Name: Lynn reviewed II. La Vigna on Jun 07, 2007 08:16 am

I really think that you should continue this. I really think that this will be a great story.

Name: Kisou reviewed II. La Vigna on Jul 17, 2006 06:55 pm

I'd suggest spacing this out a little bit more. It's a litty dizzy all so close together.

And I'm a little confused because we keep meeting so many new people and being as bad as I am at names, I can't keep them as straight as I might like. If they're all important, then don't let me deter you from making your story complex, but if they don't serve any point past what we see upon first meeting them, you might want to trim down. Well, in any case, be careful to write down who's part of this and where and whatnot else might be important.

Keep it up though. I like this story. Really, I do, no matter how critical I might sound.

Author's Response: I sent the story the exact format I wanted it, I don't know how it got all mucked up. Anyways, I know there are plenty of characters, but it's anew situation, isn't it? I love my charactes, new & current, and you will, too. And don't worry, you're not critical. I appreciate the review.

Name: yunnage reviewed II. La Vigna on Jul 15, 2006 05:22 pm

you need to put paragraphs in the right places. whenever a character is saying somtehing, it's a new paragraph. this was very difficult to read, but i liked it.

Author's Response: I'm sorry about the mucked up format. I fixed everthing - so enjoy!

Name: ronlover reviewed II. La Vigna on Jul 14, 2006 05:30 pm

This reminds me so much of The Devil Wears Prada so far. I loved that book, and movie - and I love this story!!! UPDATE soon!!!! When will Draco come??

Name: phaedra reviewed II. La Vigna on Jul 13, 2006 06:47 pm

Hello, I would love to review your story, but the html format needs to be fixed first.

Author's Response: It's already done. Enjoy!