Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
Girls Just Wanna Have Fun on Dec 16, 2007 10:40 am
i'm glad that snape and hermoine are getting along. haha. update soon!
Name: laylaelaine reviewed
Girls Just Wanna Have Fun on Dec 16, 2007 06:44 am
I really like this chapter. Update soon please! I love this story!
Name: DracoGinnyLover reviewed
Girls Just Wanna Have Fun on Dec 16, 2007 06:05 am
Really enjoyed good luck on the next one! :)
Name: ronlover reviewed
Girls Just Wanna Have Fun on Dec 15, 2007 08:03 pm
I love it. Update as soon as you can!
Name: MerleSanguinaire reviewed
Girls Just Wanna Have Fun on Dec 15, 2007 07:53 pm
For the french, it should actually be "Qu'est ce que vous pensez de vos fiancés?" As it is now, it translates to "Do you think to," not "What do you think of." =)
Author's Response: What a silly mistake. Thanks for catching it!
Name: indigoeeyes reviewed
Loco-motion on Oct 10, 2007 01:00 pm
i have nothing to say except this is going really good!!
Name: DracoGinnyLover reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 23, 2007 01:26 pm
This is such a cute story! Good Luck with it! :)
Name: Dex reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 21, 2007 12:27 pm
This is so ridiculously mary-jane that it's... well... ridiculous. But *squee* I love it! Seriously, had me laughing outrageously. You just need to work on character development. Also, relationship wise, it's going to fast. But I still love it, I see good things in your future. You have good ideas. (Although in real life they just would have given monetary rewards for having children, or a Fornicate Under Command of the King. Good thing this isn't real life eh? ;P )
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 20, 2007 01:25 pm
awe i really like this story! update soon!
Name: darkloveangel reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 09:16 pm
i love this story!
theresa*
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 08:25 pm
A girls’ day out sounds fun... ;)
Name: joey101 reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 05:18 pm
lovely chapter...update soon!
Name: Blueeyedbrunette reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 04:48 pm
this is going to be way fun!
Name: ContessaNatasha reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 03:14 pm
Eh. An ok start, but very typical. There are a million "arranged marriage" or "marriage law" fics out there, and unless this turns into a parody, nothing really stands out about it, and it is rather cliched.
Also, many people seem [i]very[/i] out of character, so you might want to work on that.
Cute fic, though, and some funny moments.
Oh, and you might want to watch the muggle references. The Burger King one in particular. I doubt Draco and Ginny would know what Burger King was, much less joke about it.
Name: abby reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 02:56 pm
YAY! one big happy...err, family! please update!
Name: princessswan reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 02:51 pm
HAHAHA poor Draco.. stealing Ginny's breakfast and getting attacked. :P Anyway, cute chapter, can't wait to see the girl's day out next chapter! :D
Name: detlefren reviewed
Loco-motion on Aug 19, 2007 02:24 pm
Ohhhh... I loved the chapter. This story is unfolding really well. P.S. This story is disturbing because A) Hermione/Snape-- ewwww B) The idea of forcing barely grown young adults into marriage is a little medieval.
That's just my thoughts; no offense intended. I truly adore the fic.
Name: snowfelon reviewed
Separate Ways on Aug 16, 2007 10:22 am
hmm... i prefered the first chapter actually... this one was a bit too rushed for me, I couldn't quite get into the story if you know what I mean. for example, the end of the previous chapter i thought was setting up something interesting, but I felt it got glossed over really quick at the start of this chapter. Still, I'm looking forward to reading what comes next =)
Name: detlefren reviewed
Somebody to Love on Aug 13, 2007 11:02 am
Okay, this is basically really disturbing, but it is well-written, and I'm enjoying it tons.
Author's Response: Disturbing? How so?
Name: Suzyfloozy reviewed
Separate Ways on Aug 13, 2007 01:39 am
Oh god I'm loving this, even the Hermion/snape pairing which I always found icky.
Name: ExquisiteBeauty reviewed
Somebody to Love on Aug 12, 2007 09:23 pm
I like this story so far!
.... But, I cant help noticing that the characters are a bit OOC. I dont want to dictate how you write your story, because it is yours, but the characters seem too conventional and none are taking the situation seriously. I mean, wont any of the characters feel awkward when theyre around their ex-lover with a new lover? Especially when theyre new lover is their soul mate? I cant imagine Hermione being so calm around Ron and Pansy, because Ron was ultimately her first love. And the fact that Ron is so calm is just... odd. He doesnt seem to care that Snape is Hermiones fiance, even though hes hated Snape since the age of 11. Also, the Slytherins are so open and friendly, calling each other by their first names. I would have thought that Draco would have put up more of a fight then just surrendering, and calling Ron 'Ron.'
I hope you dont take this as mean or rude, because Im not trying to be. Please just think of this as constructive criticism, or helpful advice.
Name: sweet gurl reviewed
Separate Ways on Aug 11, 2007 04:14 pm
mm i love this story!!
Name: princessswan reviewed
Separate Ways on Aug 11, 2007 08:42 am
HAHAHAHA.. wow. That's a LOT of Slytherins at the Burrow.. crazy. But yes, the pairings are pretty amazing.. some more common than others, but I love them all just the same. :) Anyway, please update again soon!! :D
Name: Hopeless reviewed
Separate Ways on Aug 11, 2007 07:47 am
oh really cute.
Name: amor_quies reviewed
Separate Ways on Aug 11, 2007 07:25 am
I agree with CourtneyFaith. I recognize some of the suggestions I made that you've begun to incorporate into this fic, like Mrs. Weasley's begrudging acceptance of the law. Whereas in the first chapter I felt she was all "Oh, there's nothing we can do about it," I was pleased to see that there is some concern in her about the law. I like that Mr. Weasley had a stronger reaction, which of course we've seen in CoS.
I still think that you could incorporate some more character development. I believe that would make the story seem less fast-paced (unless that's what you're going for) and more realistic. Also, while it was noble of Draco to ask Ginny's father for permission, I don't think he would have done it quite so suddenly. Again, this is probably a result of the fic's fast pace.
As a side note, Snape/Hermione still makes me squicky, but if that's what you want...go for it? Heh.