I feel like this is missing more. If this was submitted to the DG fic exchange I would nominate this one for 'most in need of a sequel.' I hope you will consider posting another chapter that ties up the potential of their relationship - the tracks you have laid out for it in this chapter.

Great writing - I am however left yearning for more :p.

This is so good! I love how you're working the romance up. I love this story - Blaise/Luna - esp how Luna runs the cooking magazine, which is perfectly in character with her. I also adore the way you made her very sharp/not ditzy (which so many other stories do) while still being herself.

More? :P Pretty please? Soon? I want to read all of it :D.

Oh, your chapter made me wonder if Ginny is plain-looking, or is that just her perception...

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad Luna comes off well. Ginny looks however you imagine her. :)

I reread this - couple things. One, my favorite chapter so far. Two, I like how you had Ginny make the first move (on the kiss).

Also :p is it wrong if I want Draco to be Ginny's first? I'm hoping she didn't go that far with her other boyfriends, but it is your story :p.

And I loved the imagery of how Draco looked when Ginny open the door and he's tugging on his lapels. For some reason I imagined the whole Ministry scene as a white tie event so that Draco is wearing a tailcoat.

Author's Response: Thanks very much! Re: firsts - if you want to imagine it that way, I don\'t see a problem with it; it\'s not integral to the overall plot, so go right ahead! :)

Okay good parts and parts that could use some improvement.

I like your writing style - it's a good mix of description and dialog.

The main part that I have a problem with is the plot itself. It seems very very cliche to me. It's a 'we shouldn't be together, but let's be together anyways because I can't resist you.' I feel like there's some natural progression missing. Granted it's a one shot, but there still should be some essence of Draco in here. What I mean by that is he's really sappy in here, and there's no evidence of the person we see in canon, no snarkiness, no meanness, etc.

Last criticism - it's a little weird for me that he just hops on a broom, knows instinctively to go to the Burrow in the middle of the night, and then they end up in her bedroom doing the deed (I assume) with I assume her family in the house as well.

You have potential and a good writing style, just be careful of the plausibility of your plot.

Author's Response: Thanks very much for the honest and helpftul review! I did realize it was cliche even as I wrote it, but I thought that as good a place to start as any. Something to build from, at the very least. One thing I wanted to comment on- the last bit with them waking in bed together is meant to be a random glimpse into their future, a.k.a. a fluffy bit for the ending. I believe that at some point I mention that it\'s their bedroom, but that\'s something that could easily be missed. Again, thank you for your ideas and criticisms, I will most definitely take them into account.

I didn't think it was possible to be more of a hm cliffhanger isn't the right word, but you get the idea - so more of a cliffhanger than the last chapter. I love the stories where Draco is her first. I actually didn't expect it in this one since she seemed so ready to jump him.

Anyways, looking forward to the next chapter :p. Thanks for posting this one so fast.

Er, not to rain on your parade or anything, but uh, where is the D/G in this? I don't mind if people want to write about other pairings, but when I go to dracoandginny.com I expect at least SOME D/G in there with a side of whatever the author wants, but there's no mention of either in the first two chapters.

I realize this is a companion fic to your other one, but hm I'm hoping D/G will show up at some point.

Author's Response: No problem, it's a fair comment. These two chapters were too long to be one single one, which is what I originally planned. This has been more of a prologue to the actual story, where D/G do show up as more than a mention later on. (There was a blink-and-you'll-miss-it mention in the first chapter.)

Okay I've been biting my tongue for a bit, but I have say if you don't have D/G in a solid relationship without the Astoria bit yet it's getting a little ridiculous.

Hm, so I haven't been keeping up since past chapter 20's? 30's? It's been a while, but I wanted to point out that you have this tendency of dragging stories out to waaaay past where they should go. You have some John Irving tendencies, that's okay, but by chapter 96 he would have definitely had something happen (i.e. Ginny + Draco getting together) by this point, as it's the main point of the story type.

Maybe I just don't get it, or 300K+ stories just aren't my cup of tea when they see to never have an ending. You tend to start new stories around the 100 chapter mark for your older ones and don't finish them.

