I push away from the bed, or it pushes me away, and I grip my chair. My eyes don’t leave Draco’s thin face, and I marvel at the silvery white of his hair and eyebrows and eyelashes, itching to touch them, but death won’t allow me; I have respect for the dead.Category: Completed Short Stories
Wow. I don't know what to say. This is an amazing story. The emotions are palpable. You say at the start that angst is difficult to create, but I must add that you have most effectively achieved it in this fic.
At the start, many different scenarios went through my mind as to whether this was an AU with Draco and Ginny married -for why would the Weasley clan be there?- and wonder how and why Draco is a Death Eater still. I could have gone back to the summary page to check if it's an AU or DH-compliant, but I felt like I didn't want to know ahead of time, so I just kept reading the story instead. I'm rather glad that I did, as the piecing together of the puzzle ratcheted up the tension, IMO. Though, now that I think about it, the constant chiming of the clock enhances that tension also.
I particularly liked Blaise's memory, especially the part in which Draco reacts to Scorpius' comments about Ginny. Draco's fury and Blaise's frank acknowledgement of the truth was very well written. Well, also Hermione's recollection of Draco's final moment was a favourite part of mine.
I still wonder how the rest of the Weasleys came to know of Ginny and Draco's unique relationship and how they came to follow her to the hospital room.
This is a very unique story that is particularly moving. I hope to read more of your writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I struggled with this story, actually, to create the best angst I could, but now that it's in my system, I can't seem to write anything else. I'm so glad you liked it, and those are actually the parts I worked hardest on, so thank you for the comment! I intended for Ron and Hermione to have informed the others as soon as they found Draco dead. Hope that clears it up!
I know someday you'll have a beautiful life, I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky-- but why...why can't it be mine? One-shot for the Christmas Fic Challenge issued at The DG Forum.Category: Completed Short Stories
Okay, so I feel physically sick. It's because of the painful way in which Draco broke up with Ginny and then broke down for a moment to kiss her, to memorize her expression before he shattered her only tether that kept her grounded.
The "distinct impression that someone was jamming a broomstick into his chest" is something that I felt. It's amazing that you can write something that can make the readers feel so strongly for the characters.
The characterisation is spot on. Even if I was hoping, deep down, that Draco would tell Ginny the truth, the fact that he didn't was very true to character. Him trying to convince himself She’s Potter’s now. And it’s better that way. is so heartfelt.
By the way, I thought I'd also mention the little things that I really liked with this story, that just pulled the whole thing together. The fact that Draco suddenly stops and is horrified that he is almost forgetting Ginny; the description his eyes hardening until he was certain they resembled steel- it was a look he’d seen in his father’s eyes many times, a look he saw every day in the mirror.; that he acknowledged that Ginny would try to find a reason for Draco's cruelty, [t]he knowledge was comforting, but it was also a curse. I don't know why, but that line stood out to me. It sums up the torment of knowing that she truly loves him, but that he cannot allow that to continue.
This will be added to my favourites, for sure. I hope you keep up with the amazing writing.
Author's Response:
Shaded, do you realize writers sit around waiting for the kind of review that you just gave me? ^_^
Seriously, it's wonderful to hear that my writing made such an impression on you that could actually empathize with the characters physically, and I LOVE hearing the parts that readers liked best of the story! Also, you totally GOT IT. You understood where Draco was coming from, and you didn't let him fool you-- even if he succeeded in fooling himself briefly with that whole "Potter sent her" bit.
Thank you for your wonderful compliments, for the favorites add and for taking the time to write this awesome review! You have totally made my day with that! ^_^
He chanced upon it much like the others did. By simply wandering about the streets of Dublin; somewhat safe from the bloody awful mess he created back home. A portal that led to a place where every dream became reality.Category: Works in Progress
This was a great chapter. I liked Ginny's retorts in the first part. The ending was cool, too. I'm looking forward to more D/G scenes. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I like Ginny's retorts, too. :D
A poem Draco wrote to Ginny after they broke up due to her family issues.Category: Poetry
Brilliant! ^_^ Kudos for not only writing a very expressive poem, but also making it rhyme! I bow down to your writing skills! ;D
I liked the rhythm of the poem; the short lines, when read, sound as though Draco is desperate to let Ginny know how he feels inside, to explain that he left Ginny for her own good.
Two lines in particular stuck out, as they show how very insightful Draco is; how he knows that Ginny could not be happy with him if away from her family.
They are the future to which you toast,
I'd never steal your sun my love
I hope that you'll be posting more of your writing here. I'll be keeping an eye out, for sure. :)
A seven month long affair comes to and end. In the room where their relationship started, Ginny wonders just what this means and whether she can end it at all.Category: Completed Short Stories
This is a very well written story. The tone of it is just right. My favourite line:
‘I’d say I wrote it for you,’ says Draco after a while. ‘Or that I wrote it about you. But I didn’t; I just wrote about the way you make me feel.’
When you are made for more, can love ever be enough? Draco seeks out a most unlikely character to get advice about his engagement to Ginevra Weasley.Category: Completed Short Stories
Because really, when you’re made for more, love is never enough. And it never could be.
