Name: lavenderab reviewed
Chapter 1 on Oct 14, 2008 05:07 pm
This reminds me of mr. And mrs. Smith
Author's Response: does it really??? hmmm...interesting thought :D
Name: emenem10 reviewed
Chapter 1 on Jan 30, 2008 12:22 am
Alright, now that you've tied me in knots I think I'll go back to my school work I still have to finish. Still no clue, but if you've managed this long without me hitting it on the head (people yell at me when I get it like the first chapter, lol) this will be a story to read. Much Love, Emily
Author's Response: Sorry for not replying to this earlier..seriously I have me exams going on..serious ones -So couldn't reply earlier. And lI'm really happy to see that you like it so much..keep in tuned..update is on the way (I hope its not returned to me many times)
Name: emenem10 reviewed
Chapter 1 on Jan 29, 2008 02:00 pm
Everyone else seems to use hit wizards, so if they're not, oh well. Baby? Where's the baby? lol. Alright... Good part, you kept me engaged. To the very end of the chapter my face didn't leave the screen. Bad part, I can't really think of one. You set the scene, gave the characters personalities, and left room for personal interpretation. Fantastic start!!! Much Love, Emily
Author's Response: Sorry for not replying to this earlier..seriously I have me exams goign on..serious ones -So couldn't reply earlier.rnWell.. baby, now thats one part I... hang on -you are talking about the baby in Hermione's arms..aren't you? of course that little Rosie in her arms.and I'm so elated that you were "glued in " to your seat till the end of the chapter...thats encouraging. I still have many characterisations lined up, you'll see in the next few chapters.. they might get boring somehow, but ultimately they ARE important.rnrnKeep tuned in.. for I just sent in my chapter to my beta -and hope it will be uploaded soon.
Name: Kalira reviewed
Chapter 1 on Jan 10, 2008 06:36 pm
I really like the way you've written Neville. He was always one of those characters that I thought didn't get enough time in the book, but it's nice to see him as a fairly influential character now and again. I like the rest of the chapter as well, no one seemed particularly out of character. Good job!
Author's Response: Yeah..I really wanted to write Neville in a very serious and influential way after HP7, he grew up so well in that book, finally. But really, I don't have much role from him (you'll see him once more quite shortly believe me), but the story's now going to revolve around Hogsmeade and the Auror head just can't interfere with the undercover work of other Aurors. Though laer, I want to add him up...which I surely think I will. thanks for your other comment... I really had to re-write it four times before I wrote what I exactly wanted.
Name: joliefille reviewed
Chapter 1 on Dec 02, 2007 10:25 am
Okay, I really like this chapter. It makes sense! I get where everything is going, except I still don't understand what happened in the prologue. Obviously, the war's still going on, but is Harry dead? And I'm happy for Neville, he's so grown up now.
Author's Response: uumm..I think you didn't see that the strory complies with ALL HP books except the Epilogue. So yes, the war has finished. And yes, Harry's dead.. he died THAT night, 7 yrs ago. except Harry's death, everything is bright as daylight!!!
Name: Amanda Mancini reviewed
Chapter 1 on Dec 01, 2007 09:07 pm
This is a great start, keep writing! :)
Author's Response: sure..your words always help!! :)
Name: Padfootedmoony reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 29, 2007 08:44 pm
awesome job so far
Author's Response: thanks...
Name: ronlover reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 29, 2007 02:58 pm
I love it! Update as soon as you can!
Author's Response: thanks...
Name: CourtneyFaith reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 29, 2007 01:29 pm
~I am not very clear on what was going on in Chapter one. Any clearification?~
Author's Response: oh I think you are confused as you are trying to link between the prologue with the first chapter. What I suggest is that you just forget about the prologue and read the first chapter as a new story, as you reach the fourth to fifth chapter and proceed forward, think of the Prologue and try to think what is happening, may be that will help :)
Name: vreggli reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 29, 2007 12:52 am
hej!
your story's really wonderful! looking forward to read more of it...
Author's Response: I'm also lookinf forward to post more and more!!
Name: Teller of Tales reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 11:24 pm
Loving the story so fair and can't wait to see what is going to happen next so please update soon.
Author's Response: Next chapter will be there as soon as my beta readers hands it over to me back!! I'm glad though that you liked the chapter.
Name: sweetpop reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 10:53 pm
oh, this was a great 'first' chapter, liked it a lot how you included more characters we've read about from Harry Potter, but yes, the Prologue did get me quite confused, but if that's the way its meant to be, so be it! Can't wait for the next chapter! x
Author's Response: Oh I'm so glad..and yes *nods frantically* the prologue will make sense, you just have to process the clues the right way. And even more characters are going to be there....more and more and more..
Name: twilights_pride reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 06:27 pm
I like it! I was thoroughly entertained by the entire spectacle, although I don't fully understand the promise made in the prologue.
Author's Response: I will suggest you something I suggested another reader. Just forget about the prologue and read the first chapter as a new story, as you reach the fourth to fifth chapter and proceed forward, think of the Prologue and try to think what is happening, may be that will help :)rnrnAnd I'm glad you liked the story still :D
Name: 0630938 reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 06:10 pm
Again what is happening?
Author's Response: hhmm....I am sorry. I suggest, just forget about the prologue and read the firt chapter as a new story, as you reach the fourth to fifth chapter and proceed forward, think of the Prologue and try to think what is happening, may be that will help :)
Name: D_Rad_88 reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 04:31 pm
Haha, this is so great. This just made me laugh my ass off. All that teasing and sarcastic remarks between Draco and Ginny are so great. Great start! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks so much..I'm waiting to post the next chapter too!!! :D
Name: 4everdandg reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 04:16 pm
wow! a new Neville... =) hahaha... the next chapter(s) soon, i hope... thanks!