Again, not everyone is going to agree with me here, but I much preferred it when you stuck to a more believable story. Ten Years Later comes to mind. The beginning parts of it were some of my favorite which is probably why I stuck with it even when it started getting way off track. That's also another thing you tend to do, pretty much all your stories will go into some weird little universe where Twilight, Celtic/Norse gods combine and the ever infernal devil figure, whether it's Loki or Lucifer/etc. First time okay it's kinda cute/clever, but by the end it's like okay, all the stories are turning out the same - Ginny being the clueless one but stubborn and getting them into trouble due to her cluelessness, Draco being super secretive and possessive, and then the devil figure. I think you've managed to substitute Lucius for Lucifer in this one, but again I haven't read the later chapters.

So my point is I think your writing is much more realistic when you stay relatively close to cannon and not introduce all these strange elements to it (Edward Cullen...Aro), and I prefer it. It's very jarring to have those many crossovers and pulling the reader out of the main story when you start jumping into the devil/insanity territory, but perhaps you like your crackfics as you call them.

I just much preferred and thought a lot more of your writing when it stuck to JK Rowling Cannon with a couple of believable twists (succubus instead of Ginny comes to mind in TYL). But hey if you like what you're doing :p then you should keep doing it.

Author's Response: Nobody needs to bite his/her tongue; everybody is free to voice an opinion. However, I'm not quite sure if you've read the entire fic (because you do say that you haven't read the later chapters) or are just responding to the length at this point or criticizing aspects of other fics (such as *Nineteen Years Later* or MoM, or the shorter fics?), which makes this a bit confusing to follow. Everything that people say is certainly read and taken into consideration. However, there's nothing that will make me stop writing this fic at this point, whatever anyone may think.

Ya idk, I find it kinda weird and a little gross. I do like some of your other works, but I think you might have a harder time finding an audience that will like this one just due to the content. It's nothing against your writing style, just what you wrote about. I can see what you meant about having a hard time with the warning/descriptions, but you might want to find a way to include it in the summary? Or something, cause I was expecting something a little different when reading it. You could always put an author's note at the beginning of this perhaps.

Author's Response: It's tough thing about warnings. While this isn't a kink that floats everyone's boat, there's always people that find warning for every possible kink insulting, too.

I like that you've kept with the narrator tone. It's a little bit jarring with the jump back and forth in time - perhaps work on the transition a little? I can see what you're trying to do and I feel it's almost there, but not quite perfect yet.

Oddly enough, I think my favorite line was Draco very in character - I'll promise you nothing til you make up your mind. It surprised me because I was expecting him to concede since it's apparent he's developing feelings for Ginny, but that's definitely something a defensive Draco would say. And I was surprised because it was unexpected yet perfectly in character when I thought about it. I like that he's somewhat ruthless, and he has his reasons for doing things, yet he has a soft spot for Ginny. I also really liked he pointed out the trap in answering her question, because it fits with how clever he is. And I especially loved his response when she demands that he answer. It's vague (Draco-like) and fits perfectly with a politician - answering the question without actually answering it.

I probably didn't like how bipolar Ginny was in this chapter - groping him one second and slapping him the next then lusting after him again then angry and comforting.

I'm never a fan of Ginny being some dim-witted, like having no idea that Draco likes her, because he pretty much clearly stated it here. So that would be another portion I didn't like about the chapter. If he was more vague then I'd understand, but in my mind (but perhaps not in your story) she's pretty sharp and would pick up on these clues. The only time she wouldn't is if she were super distracted and interested in someone else, or perhaps Draco being very subtle about it.

Probably favorite part of the chapter was from 'I havent touched you because you've..' to the end. That I felt was very real, and heartwarming and yet kept with the right pace of the story. Don't get me wrong I definitely want to see some D/G action, but pacing wise it was perfect for where you're at even if I'm going mad with impatience :P.

So I would say overall mixed feelings about the chapter:
-minus on Ginny's character/reactions here and the jumps in between past and present (I do like seeing the history, but it doesn't flow really well in your story right now)
-big plus on Draco's character/response. You've got that nailed here. Better than the other chapters.

I'm still keeping my fingers crossed for a happy ending, esp with the way it's going. But please if it's going to be a tragedy would you put that in the warnings/genre or something for the story, cause I don't want to read an unhappy ending, esp with the optimism/way it's going now?