Gah! I simultaneously love this story for it's realism and hate it for what that realism brings - Draco unable to give up his style of life, his upbringing, to stay with Ginny.
I love Andromeda! I am in total awe of how realistic that conversation was. Her unwavering love tempered by regret. This line made my breath catch:
I know in that instant, if she could go back, which choice she would make. The same choice I know now that I must make.
Is it wrong that I find Draco's family, of Scorpius & Astoria to be adorable? The comfortable banter between them was heart-warming. It's good to have a different perspective of them, as so often both Draco & Astoria are shown to be cold towards each other.
Astoria's receding hairline comment made me laugh. I like that dig at the actual DH epilogue. *g*
I would really love to read the alternate, DG, ending. I wonder if Draco travels to the land of If-Onlys in that piece, also.
It had started with those eyes. Whenever Ginny looked back on the past few months, she always came to this same conclusion. How something so innocent had ended up so horribly wrong she couldn’t say, but she knew, she just knew, that it had started with those damned soulful eyes.Category: Works in Progress
Lol, brilliant! I like how you made it seem that the 'soulful eyes' at the start were Draco's, but they turn out to be Harry's. I like the style of writing. I'll be keeping an eye out for updates. :)
Author's Response: Thanks very much! :)
By the way, I like how you introduced Ginny and Draco's relationship abruptly through her and Harry's talk. The fact that she was very annoyed that Draco, instead of Ron, caught the brunt of the joke, was a good way to show, subtly, that she cares for Draco. (I'm writing this since I saw that another viewer didn't like the 'lack of foreshadowing'.)
Author's Response: Thank you! Everyone has different preferences for how stories are written, and I'm glad you enjoyed mine! :)
Hehe, that's brilliant! I like how you tread the fine line between making Draco caring and OOC. The way he demanded that Pansy tell him what was wrong was totally Draco and the hesitant asking of Ginny's assistance quite in character. Hehe, the image of Draco stalking after a kitten whilst cursing it under his breath was hilarious.
I hope that there'll be a new chapter up soon! I'm really enjoying this story.
Author's Response: Thank you, I work hard to try and keep Draco in character ... it's one of my pet peeves when he isn't. I'm glad it's working so far! :)
Ginny has lost her shoe, and thus begins her bad day. Who could have possibly taken it from her?Category: Completed Short Stories
Hehe, a nice bit of fluff; I like the way you've included the loss of a shoe in the fic. A good balance of plot and fluff. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Without the shoe, there never would have been a story. Haha. :)
"All was lost. Dumbledore dead, the Ministry gone, and my family only spared because our blood was too pure to waste."Category: Works in ProgressInspired by Beauty and the Beast. But you'll find no singing teapots or enchanted roses here, I'm afraid. Just two Dark Lords, a country divided, and one girl to damn them all.
I am usually wary of fics that become total AUs, but I think I'm going to make an exception with this one, since the writing style is very good. I hope that there'll be a new chapter soon. :)
Ginny could hardly believe it. Draco Malfoy, that supercilious prat of a boy, had done something she wasn't sure she would have been capable of herself. Written for the D/G Fic Exchange 2008Category: Completed Short Stories
Hehe, this is an amusing fic. Hilarious book titles, too. :D It's refreshing to see Ginny take the initiative and ask Draco out.
Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! I'm a firm believer in a girl taking charge. :)
Draco and Ginny discover that the truth is a funny creature, especially when you can’t lie successfully.Category: Long and Completed
This is brilliant! For some reason, the fact that the majority of the story, especially the latter part of this chapter, is pure dialogue works quite well. There's just enough description and the banter, the life-blood of DG fics, carries the story well.
The choosing of each other's partners sounds like it'll be quite fun. I think I'll have a look at the DG fic exchange to read the rest - I can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was a little concerned about the amount of dialogue, but getting Draco and Ginny to stop digging at each other is near on impossible at times ;) I'm so glad it works! I hope you enjoy the rest :)
I just read this on the fic exchange and loved it. Their antics were hilarious. It's lovely to read a realistic Luna, too. And Blaise was a dear. Hehehe, 'tho Draco and Ginny may not think so. All in all, a very enjoyable read.
Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I'm not usually fond of writing Luna, but she was easy to figure out in this fic for some reason. Blaise is always fun to play with ;) Draco and Ginny, as you know, weren't terribly amused with Blaise's efforts!
Aw.
I really enjoyed reading this chapter again. It's always enjoyable to see a realistic Lucius who cares for his family - add that to the interesting circumstances and this becomes a favourite chapter of mine. :)
Author's Response: Thank you :) Lucius is an old softy on the inside ;)
It was the fight of the century. A battle of epic proportions. And afterwards, it was vowed to never happen again. Never again would they battle for their kids’ affections. Originally written for the 2008 Fall D/G Fic Exchange for kaygina.Category: Long and Completed
*Grins* This was brilliant! It had me laughing. I love the children; their personalities were very well developed in this fic. Draco being clueless about the general likes and dislikes of his children was very realistic and the way that the competition helped him grow closer with them was heartwarming. Oh, by the way I love the part when Draco thought Ginny was going to buy Orion his first broom - for a moment there my heart dropped when Draco got so upset, but seeing how observant Orion was made it so adorable.
