including Pansy. You keep her in character but manage to present a more mature, more real Pansy than in JK's world, so that I actually *like* her in your stories. Of course, my favorite characters are still Draco and Ginny in your story.

Kudos!

I never thought I'd read a fic where I'd *want* Ginny to ditch Draco. I actually really like her Italian guy. It's a rare author that can not only make a good non-canon character, but to pair him/her up with a canon character so well. I don't think Ginny should go back to Draco until he's really learned his lesson and the Italian guy and her don't work out. I really don't want her to ditch the seemingly nice Antonio just because Draco has realized what an ass he's been.

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment. I agree with what you said. She won\'t be running back to him until he\'s matured a bit.

A very well written D/G piece though as other reviewers have mentioned it does feel incomplete. It's almost as if we've gotten hooked, and are waiting to see the other shoe drop - to see what Draco has planned so to speak.

I realize it's been a while since you've written this but I really hope that your muse will be so kind as to inspire you to continue this - perhaps another chapter? Right now it's very intriguing, but the satisfaction of Ginny being caught by Draco in their little cat and mouse game hasn't been achieved.

I can see why you wouldn't want to continue you this though as it's a magnificent one shot and that would be difficult to top.

I think you deleted a few chapters :(. I really want to read them again - I can understand wanting to edit...but could you leave the others up while editing pretty please?

This is really good and you're still one of my favorite DG authors.

I really hope you will continue this as this is one of the best pieces in D/G fandom that characterize everyone so perfectly. You've stayed true to the original nature of the characters, and yet you've made them you're own as the story develops. It's very believable and brilliant. I love the relationship between the two of them - with their ups and downs, and yet there's always a sense of passion between the two. We come to love the characters with all their flaws, which is a difficult thing to achieve.

I hope you update this rather soon :p. I want to see how the tension between the two of them culminates.

Hm...why do I get the sense that Ginny isn't changing the past, but rather completing it. That Harry knows what the book is, can read it, and this is when he offers Lucius a choice.

I'm just cringing at this cause it's like you know that it won't end well but can't tear your eyes away.

Anyways, it's soooo good that you need to update! :p I'm on the edge of my seat here.

You are such a tease...is it wrong if I really really want more intense D/G action? :P

What the heck? This chapter confused me. The first part I liked it, but then when Ginny confessed to doing all those things Draco accused her of...for what purpose? It seems pretty twisted to have him give up on her (which he said he could never do) just so he wouldn't pursue her.

And wouldn't this push Draco even further to trying to get her? Being jealous that Harry has her and plots revenge...

I started liking Ginny at the beginning of this story, but I'm not really a big fan of hers any more. She complained and rejected her husband in his time of need because he lied to her, yet she is doing the same thing. I just can't really buy that someone so stung by that, so affected by that would do the same thing.

I feel like she should have told this younger obsessed Draco the truth - he would pursue the same path. But she is here in St Mungos/hell/limbo to fix what she has done.

I don't agree that this Draco is "cruel." Obsessed with her yes, mistreated and without any positive influence. How can she really expect him to be perfect or 'her' Draco from so many negative influences? She is older and more mature (theoretically) than he is and should see that underneath everything Draco is saying - is that he really wants someone to love, her specifically, needed her goodness. But instead I feel she is taking all his comments superficially/seriously and he's much younger than her.

It's well written like all your chapters, but I'm not sure I buy into the actions that your characters have done in this one. It doesn't seem rational or plausible.

Hm, the beginning was interesting, but I have to say kinda disturbed towards the middle. If the situation had been reversed, where Draco was beating Ginny up, and then her declaration of love right after, it would definitely not be right either, yet it seems because the gender's switched it's acceptable. She physically abused him, and I have a hard time finding that romantic or cute.

I would say the first half of the story definitely shows potential in your writing style however.

Hm, nice work with the story. It's definitely a thinking story and unusual plot line as many people don't explore the darker realities of what might have happened.

Maybe I'm being too hopeful, but I want to think that Ron did die or went missing, but Snape is helping Hermione. Perhaps she wasn't tricked (because I think it would be really difficult into tricking her) and Snape convinced the Death Eaters he had. So maybe Hermione's still her? :P

One can hope.

Hope you update this soon.

By the way, your Valentine's Day story... after everything Draco has put Ginny through and how he's treated her... why doesn't she just refuse to marry him? O_o Kind of boggles the mind. She seems to value herself and independence enough that she wouldn't take that kind of crap from anyone. At this point it seems more likely she would just call the whole thing off rather than treated as a second class citizen.

Author's Response: Thank you. I\'m afraid Ron has departed and Hermione\'s memory is gone. But, Snape isn\'t evil. As far as the valentine fic goes, Ginny is preparing to give him heck. I hope you enjoy what\'s coming up.

Very very promising and intriguing. I do hope you won't make us wait too long for the next few chapters. I've haven't been this excited about a new fic in a while! I'm glad you didn't go into significant detail about Ginny's looks - I admit I am curious, but when the author writes something like:

With her rich copper-red hair, form fitting clothes, long legs, Ginny had a body to die for, etc. It goes so much better and more natural when it comes out from other character's perspectives. Probably one of the best pieces of advice I've heard was a paraphrase from the Irish writer James Joyce - that you write things from the perspective of the character. That is things that are 'new,' that catch their attention should be written down, while everyday things should be ignored - the character is not going to notice the same old tables, hallways they pass through every day. When I see great writing it tends to follow this pattern - poor writing on the other hand writes down all the things the author 'sees' but the character would never notice.

Anyways, great work so far.

Author's Response: I hope it doesn\'t change your opinion of the story, but there is a tiny bit of explanation of Ginny\'s looks in Chapter Three. It is necessary, and doesn\'t go into extreme detail though. Anyway, I\'m glad you liked the first two chapters.