Name: fallenwitch reviewed Community Service Hours on Jun 13, 2005 10:55 am
Hi ronlover, I just read your fic and wanted to send you a review. I think the premise of your story is refreshing and original. It's a intersting touch to have four different Hogwarts students' reactions to the same letter. I loved that! Your characters' responses let us know who they are immediately. You've done a great job with your well formed characters. I also like the fact that you use alot of dialogue. It's really engaging stuff. I wish I could do more of it myself. Some personal preference comments. I dislike fic's with sexual violence/nonconsensual activity and the like. I realize those types of actions may be very important to the plot and moving the story forward. I just don't read them and don't write them. Your Lucius is a truly evil character. That's great! I'm hoping that you flush out his character a bit more. Why is he so horrible to everyone? Why would he treat his wife in such a manner? What about Narcissa? Why would she put up with such horrid behavior from her husband? Why doesn't she hex him silly or just leave? I guess what I am getting at here is motivation. What's motivating your characters to act in the way that they do? I think you've got a great start w/Draco and his motivations. I enjoyed reading his thoughts. I would love to see you continue that w/the other characters (esp. Lucius and Narcissa) My last piece of constructive criticism. You might want to consider getting a beta. Your grammatical errors distract from the content and flow of your writing, which is a shame because you have so much to say! It's hard to edit your own stuff. A second set of eyes can be helpful, even w/simple stuff like punctuation. Great job! Keep up the good work! You've got my curiosity up now. I wonder what's going to happen w/that band and Ginny and Draco. Who is the girl he's dating now? Pansy? I hope not. You've got a killer plot and a long summer. Get to work! Cheers, fallenwitch

Author's Response: Thanks.
Name: firepower reviewed Community Service Hours on May 29, 2005 08:00 am
thanks for reveiwing my story! I'm glad you like it!

Author's Response: No problem.
Name: INDYCICURN reviewed Community Service Hours on May 27, 2005 05:51 pm
I love reading D/G fan fic but lately it seems as the same theme is being used over and over. I like your unique theme. I look forward to reading more. Kristine

Author's Response: Hey, Glad you liked it. I thought I'd liven it up a bit. lol. Do you have any stories? I'm going to update soon. Thanks a lot for the reivew!
Name: Aly reviewed Community Service Hours on May 27, 2005 02:39 pm
ur story is soooo great!!! update it soon please!!!! Community service for Draco Malfoy: that's soooo funny. imagien the look on his face. muhahahahahaha!!! anyway, please write more. I love HP fanfics

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. But can you actually imagine Draco's face. lol!
Name: Aly reviewed Community Service Hours on May 27, 2005 02:28 pm
I'm Emma's friend and she told me about your story. It sounds interesting and I'm gonna read it rigth away! I'll tell you what I think when I finish!!!!!

Author's Response: Emma is my best friend. I wrote something in the last email she sent you. I'm at her house. I practically live here. lol. Thanks for the review.
Name: Embellished reviewed Community Service Hours on May 26, 2005 11:33 am
This is a good start. I can definitely see Ron overreacting to the idea of having to do community service. I like that Ginny and Hermione seem to have a good relationship. From the title, I assume that Ginny is going to join the band. It will be interesting to see where else you go from here. Nice job!

Author's Response: Hey, Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. I am currently writing the next chapter. lol. That was how my friend was when I told him that we had to community hours, though at my school its only 40 hours.
Name: Nuyaviel reviewed Community Service Hours on May 26, 2005 05:16 am
I read your story, and first of all - I don't know when you started writing this, but if you started in 1998, then it is LONG overdue to be updated. Because, in all honesty, the plot is quite interesting, and I'd love to see what happens next. I can see that there will be plenty of excitement ahead, as Ginny and Draco interact with each other doing community service, and even while playing/singing for the same band. Your characterization of Ginny was nice -- I can totally see her yelling at her brother. ^_^ However, something seems a bit off with Ron. He seems a little too whiny. At any rate, this is a fic I enjoyed reading, and I hope to see it continued. Keep writing! ^_^

Author's Response: Hey, Thanks for the review! lol. I just wrote this a few days ago...but what I mean is that Ginny would be in her 6th year in the year 1998. It says on I just wanted to make it go more Harry Potterish. lol. Thanks once again for the review. I'll try to make Ron not so much annoying...I just had to do that for the first chapter. I am currently writing the next chapter. Glad you liked it.
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