This is one of my fave stories in the fic exchange (I found the list last week and am making my way through the fics). The light banter and competitiveness was well written.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! *blushes* I really had a lot of fun writing the kids' personalities; Orion, especially, was my favorite to write. I'm very happy to hear that you enjoyed my story so much! Thanks again for your lovely review! :D
Category: Completed Short StoriesGinny experiments on her hair with very Cinderella-esque consequences.
Written for dgficexchange for the D/G Fic Exchange 2008.
Hehe. Very cute. I like that Draco knew it was Ginny all along. It was surprising that it's your first attempt at fluff; it was fun to read.
Draco and Ginny enters the annual Twenty-Four Hour Dance-A-Thon.Category: Long and Completed
Written for the Fall D/G Fic Exchange 2008.
Hehe. This was a fun story to read. The couples' determination to win was amusing.
I love Victoire! It's cute how Draco dotes on her. His children will be utterly spoilt.
By the way, I like the Malfoy motto. 'Tis very apt!
Nothing is Incurable except death itself and no one knows that better than Healer Weasley.Category: Works in Progress
Ooh, this is a very good start to the story. I'm a sucker for hospital dramas; one with Draco and Ginny thrown in also is even better. :D I like everything about this chapter - the description of the fast-pace A&E ward at the start to how Ginny interacts with her colleagues and also Taylor. I'm curious as to how the D/G will progress, especially since they seem to be clearly on opposing sides of the war. I hope there'll be a new chapter up soon!
Ooh, is it Draco coming to get Ginny's help for Blaise, or vice versa? I liked how Malfoy felt almost humbled by Ginny's convictions, if only for a moment, and told her about the influx of victims in advance. But I must say that it seems very out of the ordinary for Ginny to tell two strangers about her miscarriage just because they asked what was wrong.
In any case, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)
*From the 2008 D/G Fic Exchange* Draco and Ginny compete against each other in The Pike – a professional wizarding tournament that’s also highly illegal. What’s even more illegal is the memory of their one night stand five years ago and how their leftover feelings confuse and distract them until the only left to do is to eliminate the competition.Category: Works in Progress
I've just finished reading this on the DG fic exchange and it was brilliant. The characters are very well explored. The adventure was well-paced, the friction between the two was hot and Ginny's gesture at the end (before the epilogue) sweet. And I adored the ending! I think my favourite line is: "I've already tried romantic. You had your chance." Heh, so typically Draco.
With great actions come great self-revelations.Category: Completed Short Stories
Such a wonderful story. I never thought I'd say that about a fully-compliant DG fic! The metaphors at the start, when Ginny is numb to all around her. The realistic interaction between the two characters, especially with keeping them totally in character.
“I’m glad,” he said softly. “Glad it was you at the lake; otherwise, I may have kept going.” This line was one of my favourites. :)
Frodo's paraphrased words seemed very appropriate to this story. That tentative connection is still there between Draco and Ginny, even almost two decades later. :)
When the Wizengamot ordered Ginny Weasley to search Malfoy Manor, the last thing she imagined she would encounter was a Portkey; A Portkey that would leave her stranded on an island with Draco Malfoy.Category: Long and Completed
This is even better reading it for the second time. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for reading a second time! :D
One-shot in which Lucius Malfoy must wrestle with his absent conscience concerning an upcoming attack on the Weasley family, thinking of one girl in particular and her relationship with his son. Ignoring his wife's threat that Ginny's death would destroy his only son, Lucius follows his orders and must face the consequences of his decision.Category: Completed Short Stories
Oh my goodness. I'm crying now; this is a very moving story.
In the first scene, I really liked Narcissa and her plea to Lucius to save their son. Her desperation at Draco's leaving to visit Ginny tore away at me; a mother's desperate grip of her child before he is irrevocably changed. :'(
I started crying when Ron lay his hand on Draco's shoulder at the funeral; it is fitting to see them understand each other so well, even if it is in such horrific circumstances. Narcissa's feelings of guilt are palpable. I really like how you've developed her character.
Right at the end, when Lucius notices that Draco had found his photo of Ginny, that was a huge shock for me. I wasn't sure if Draco was going to find out about Lucius' role. I wonder if Draco knew before the burial, even. Does he realise that even his mother was aware of the attack beforehand? If he does, that knowledge must tear at him even more.
Brilliant fic; I hope to read more of your stories in the future. :)
Author's Response: Wow. You got every last detail that I tried to work into my story. Thank you so much! You're review is all the proof I need that I did convey what I wanted to. Thank you.
Oh, reading your reply to other reviewers, I hope it doesn't mean what I think it does; Draco committing suicide! Please tell me I'm wrong. Pretty please?!
Author's Response: It's possible. Like I said it's up to the reader and I won't take that decision away from anyone by explaining what it was for me. You can make it that he joined the Order too, whatever you think of when you finish the story is the ending for you. But I do enjoy seeing the differences in what people think. Thanks for your review.