Name: BIQxoxBOHICA reviewed Him on Jul 01, 2008 06:56 pm

The one main thing I don't like about this fic is Rose. Well, not her as a character, it's more of how you portray her. Four-year-olds don't sleep in a crib, they have beds. And they can talk, probably in full, understandable sentences. My neice is two, and she sleeps in a bed, and talks in almost-full sentences.
And overall it's kind of boring. But that's just my opinion..

Author's Response: Hmm, I'm sorry you feel that way. About the four-year-old thing, the reason I made her four is because my cousin is four. She can talk but you can't understand her so she generally just uses one or two words.rnrnAs for the boring, I'm sorry you think that. Do you mean the plot is boring? Or do you mean my writing is boring? I'd be much better off if you'd give details.

Name: malvia reviewed Him on Jul 01, 2008 05:27 am

I got a little confused about how Draco, Ginny and the rest were portrayed. There wasn't as much character development as I had hoped. It seemed rushed at the very least but regardless of what I just typed, I do like the concept of the story. I certainly don't mind that you have a lot of things going on at the same time. This shows promise.