Name: GoldenFawkes reviewed Chapter 1 on Jan 21, 2009 08:13 pm

Foofaraw!

This looks like it's going to be so much fun! I fresh twist... I can't wait!

Author's Response: Such a fabulous word ... :P Hope you enjoy reading as much as I'm enjoying writing it!

Name: rowan_greenleaf reviewed Chapter 1 on Jan 21, 2009 04:52 pm

LOL, that was pretty good. You have a penchant for writing snarky and catty D/G banter. *smiles self-indulgently at private joke*

Seriously though, I noticed in this story and the other one that you're really great at writing D/G dialogue. Definitely something that can make or break a story. Great job.

My only criticism is that you could have foreshadowed the nature of Ginny and Draco's relationship a bit because it was sort of abrupt to find out through Harry during their dialogue at the end.

I'm sure you intended for it to be that way, and it was a nice twist, but it was underplayed. I think it would have been nice to include some hinting at the beginning, nothing big, maybe just the flutter of butterflies in her stomach at seeing him, or her noticing how hot he is, etc, so that it doesn't come as such a shock at the end to realize they're together. Cause right now it's just like "Huh?" as opposed to "OMMYGOSH!"

Know what I mean?

...

Meh. Ignore me.

Great writing! Add more soon. :D

Author's Response: I apologize for the lack of forshadowing ... I admit, one of my downfalls as a writer is that I tend to forget the fact that my readers don't have the insight I have into my stories - I leave them floundering sometimes! :P That said, there shall be lots about their relationship in future chapters - enjoy! :)