Author's Response: I know Auror Neville does not match with Professor Neville of Jo's, but even then,I chose him only because even Jo has shown him gaining enough confidence, and I did it too, though I showed him as an auror head. I loved it. Next chapter will bethere as soon as my beta readers hands it over to me back!!
Name: raistlin89 reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 03:00 pm
this is good so far. but im confused about the prolouge. is there gonna be more elaboration on that?? and im anticipating the fun in this story. good job
Author's Response: the elaboration on the Prolgue is not yet there in the near future..though as you read the story further, there wil be enough clues pointing out what the Prologue is actually about..so stay tuned, you'll get the hints pretty soon!! And the fun part is coming soon!!
Name: LuvWabbit reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 01:58 pm
I can tell this is going to be such a fun story. I can't wait to see how they can handle living together. Great job!
Author's Response: well, obviosuly they can't take it easily enough to live together, there's got be fight and stuff *squeals* wait, please don't read that line, I wasn't supposed to write that LOL...but I'll make that exception for you :D I am going to now write those very chapters about them settling in, and I have all these so minutely detailed in my mind, I can't wait to just type them on my MsWord.... Thanks so much for encouraging me!!
Name: Funnykido reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 12:46 pm
This was so fun to read! I love the dynamics between Draco and Ginny, and the story has so much potential! (I think the plot is especially good!)
Author's Response: The plot is still left to reveal itself :D.... though I'm glad that you like the story even at this stage you know, because many authors muck up things after a few chapters (hopefully I will not be among them) making the characters totally OOC. Thanks so much.
Name: joano reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 11:32 am
this is looking really good. I've only got two mini things.
the sentence when ginny steps out of neville's office really needs to have either no 'As' at the beginning or 'she was' both without the comma to scan fluently
"As Ginny strolled back out of Neville's office whistling to herself and clutching the files in her arms *she was* acutely aware that she was the focus of the attention of the office"
the other is even smaller- must you use 'possess' when talking about a wife and child? perhaps a slightly less patriarchal 'have'would be a neutral alternative?
Author's Response: Thanks that you like it. and regarding the points..thanks so much for pointing them out. While writing them and reading them myself, I confess that "possess" didn't seem somewhat wrong to me, but when you pointed it out to me -Yes, then I realises that it seemed harsh, patriarchal. I'll try and keep that in mind. And then that of *she was*, I think if it was "she became" in its place, it would have been exactly correct, otherwise the sentence is in perfect sense... Thanks still for bringing them to my notice -these things do help in the long run.
Name: TwistedPixie reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 10:11 am
aaawww, come one!!! i want more!! please...it sounds very good so far. just. need. more!
xx
Author's Response: Yes, you'll be getting more..stay tuned :D
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 09:13 am
great job. i like it so far. tell me if it's ever published. i'm still confused by the prologue but i'm okay with that. haha. update soon!
Author's Response: Oh..I'm too small to get it published. but yes, If its finished as well as I want it to be published, I'll definitely tell you. The prologue should be clear enough when you start processing the clues the right way. Glad that you like it :)
Name: crazykay254 reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 07:24 am
wheeeee! the only thing that will be difficult for draco and ginny is the fact that they'll be polyjuiced and look like different people! this is going to be fun!! please update soon!
Author's Response: Oh, it won't be difficult for them, as they won't be taking Polyjuice Potion...oops, wait!! I shouldn't have typed it !! LOL..well you get to read it in the next chapter anyways. Though still I promise its going to fun, I'm certinly enjoying writing it on my part -I just hope you do too. Regarding the updates, well I'm very sorry to say, my beta is really quite busy and I to have my 10+2 papers going on, which are really going to effect my future and colleges, so we are quite busy, though don't worry at all, I have four more chapters typed and we'll be updating on a regular basis. Just with a bit of gap. Hope you'll still read them :)
Name: DracoGinnyLover reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 05:33 am
Well, this is great but I still can't wait to figure out the prolouge! It is agrivating....that makes the story really good! LOL! Good luck with the next chapter. :)
Author's Response: I know how much mystery makes a story even more exciting to read, being an avid reader myself LOL!! And yes, I'm not going to solve the prologue in the near future, YOU have to solve it on your own as you go with the chapters. Though thanks so much to let me know that you are waiting for the mystery to unfold, it surely helps in my determination to write more and more and makes me believe that somebody is out there, waiting to see what happens in my story..LOVE YA!!
Name: AuntAnnie reviewed
Chapter 1 on Nov 28, 2007 05:21 am
You know this could really have alot of potential. The Prologe is still a mystery, (you could clear that up - hate mysterys like that) any way please update soon, you have me hooked.
Author's Response: Yeps I know this story has a potential..and I have quite a fair bit of the main story line plotted out in my mind. But I have a bit of a problem regarding the secondary plot, which I am sure I'll be able to sort out quickly enough. I'm glad that I have you hooked, lets just hope that I maintain it :) THe prologue is supposed to be mystery which will be cleared out quite late in the story, BUT, I wil be handing out clues quite generously during the course to help the readers figure out themselves as to what is actually happening out there. And yes, I will be updating, hoping that my beta reader adjusts to the picky nature of this site (she's new to this site, you know :D)