Author's Response: Ha! You deleted your review! I saw, i saw! :P No matter, you expressed yourself very well in the first one. I do understand what you mean by different timeline scenes jarring each other. I actually spent unreasonable time copy-pasting them back and forth, being unhappy about the result no matter what, but until you pointed it out I had no idea what the problem was. Thanks! Sometimes you just need another brain to pick these thing out. I won't be rewriting it any more of corse, it would take a major rewrite which I'm not really interested any more, but as I'm sure I will be using the same format in the future, I'll know what to pay atention to. And I will take a look at the problem in the last two chapters. I thank you on complementing my Draco. To tell you the truth, I'm pretty sure that cann Draco is not so smart, but yo never know, maybe the war really did wisen him up, most canon we see him as a child. About Ginny, I totally agree - she's not a dimwitted idiot and I hope that I will explain why she isn't seeing his affection for her. And if not, then keep im mind that she really is a bit drunk in that scene - can you imagine anyone acting like that unless they weren't? At least I hope that's the only time she's being really dim-witted. Because you know, in my mind Draco really is that outwardly unmovable block of ice that is almost clinically unable to let other people in or express his real feelings. I've answered the question about the happy endings a hundred times it feels like. OK, only three I guess, but still. Well, I'm not oing to put out any warnings. I hate spoiling fictions. But you can check my other stories for clues. They are not as good though. I'm afraid this one will be my swan-song and I'll never write anything so good in my life. *whimper*

I was absolutely spellbound by this chapter. Sorry for keeping at you about the ending - I just read through the reviews and it seemed like you were of two minds - that not every ending is happy, and then that you liked happy endings. I really love your D/G here so it was like an investment of emotions on my part. I tend not to read tragedies cause I usually hate feeling so sad afterwards.

Anyways, so the flow was perfect here. I'm curious whether the dates you put in here are necessary - like perhaps there is a point/reason you're putting them in there. I can't decide whether I like them or not :P. The POV was perfect, and the pacing also perfect, especially in regards to how they revealed their feelings for each other.

I think the only thing I'm surprised about is Draco not having marched up to his wife when she was with Harry. Again I can't decide whether that would have been in character or out of character for your Draco. You've written him as very cool and collected, but he clearly has his bursts of anger/temper. I would have liked to see more of the scene of them realizing their feelings for each other. That part could have been fleshed out a bit.

Also can't decide whether 'Christ's sake' would be appropriate here. I always found it a little strange when muggle-borns just used 'Merlin's sake'/etc, but Harry's grown up in the Wizarding world.

Also, major props for not feeling the need to change the tags for all your dialogue. Most people feel like they have to write 'she said' (which is good) but then every line is 'she breathed' 'she huffed' 'she smirked.' I liked that you weren't afraid to use "tell" "said" and actions linked to some of the dialogue. I could really picture the scene in my mind and feel the personality of the characters. It was absolutely perfect so don't change it.

This was my favorite chapter up to date. Mixed feelings about a sequel! Could either mean you're going to do a baby story sequel which most authors don't really do well, or leaving this on a cliffhanger. I have faith in you though so don't take this as me pushing you either way.

Ok I reread this chapter too. I can't help it, the writing is fabulous. I feel like everything has come together here. Characterization, dialogue, descriptions, etc. I'm seeing other parts of this chapter I didn't appreciate the first time. I love how Draco really understands Ginny, that when she's yelling at him for not coming to her room, he doesn't react in an upset manner. He realizes that something is wrong. And it's an understanding that has grown over the course of the story, i.e. beautiful character development.

I really should get back to homework now :p. But seriously! fabulous!

Definitely not happy with this chapter. It borders on the characters being somewhat bipolar. Super sappy one minute then rejecting the next. And then you can reverse it for Draco, rejecting at first then more sappy than I think it warrants for his character, and then finally rejecting again almost like a yo-yo. For example, I don't see him 'whispering' to anyone - doesn't really seem the style of a dominant, snarky alpha male. And you have him doing it twice in this chapter. I think the "said quietly" is fine; I suppose it's the diction and the emotions each word choice evokes that makes the difference.

