Sometimes your savior isn't who you were expecting. (First fic I've authored- be gentle!!)Category: Completed Short Stories
Cute and fluffy. ^_^ Good job.
Harry is dead; Voldemort won (or did he?); Ginny Weasley is all alone, left to the mercies of the Malfoy family.Category: Works in Progress
This is such a well-written story and I've never read a fic where both Lucius and Draco (as well as others) opposed the Dark Lord. It makes for some good reading. Your descriptions are wonderful and always leave me wanting more of this story! I have to say that my favourite chapter was when Lucien was born. Everything was just right and I could almost see it happening and let's just say that it changed my views on some things. Fics that make me rethink some things always have a place in heart. :)
Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed the birth of Lucien; it is my favourite chapter too. I poured a lot of effort into it and researched a lot of things. I am also curious as to what things it changed your mind on - drop me an e-mail, I'm ever so curious now! LOL
There are worse things in Tom's Chamber than a Basilisk.Category: Works in Progress
I really love your style of writing. You make it mysterious enough to hold one's attention and have great descriptions! Je l'aime! Keep up the great work. :) I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: amor_quies-
Thank you so much. I'm glad to see that you're enjoying it and really you're overestimating my writing ability or at least making me blush fiercely! ;)Either way thank you tons for the review and I hope to see what you think of the next chapter.
An explosion in the Potions classroom leaves behind a raving Potions Master, a bloody Draco, and a certain redhead we all love having a moment of altruistic weakness. Ginny's kindness makes Draco very suspicious, leading him to destroy her goodwill. In retribution, Ginny decides to put some embarrassing information about Draco to good use. Ahh, nothing like one-upmanship to kindle a little romance.Category: Works in Progress
Very good start to a first chapter! I really enjoyed it and Draco's snarky comments certainly hit the spot. Perfect timing, actually. Keep up the good work!
Ginny realises that it helps to share how you feel.Category: Completed Short Stories
You've done an amazing job with this fic. Even though it was short, I think you've captured everything perfectly. It's also a very original fic--to me anyway, though this is the only one I've read in which Ginny has a miscarriage. I like how you showed that they are alike, however differently they might act when on their own. But what I really enjoyed was your constant use of hand symbolism/imagery; the ambidextrous tied the knot.
Ginny is looking for summer cash. Draco is looking for summer fun. Neither realize what they will eventually find.Category: Works in Progress
I agree with fallenwitch - the sexual tension is beautifully mastered. I am also enjoying your writing style as well seeing as it is very literate and you seem to take the time to choose your wording carefully. That right there earns my respect, not to mention your fic is unique. I can't wait for your next update.
An essay written by your Site Mommy on the topic of things that those of us who read through and approve your fics wish you wouldn't do.Category: Essays
Thank you, thank you, thank you for compiling a set of irritations. And here I was thinking that I was the only one becoming annoyed with the pathetic use of "Mal-ferret" and the wearing of baggy pants, chains, "goth" music, and dark make-up in the wizarding world. If people had any inkling of sense and had read the actual Harry Potter series they would have noticed that nothing of the sort is mentioned. And besides, those who attend Hogwarts enter at the age of 11, so I highly doubt that they would have had time to develop their own style, particularly that of the mentioned clothing; therefore, the excuse of many being Muggle-born is not entirely valid. And I absolutely loathe when authors describe Draco as wearing a muscle tee. Just....no. It's so...well, I don't know what it is but it just makes me disgusted. He's a pureblood wizard and judging from what JKR has lead us to believe, I doubt a wizard of high society would be wearing something like that. And please, enough with the describing of Ginny as wearing "short shorts" and a "cute tee-shirt." It makes me want to rip up my own shorts and throw them down the garbage disposal. O, and it seems that not many authors know the difference between "then" and "than." That in itself is a whole other pet peeve that fits in the grammar section.
Ginny tries to play a prank on Draco and it backfires. Majorly. In a total PWP kinda way.Category: Completed Short Stories
I really enjoyed this short story. And Draco's last comment was utter snark and Slytherin. Utterly. You kept him in character to the very end.
Duty, common sense and pragmatism will not keep you warm at night, or satisfy you when you're old and grey.Category: Completed Short Stories
This is such a depressing one-shot! I'm on the verge of tears right now. T.T Ohhhh the angst. But despite its depressing nature, you have done a very good job of making your message and emotions succinct so that they're very hard to ignore. This, I feel, has made your fic so very emotional and, as someone remarked below me, poignant.
