Name: selene_blackwell reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Jan 04, 2008 02:14 pm
how adorable!
Name: kellbell930 reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Feb 24, 2007 08:23 am
"At least he didnt mention the weather." haha that was a brilliant last line! very good work still!
Name: CourtneyFaith reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Feb 17, 2007 12:55 pm
~You are really great at conveying the characters thoughts.~
Name: Esus reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Nov 03, 2006 05:28 am
Chapter 7
Draco sighed, tucking his wand out of sight. “I can’t just ‘look past her name.’ She is her name. She is a Weasley, just like I’m a Malfoy,
I just love this sentence. Actually, if you come to think about it, we didn’t have any reason for the deep hate between the two families. It simply exists. It’s seems natural as it is: Malfoys and Weasly MUST hate each other, there’s no need of any further reason.
So, I can see Draco reasoning here, when he said it’s not quite easy to look through it and start to like her. Since he doesn’t have a reason, behind knowing he hates her and he have to do it, it’s almost like Don Chisciotte’s fight against the windmills. And you can’t fight something you can’t actually see, you know.
Maybe I haven’t told you before, but I really liked the fact you stressed that Ginny is the only one to actually wake Draco from his indifferent state. Sure, it’s because he hates her but I think it’s important when he admits that he ‘enjoys hating the bint’. It seems like he really enjoys his fights with her, like she is the only one that can really challenge him, enough to make him lose his composure. At least, as Pierce himself said, it’s something to start from. Moreover, I like as you make Draco like the professor for some second and then he starts to be suspicious again. It would have been unbelievable if he directly fell for the act… and, in this way, the betrayal will be deeper and the hurt stronger: I think this is going to actually change Draco forever and if things ruin to fast, it won’t be for the good. Great job!
And Pierce is starting to be desperate… we can see it by his small lost of composure when the girl knocked at the door. And Draco was there to see it. I really hope he’ll keep that in mind, because it’s just this wrong that Pierce is pushing him so hard to actually talk to a Weasley. Being a Malfoy, I would be even more than suspicious about that. You know, their hating was something legendary and everyone in the wizarding world knows about it. And nobody actually does something to change things… so, why a House competion would be a good enough reason to change that? I think Pierce is underestimating Draco again, but maybe I’m wrong. Well, I just have to wait and see what’s going to happen.
He would never go easy on her, which was exactly how she wanted it. And something no one else could guarantee her.
That’s the reason. The challenge! And the fact that he’s the only one acting around her as nothing as changed. Good reasons enough to make her get nearer to him, seeking for the comfort of normality. And their interaction… I just love how you described the flight session, that was like seeing it! And I was surprised by Ginny’s tactic: quite Slytherin for her… and I can’t believe Malfoy didn’t spotted the snitch before, unless he really wanted to see how good she was and waited. But, probably, it’s something we won’t ever know.
On the other hand, now Pierce work will be easier. Draco is furious for being beat by a girl, Potter’s girlfriend *gasp*!, and now he would do anything to destroy her. Pride can be really a silly thing.
Ginny frowned. “I don’t know. But I’m sure you are.’Slyterin never do anything just because,”
So, maybe, she paid attention. But only when Draco is concerned? Well, at least she’s showing more intelligent than Draco himself, that fell for the stupid trick Pierce used and now he’s completely wrapped around the Death Eater finger. And, what’s about Draco explaining her about the Slytherin ways? It really seems he actually enjoy to see her surprised reaction. And Ginny is too curious about it and this makes me think: maybe she want to learn from Draco how to push away her emotions, so she can forget how lonely she is?
On the other hand, I liked the reasoning here and the great insight into that house, that’s too easily stereotyped. Honestly, it’s one of the better explanation I’ve read and I just want to compliment you about it. Actually, the Machiavelli quote for once fits into the reasoning, since you gave us other reasons for Slytherin’s behaviour, giving credibility to Draco’s word. And, actually, I liked even his reasoning about showing emotions: he’s right, showing is as tiring as hiding, because following the passion of a strong emotion can really drain you out.
But, now, I just want to see how the two are going to interact: their wit is amazing and their bating really entertaining. I would go on hours reading their dialogues, because they contain so much truth in them and the clashing of two opposite worlds can create something new, surely better than a B&W vision.
And, they both will get use of being treated as nothing happened: Ginny, because she’s so tired of chats about the weather, and Draco, because it’s obvious he needs a distraction from all his grief. I just wonder how and when they’ll realize they need each other.
Name: Analucia Malfoy reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 24, 2006 06:04 pm
I really like this story. It has an intriguing plot, good characterizations of Draco and Ginny and I really like Jonathon Pierce. The dialogue truly reflects the personality of the speaker and moves the story along. Excellent work--please keep going.
Name: Razzle_be_dazzled reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 19, 2006 03:57 pm
I loved the convorsation between Ginny and Draco. I thought you captured them both very well!
Name: DrowningOphelia reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 19, 2006 02:37 pm
Great chapter! Looking forward to the next update.
Name: imelda reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 19, 2006 11:55 am
Great chapter!! I'm so sorry to hear that there won't be frequent updates because of school. Stupid education.
I thought the beginning interaction between Draco and Pierce was really funny, and it was good to see that Draco is still sharp and alert to whatever Pierce says that is odd. Unfortunately, he's no longer suspicious, which sucks.
Lots of D/G interaction, also, which rocks my sox. Ginny is being far too easily manipulated by Draco, however, as is Draco by Pierce. Ah, what a tangled web we weave. I hope Pierce gets his.
Which is surprising, considering how much I've always said I like him. But there wasn't too much about him in this chappie, so I'm currently biased towards resenting his manipulation. However, it was awesome seeing him reveal a bit of his annoyance when that kid interrupted his conversation with Draco. Pierce is such a smooth operator that it's fascinating to see him thrown off his game every once in a while.
Can't wait for the next update!! Hope it's as long as this one, lol...
Name: Akt5us reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 18, 2006 09:18 pm
Loved the chapter! Can't wait to read more!
Name: passion reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 18, 2006 08:02 pm
If it were some other writer..Draco and Ginny would probably be snogging rite now...but i prefer it this way...i just love your way of writing...everything is so calculated and well it is getting more interesting by each chapter...in the end of each chappie it always leaves me a little curious...love your work....the characterization of both the ferret and weasel girl is just perfect...
Name: Embellished reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 18, 2006 05:59 pm
I love Draco's little lesson on Slytherin life. It makes me suspect that Ginny will have something to teach him later on. Though now that I think about it, I guess she already did with the Quidditch win earlier on. Hm. Anyway, thanks for the chapter!
Name: WG reviewed
Unfriendly Competition on Aug 18, 2006 03:44 pm
Ahaa... step one in progress... looking forward to seeing where this goes.