Name: suzymaholic reviewed
I: Defiance is beautiful on Feb 27, 2010 11:42 pm
I like it I like it!
Author's Response: I like you I like you! (Thanks for the review!)
Name: FiveOhFirst reviewed
I: Defiance is beautiful on Feb 27, 2010 12:34 pm
I really like your introduction. It sets the mood for the chapter really nicely. ^_^
‘"Finite Incantatem," she murmured, watching the green light disappear and leave her in darkness once more.’—Did you mean ‘leaving her in darkness once more? That word sounded a little funny to me.
Your imagery involving the green light is astounding. And I especially adore this sentence: ‘Instead, that green light turned her shaking, white hands into alien limbs: pale bones dipped in viridian.’
I love how many different characters you’ve included so far; Seamus and Adrian aren’t usually characters that would be included, but I’m glad that you have.
The password is very original, ahahah.
I love your description of the war-torn Golden Trio. Not something that you usually see, and it’s very nice to see a story where they aren’t quite so invincible.
Fred was very interesting. I like that you didn’t just tell us outright that he was blind. It’s a little sad that they’re stuck working for the Death Eaters, but still very inventive on your part.
Great start and I can’t wait to read more.
-Jayde. ^_~
Author's Response: You know, I stared at your username going, WOW THAT NAME IS FAMILIAR until I remembered who it was? Haha. And apologies in advance: FIA doesn't allow review-replies to have any sort of paragraph breaks in them, so this will be a huge chunk of response. That particular confusing line does not sound confusing to me, so you'll just have to be stuck with it because I'm definitely not going to go back and try to change it on FIA because that is next to impossible. Viridian is also my favorite color name. Well, not THE favorite: vermilion and carmine are close seconds and thirds. There is going to be a wide array of characters included, so I really hope I don't overload the story by including so many. Hopefully I'll just be able to focus on a few a chapter and that way keep it manageable. I've always sort of not-liked the Golden Trio, but in this story I've got a bit of pity and grudging respect for them. I'm not entirely sure where I'm going to take Fred and George, mainly because I haven't thought about them too much, but they'll probably/most-likely make it back in and be important. I hope you liked the second chapter (which you did, because you already reviewed it)! *hugs!*
Name: CCC reviewed
I: Defiance is beautiful on Feb 26, 2010 06:09 pm
I was going to be really ticked off if this was a one-shot. I'm so glad it's not. The part about Fred being blind snuck up on me. I like how you let the reader figure it out slowly. It had more impact that way.
Author's Response: That would be a really intense one-shot, wouldn't it? Haha. No, it's chaptered, albeit slowly chaptered because I was busy with high school and college and track and soccer and basically everything but fanfiction. But! I'm out of all four now, so things will be updated much more quickly. A lot of things in this story snuck up on *me*, too, because I'm not really planning it. I do like that you liked the way it was revealed, too. Thanks for the review!
Name: wcoast_girl reviewed
I: Defiance is beautiful on Feb 26, 2010 03:29 pm
very dark and kind of depressing. Reminds me of the rebels in the matrix. Dying to know more about ginny and draco and their history. Great!
Author's Response: I'm glad you got that impression about it being all dark and depressing, because that's exactly what I was going for! And the hopelessness associated with the rebels in the Matrix is perfect, too, although I haven't heard that comparison yet. I'm humbled that you'd use it! I love the Matrix. Everything about Draco and Ginny will be revealed in due time. ;) Thanks for the review!
Name: sparkling reviewed
I: Defiance is beautiful on Feb 26, 2010 09:59 am
I think you have the making of a really good story here,,,so wanting more. It's alot of dark moments in this chapter??? the characters are very different, which is refreshing, something unique in your writing very good for you!. and I like the details you wrote into the story.
I like the twist with Fred & George being double agents?? THAT WAS A WOW MOMENT! VERY ORIGINAL, AND ALSO WITH FRED'S BLINDNESS.
THEN THE END WITH GINNY LOOKING FOR DRACO! AND THEN HIM FINDING HER, SNEEKING AROUND AS HE PUT IT, INTO THE DRAGONS DEN! I am wanting more!!!! I really am looking forward to reading Draco & what his character will be like????.
I hope that you will update at a good pace, this story is too good to wait for long updates between chapters......
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful review! You made me blush at a couple of points in here. :D A lot of things in this chapter sort of crept up on me because I'm not really planning it, so I'm glad that the surprises--like Fred being blind or the twins being double agents--are so likable. The next chapter (which will shortly be posted) will have plenty of Draco, so you'll find out all about him. :D I'm sorry that the wait was so long between the first and second chapter, but I assure you this won't be a habit. I just finished up with high school (for good) and my first year of college, plus soccer and track, so I'll have plenty of time now to write. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!