A story of flowers and intrigue and memories best forgotten. Ginny Weasley's Christmas holidays are haunting and confusing, as she is drawn to the presence of of an elusive and mysterious Draco Malfoy who is altogether too memorable for anybody's good.Category: Completed Short Stories
This. Is absolutely beautiful. I just so happened to be listening to Deas Vail while reading this and it fit so perfectly. This is haunting and sad and frustrating, but it's *so* beautiful.
What happens when a potions explosion coincides with Ginny's annual, self-imposed trip to the infirmary? Sometimes when you don't know who you're talking to, prejudices are laid aside, and you get to know the person behind the family. This is a response to the November challenge of "infirmary" on the FIA forums.Category: Completed Short Stories
Disclaimer: I don't own Harry Potter or anything associated with him/them/it. Please don't sue me.
Very cute ending indeed. :)
Anyone deserves a second chance. ~ Written for the D/G fic exchange 2006.Category: Long and Completed
I really enjoyed reading this. There was a brilliant amount of everything: angst, conflict, fluff, snark. Furthermore, your descriptions were amazing as well and I definitely needed to cool down after some of those D/G sessions, heh. Your description of Draco gave me butterfiles in my stomach too. xP For a second there I was so extremely afraid that you would kill Draco off and I was all ready to bawl my eyes out. But he lived and I was, am, so extremely glad! All in all, very well done. I commend you.
She understood chocolate, and people. But why couldn’t she understand him? He understood his fiancée. And his life and then she came along. However, one thing they both know is that one taste is not enough.Category: Long and Completed
This is an absolutely beautiful story! I nearly shed a tear at the end. And I love your writing style. Maybe I should go watch Chocolat sometime....
A midnight snowfall, moonlight through a frost-tinted window, and Ginny Weasley. It would change everything for Draco...and absolutely nothing.Category: Completed Short Stories
This is so sad and so beautifully written! Oh, the angst! I don't usually read fics written in first person, but you did a fabulous job and it held my attention. Brava!
Enter a world of thievery and transgression…a tangled web of lies and deception, passion and betrayal, love and sex, birth and death—all threatening to consume the lives of those ready to go up in flames.Category: Works in Progress
I have to admit, you've snagged my interest. I don't think I've ever encountered a fic with this twist, so I am greatly intrigued. Not to mention that you started off the chapter with some Shins lyrics..."Sea Legs" is one of my favorite songs by The Shins. By the way, I also love the way you characterized everyone at the wedding.
ONE-SHOT. Harry's sworn enemy, his arch-nemesis from Hogwarts, is the one that his girlfriend carries on with behind his back. There's a malicious sort of irony attached that is undeniably appealing.Category: Completed Short Stories
I really enjoyed your style of writing. It's different than a lot of other fics. I can't quite place my finger on what it reminded me of when I read it, but I feel it is cold and distant, confused...true to how Ginny is feeling and I like that. The fact that it is narrated by Ginny makes it reminiscent of films like "Sin City" (not the plot, just the overall air of it). So yea, what I'm trying to say is: good job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to make this one-shot different with the first person and Ginny\'s thoughts so the reader can learn more about what Ginny is facing and feeling. I\'m glad you enjoyed it.
Who knew happily-ever-after could have an expiration date? New beginnings are hard, but when they happen in the middle of your life, they're infinitely more so.Category: Works in Progress
I think you have done a *very* good job incorporating all of DH into your fic--epilogue and all. And definitely a nice save with Draco's too tight of a ponytail. XD No receding hairline for him...yet.
Author's Response: Our boy will have a full head of hair until the day he dies... at least in fanon. Thank you very much for the compliment- I really wanted to do a story that was fully compliant.
What do you do with a Death Eater when he stops being a Death Eater?Category: Long and Completed
This was one of my fav fics of the exchange. Again, good job. ^^
Ginny and Draco each got detention one night and Snape is called away from his office, leaving them alone for a bit. Why should he be concerned, Draco and Ginny notoriously hate each other?? Well, he's certainly right on this...no doubt both hate each other with a panache, but there's a very fine line between hate and lust!!!Category: Completed Short Stories
I don't want to come off as harsh, but I feel as if there should be some constructive criticism here. There is potential, but I feel like you threw together a bunch of big words without fully comprehending their definitions. This, in turn, made the story feel choppy and there was more than one spot in the one-shot at which I had to reread certain phrases to understand what you were trying to relay. In short, I felt your phrasing was awkward.
Again, I'm sorry if I sound harsh. I really don't mean to be, but the internet tends to make most things sound negative, etc.
Author's Response: Really...thanks so much, I still feel that my word phrasing part is still very weak..I can speak english well -but lack the flow in written english (I am an Indian..so my mother tongue is Hindi) So don\'t worry -I\'m not offended (even if you tried so :D).\r\n\r\nI\'ll surely keep this mind while writing my next story (NewlyWeds), hoping it will be the one which really impresses you....\r\nBut I\'m glad you think that there is indeed a potential over here. I\'ll try to improve my standards..thanks a ton!!
