okay, chapter after chapter i just want to punch Ginny in the face. i was all for her in the beginning when she walked out on Draco because his behavior was unacceptable, but now she is just being ridiculous. she's hitting him, screaming, and bitching. god, should any woman be so unfortunate to have a man at her every beckoning call, a man willing to spend any amount of money on her to assure that she has anything she needs, a man that offers her marriage and says he loves her, a man that wants to live with her and raise their son together as a family. honestly, that poor poor darling. i can see where she feels entrapped, but then, it's easier to see how Draco's view on things seems to run on the side of her best interest and commonsense. She acts as though he is forcing her to do things that are outrageous and “not her”…how is he making her “go against” who she “really is”…is she really just a moronic bitch that can’t see that she cannot do certain things anymore given her state and that compromise is not getting Her way every time (like she would like), or even coming half way, but sometimes just doing it HIS way, for the sake of the baby/Jayden/peace/his peace of mind.
if i were Draco (before this second baby had come about) i would have just grabbed Jayden and told Ginny off. i would have told her right to her face that he was going to seek full custody of the boy (and that he has the best layers in the Muggle and Wizarding worlds combined and that he would be able to do it) and that she can go off without him and without their son since they were both holding her back from finding "happiness" and he can raise his son and she can go off and shag and marry whomever she likes and have babies with him after she is married and all that jazz she is bitching about.
Honestly, Draco is a git, but Ginny needs to be hit.

Wow. Nice. I like. I haven't read smut in a while and I have now come to realize just how UN-smutty my writing is when I thought I was being down-right naughty. You just, lay it out there don't you? Nothing against that, but, wow, I get uncomfortable with just implied actions and you just use "cock" so freely. hahaha. You have inspired me to attempt to look over older scenes I have yet posted on my work and see if I can't manage to be a little less...meek.
Great job, and I can't wait to see how this unfolds.
I wasn't *too* happy with Ginny’s reaction upon being caught with Draco. I mean, I would expect her to run her mouth with just Harry there, but being caught in such an act, while sitting there naked, with your lover, by your BROTHER...yeah, there should have been a whole lot more "omg" on her part (in my opinion) and I would have really liked to have seen Draco's initial reaction (or some reaction at all) to Ginny confessing she loved him. Picking his face up out of the grass to gape at her would have been enough. lol.
Marching Draco through a camp while naked…how cruel, for him, so kind of you for any Draco fan-girls that might have been present. ;D
Draco’s introduction is so adorable. He seems so meek and unsure, and mildly depressed. I like that, reminds me of how I write Draco. Excellent, excellent, as always, excellent.

Author's Response: Thanks! Sometimes you just have to put it right out there and this is very different from how I would usually write smut, but it was for a smut challenge ;) Ginny's reaction was a mixture of knowing they'd be caught one day and a little embarrassment at being caught in the act. Draco's reaction would have been as you said - well, if he could have lifted his face, but fitting that in would have disturbed the flow of the banter between the other three. Couldn't resist marching our blond sex god through the camp naked - it makes for a lovely visual, doesn't it? As for Draco himself, he is a bit unsure of himself and probably more than a bit depressed. Ginny is the only good thing in his life and he has to risk everything to see her, not that they actually have a "relationship" as such. Thanks again :)

Yay for Werewolves! You did what I wanted to do (with Draco) and you did it amazingly well! Beasty Draco is, by far, SO much sexier than sickly Draco in my fic...but mine is beasty too, I just haven't gotten to showing that side of him yet. *wink*
You write really well, I love your wording and choice vocabulary. The flashbacks were informative and fun (I should know, I myself write enough of them in my fics) and I like Ginny being a Werewolf too. I'm not sure I like the "evil Ginny" because that is a cliche I never really felt too drawn too, but when you couple it with the lycanthropy, it actually at least has a viable explanation and is just not utterly OOC.
I hope to find out more about how/why/when Draco was turned, this "training" sounds very interesting, and the term "enforcers" made me think of L.K.Hamilton's Anita Blake novels. Have you read them? I would suggest it if you haven't, they are EXCELLENT Vampire/Werewolf/Necromancer books. (up through book 9 that is, after that they become smut without a plot and it's sad for us avid fans that read the series for Anita's sarcasm with a gun and the murder cases and violence...)
I like the idea of Draco and Ginny being bounty-hunters/vigilantes. That is a really fun and new concept! (for me at least since I have not read a fic with the same premise before) "Of course, there were a couple of unexplained disappearances as well. Paybacks were a bitch after all" That line is by far my favorite and it made me smile in an evil way. *smirks*
I like your concept and grasp of lycan and I can't wait to see where you take all this.
The witty banter was good...I can't write that to save my life, and the smut was tasteful. It showed their primal lust and need for each other without being raunchy or insincere. I was a little confused over how much they were dressed/when they got undressed...I think i was just reading too fast though. He was in jeans and she was in a t-shirt and jeans? I got lost. My quick-fix for such things and to avoid confusion of whose pants went where and when i just say "they made clothing disappear rapidly as they...." and I'm basically covered. XD
The only other thing that stumbled me was the transitions between flashback/thought and the present tie. I could follow the italics but it took me a moment to orient myself each time.
I can't wait for an update! This is quite different than my own fic, so I think you could read mine without risk, though this does make me want to work on my sequel more, so I can get to my fun flashbacks where Draco acts this beasty.
*smooches* this was brilliant!
~Raine~

Author's Response: He he, you leave reviews like I do *hugs for that*. Hmm, Ginny isn\'t evil- I hope in the next chapter to expound on that a bit more. I\'m so glad you like it! I hope you don\'t take offense to the fact that I\'m glad they are different- your fic and mine- as well, it makes me much more comfortable that I won\'t be facing finger pointing and accusations that I ripped off your fic *whew*. I love Laurell K. Hamilton and while I didn\'t take ideas from her work, I did try to give a balance between lycan and human traits as she does. As for the flashback\'s the Cabal member who approved the chapter suggested that the italics were enough *shrug* I\'m not going to make waves. I just hope now that everyone gets it easier because flaskbacks are a big part of the fic.\r\n\r\nI loved the line about paybacks being a bitch as well- they have retribution to dish out and Greyback has no one but himself to blame for it...wonder how he\'ll react? \r\n\r\nThe smut was the first I had written- at least that I didn\'t immediately delete so I was really worried about it. For the record, Draco was in denims and Ginny had denims and a light tee on when they started. *smirk* In my mind, he rolled out of bed and pulled his denims on- not overly worried about a shirt. \r\n\r\nI am honeslty doing a little dance that you deemed it brilliant as I\'ve heard rave reviews of your fic. It means alot, as I think ours are the only werewolf!Draco fics out there. What did you mean that I did what you wanted to do? I am confused! In my ideal of lycanthropy- which I will explain in the next chapter, being sickly is an option, but only if you choose to go that way...Thanks again for taking the time to read and review! \r\nI hope you tune in for the next chapter and once I get this one rolling I will read yours *grin*\r\nKelly