And Ginny seems to be a bit of a drama queen here, not what I'd expect from a mature woman. You have her as a very bold/strong woman, but she's hiding behind her brother to avoid seeing Draco? She immediately goes to her mother then her brother telling them all the bad things Draco's said to her? I'd understand one but not both - it's fine to have a confidant, but when you basically turn them against someone that could potentially be your spouse... That's not something I see her doing since she's been married for a while and would know this from experience.

And at the end Ginny is being overly dramatic again. Dating Draco would be destroying "everything?" I can forgive some lapse of judgement earlier, heat of the moment/etc. but she was polyjuiced for what - a week? At some point you think, what am I really doing? And she liked Draco and wanted to husband-swap. I realize you have her saying she had time to think about things, but it's such a jump to go from husband swap to don't want to do anything with you right now. I'd probably say taking it slowly would have been more appropriate.

Anyways, just my two cents/constructive criticism. To be fair, it's probably influenced by the fact it's my least favorite chapter out of the entire story.

You get kudos though for keeping pov consistent in the chapter rather than bouncing from character to character like inexperienced writers do.

Author's Response: Let me start by saying that this chapter, and the way it is set up, is necessary for the conclusion of the story. I knew no one would be happy, which is why I am glad that the epilogue is already ready to be posted. As for Draco's character, the previous two chapters were meant to show that he was realizing that he was making a mistake by pushing Ginny away, hence his change of heart in this chapter. I don't really think that him whispering puts him out of character, though. As for Ginny, I never said she went crying to both her mother AND George. She went only to George, but her mother knew her well enough to know who she went to. I implied that Molly knew what had gone on between the two, but that could have been from George telling his mother what had happened with Ginny, or Harry. She also didn't say she wanted nothing to do with Draco at all. She said she couldn't have a relationship, and because of that, Draco was irritated. She had been the straw that broke the camel's back in his marriage, and for her to openly reject him was enough for him to decide he wanted nothing to do with her. Remember that HE is the one who walked out in the final scene. Draco pushing her away initially and her having time to talk to other people and think was what made her realize that a relationship with Draco would cause too much damage for her children, especially since they'd already have to deal with a divorce. The fact that they were swapped for a week doesn't mean anything; the tension and the feelings between them had been going on for long before they realized, which is something that had also been built up to in previous chapters. Going to George was also not because she wanted to "turn him against" Draco, but she went to him because he was the only one who knew about the polyjuice to begin with. It's fine that you don't like the chapter, as I figured that most people would not, but this is what I had planned from the beginning because it is the only way that I feel would resolve this story. If Draco had gone to Ginny and she would have openly accepted him, everyone would have told me that there was no way that that could happen, either. This was the only way, in my opinion, of having both Draco and Ginny want to be with each other, but not turn Ginny into a completelly selfish and irredeemable character. Everything, however, will be resolved in the epilogue, and believe me when I say that I don't like unhappy endings. This chapter was just something that had to be done.

I have to say this wasn't my favorite chapter. I felt Scorpius figuring it out was way too fast - only a minute into it and he figured it out, while Draco who's been married to Astoria for years has not figured it out in days. I know you want kids to be sharp/etc, but you also mention people see what they want to see. I'd imagine Scorpius would want his mother to be affectionate, and supportive of Quidditch.

I also felt Ginny's slip of "boys" was contrived and unlikely. And if the House Elves knew there was an impostor, I'd imagine they'd be required to report it to Draco. Not pretend as if nothing was wrong.

I found the Astoria/Harry section very believable and if she's to be found out it would be through Quidditch. The Astoria centered section was the best part of the chapter, in character, though Charlie singling her out was a little strange. I could understand it better if he came to talk to her after dinner, or she was his favorite sibling, that sort of thing. Also, wouldn't she have known his g/f-now fiance's name by now? Which makes me think that would have given it away, and if I had been her, I wouldn't have asked for the name, just in case it would give me away.

I liked how Astoria was in character here - looking down at the house before experiencing it and really enjoying it.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review :). I'm sorry that this wasn't your favorite chapter, but I will take the time to explain why I made the choices that I did.