I long to speak the truest words I have to you... (in which I exploit Rabindranath Tagore's song, The Gardener, 41)Category: Completed Short Stories
I, too, am surprised that there are scarcely any reviews here! This is probably one of the best fics I've read. Your descriptions are beautiful and I love the way you've revealed Draco's inner turmoil. By not including Ginny's thoughts you've left the reader, or at least me, wondering what Ginny really thinks about their relationship. So again, brilliant!
Author's Response: Thanks to you too! I was trying out a new style, actually, with lots of descriptions and inner turmoil and stuff like that. What Ginny really thinks about their relationship? Ironically enough, the same things Draco thinks. If I *ever* write a sequel, it\'ll be the same events from Ginny\'s POV, to show how they could be happy, actually, if only one of them said what they feel.
OneShot, based on a challenge from AirmidM and JulieMalfoyZabini. DracoGinny, Healer's robes, closet.Category: Completed Short Stories
Haha, I love it! So much fluff! But I think my favorite part was the very end when Ginny thinks she has her secret all to herself and, well, doesn't know that Draco's found out already. ^^
Miss Weasley,Category: Works in Progress
The War has caused a drop in the population of the wizarding world. To correct the situation, the International Confederation of Wizards is arranging marriages for every witch and wizard of age. The marriages are determined by a soul mate spell. Each couple will have to produce three children minimum. All forms of contraceptive are banned. Please come to the Ministry of Magic at 9:00 on Monday morning to be paired with your soul mate. If you do not show up to receive your fiancé(e) on the date above, you will be exiled from the wizarding world.
Sincerely,
Rufus Scrimgeour
Minister of Magic
Um, I feel like everything about this first chapter is extremely underdeveloped. None of the characters are acting accordingly to canon (if that's what you're going for) and because of that I feel like there is no dimension to anyone. No way Molly Weasley would have passed off the law so nonchalantly, especially where Ginny is concerned. Furthermore, I feel like the Ministry's Law that you've evoked to tie D/G together could use some solid reasoning that convinces the reader that it really is necessary because, quite frankly, it's not. Something like this would cause civil outrage amongst most of the wizarding population, not to mention the ethics that are brought into question. Yes, I know that this is fiction, but I feel that as an author you owe it to your readers to make them see that this is necessary instead of just slapping us in the face with a letter and Mrs. Weasley's passive acceptance of it. Furthermore, I believe that you could use some descriptive elements in your story to make your readers feel more empathy for the characters...describe facial expressions or something.
I apologize if this is your first attempt at writing fiction. If so, I don't mean for this to sound so harsh. I merely mean it as constructive criticism and I believe that honesty is what helps people grow.
Author's Response: The reason that Mrs. Weasley isn\'t completely outraged is that I don\'t think of her as someone who overreacts. Keep in mind that I wrote this before DH came out, so I didn\'t know about her attacking Bellatrix yet. Plus I like to keep the overreactions for Ron. Sorry about the underdeveloped-ness, I promise that it will go into more detail soon. I had this idea and I had to get it down before I lost it. Also, I had a lot of couples I needed to match up. Thanks for the tips about helping my story, I really appreciate it.
I agree with CourtneyFaith. I recognize some of the suggestions I made that you've begun to incorporate into this fic, like Mrs. Weasley's begrudging acceptance of the law. Whereas in the first chapter I felt she was all "Oh, there's nothing we can do about it," I was pleased to see that there is some concern in her about the law. I like that Mr. Weasley had a stronger reaction, which of course we've seen in CoS.
I still think that you could incorporate some more character development. I believe that would make the story seem less fast-paced (unless that's what you're going for) and more realistic. Also, while it was noble of Draco to ask Ginny's father for permission, I don't think he would have done it quite so suddenly. Again, this is probably a result of the fic's fast pace.
As a side note, Snape/Hermione still makes me squicky, but if that's what you want...go for it? Heh.
*DH Spoilers* Moleskin is a handy thing. You can hide anything in it, and only the owner can retrieve it. A brief tale about things Hagrid has hidden in his moleskin overcoat, and the stories behind them.Category: Completed Short Stories
This is wonderful! But the beginning part about Fred and George makes me so very very sad. George turning his head to the left waiting for a response from Fred? T.T *sobs* I'm still not over it.
Author's Response: I can\'t believe she killed Fred. Seriously. It was absolutely uncalled-for. *cries*
Ginny finds that she is only attracted to men she can argue with.Category: Works in Progress
XD I absolutely loved the end of this chapter. Brava!