Sometimes, protection comes at a price we are unable to endure.Category: Completed Short Stories
I think this is worth continuing. I would love to see how it plays out.
Man. I freaking love this.
Enter a world of thievery and transgression…a tangled web of lies and deception, passion and betrayal, love and sex, birth and death—all threatening to consume the lives of those ready to go up in flames.Category: Works in Progress
This story is sensational. MAN. What a plot.
So... wasn't Ginny going to carry on with the plan? Why the sudden drop of plot? (Not to sound rude; I'm merely curious.) Also, I was wondering why you had such a dramatic lapse of time between the time period of the last chapter and this one?
Author's Response: Sigh. I think I need to rethink the division between chapters seven and eight. When I wrote this story, it was just one long story....no chapter breaks...and I think it reads much better that way. Not very much time has elapsed, really, and I don\'t feel as though the plot is dropped, it\'s just neatly signed off. If I had continued, I might have ended up with a thousand-page beast detailing their marriage, the raising of their son, etc., and that wasn\'t the goal of the contest (nor was that within my time constraints). Yes, Ginny was going to carry on with the plan, but as you read, she becomes rather disillusioned with Harry at long last, and that sort of \"breaks the spell\"--she realizes her mistake. Sorry if it didn\'t read very well, however!
Draco and Ginny hate each other with a passion. The end. Well, no, not really.Category: Long and Completed
AHHHHHHHHHHHH.
I am obsessed with this story. I absolutely LOVE the characterization. This story is the kind of thing that I search high and low for, and I can't ever seem to find it! ABSOLUTELY FANTASTIC. I'm very, very impressed.
I really, really love the way they banter (okay, so it was in the beginning, oh well), and I really like the way they curse, too. Really splendid job.
Also, I like the development of their relationship. You give the reader what he/she wants without dragging it out/granting the reader's wish IMMEDIATELY.
Perfect perfect perfect. Probably one of my favorites, ever.
YAAAAY!
It was a good read. A fun one, too. I'm actually very sorry that it's over. :(
Cute ending! And I look forward to more fiction by you!
*DH SPOILERS* Consider yourself warned.Category: Completed Short Stories
This is my attempt to correct some of the wrongs...
Thank God.
You've basically repaired the damage.
Ginny finds that she is only attracted to men she can argue with.Category: Works in Progress
EEK! I can't wait to see how Draco interrupts this (if, in fact, he does).
AHAHAHAHHAHA!
Draco's reaction was hilarious. Ginny's thought process was hilarious. That was very light, lovely chapter.
Five witches agree to an unusual wager: to be the last in their group to marry.Category: Works in Progress
OOOOH, I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHERE THIS GOES!
I'm intrigued. Fabulous idea.
Boggarts reveal Ginny and Draco's greatest fears.Category: Works in Progress
*giggles insanely*
LOVE!
Author's Response: Thank you : )
Love.
"On a shallow, physical level, Malfoy is completely hot."
THIS IS TOTALLY WHY EVERYONE LOVES HIM.
Srsly. Love.
Author's Response: I agree. Plus the whole brooding bad boy thing is always intriguing.
Oooh, love.
Can't wait to see how it unfolds.
They are both too young to be so cold that it burns.Category: Completed Short Stories
I liked it.
An interesting read.
Parts were a bit confusing/the language didn't flow as nicely, but it was a really interesting read. However, I feel the "cold" characterization of Ginny is a bit off. Nevertheless, I'm a fan of it. It's really very nice.
Absolutely the best 1st fic I've ever read. Without a doubt.
Author's Response: That\'s one flattering review. Are you familiar with the \'sandwich\' technique in editing (i.e. beginning with a compliment, throwing in a question, critique, or other statment that would put the reciever on the defensive, then ending with another compliment)? If not, I suppose you are now. It\'s common to use that format when editing so that people are receptive to your suggestions. It works too--I plan on keeping flow in mind next time I write.
Ginny has a moment of abject stupidity. Now what is she supposed to do?Category: Long and Completed
I cannot wait to see where this goes... but I felt it was very rushed and hurried. I adored what led up to the sex, but their intimacy... wasn't intimate. It was very awkward to read and it didn't feel real. I suggest holding off on the sex; maybe Draco just sticks a hand up her shirt, and Ginny's ashamed she let it go that far.
I'm curious to see what you'll make out of this chapter. I eagerly anticipate the update!
Author's Response: It wasn\'t really supposed to be intimate or loving. It was supposed to portray a first time based on teenage lust. It always works great for the guy, but not the girl. Ginny\'s made a mistake in this fic. Hopefully it will work out well for her, but it won\'t happen right away.
Hmmm. I think the conversation needs a little work. It sounds a bit stiff and awkward, and I felt Draco revealed too much about himself.
Also, I really loved the scene in the Great Hall. Oh, man, I was just like, AHAHHAHAHAH THIS IS SO FABB. Seriously. Love.
On the other hand, though, Draco lost the fantastic characterization when he and Ginny started talking. I think it would be a little more fitting if he weren't so friendly and familiar with her. After all, he is a Malfoy, and he stands for everything she is against. Ginny's tears seemed sudden; I didn't feel her frustration mounting.
Another question: what was up with Hermione/Ron/Harry and the masking charm? I couldn't really follow what was going on.
Overall, really fab. *squees and fangirls* I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE HOW IT TURNS OUT!
Author's Response: Ouch. I feel compelled to say that this is an AU fic, so there isn\'t quite the animosity there would be in other fics. Draco did help kill Voldemort. He\'s supposed to be snarky, but not truly evil. I\'m trying to portray him as a hormone ridden 18 year old boy who ocassionally says the right thing. \r\nIf Harry removed the masking charm then Ginny\'s love bites would have shown. Luckily, Ron was guilty of giving Hermione a love bite, and he urged Harry not to perform the spell. That is what saved Ginny from discovery.\r\n
Sometimes, you just want to be someone else.Category: Completed Short Stories
Hahahahahhahaaha, funny stuff!
But I thought the Nevra bit was a bit uncomfortable. I think they concept of the story would have been illustrated more beautifully if you had mapped their budding friendship in detail.
Good job!
Author's Response: In a one shot there isn\'t a lot of time for mapping a budding friendship in detail. Such is the nature of a one shot.
Twenty three year old Draco lives at Grimmauld Place with The Order members. He decides to make a move on Ginny.Category: Completed Short Stories
Oh, how precious!
Author's Response: Thank you : )
When Harry leaves Ginny for Hermione, Draco decides it's time to fulfill an old fantasy. Twenty five is a little old to experience her first one night stand, but Ginny thinks she can handle it.Category: Works in Progress
This fic reminds me of why I love Ron/Pansy. ('Cause it's AWESOME.) I really like the storyline. And really everything that happens. How long do you plan on making this fic?
Author's Response: I never really know how long a fic will be. They just seem to flow until they end. Thank you for the review. : )
“I know you,” she said softly. “I know that marriage is the last thing on your mind. I don’t want you thinking I’m dying for a sparkling diamond on my finger and happily ever after and all that.”Category: Completed Short Stories
“Don’t you?” he asked simply.
Oh, that was just super cute. Really enjoyable. Great job.
Sequel to "The Broken Road."Category: Works in Progress
OH BABY!
I can't wait to see where this is going! Very, very interesting.
Hired by the Malfoys to manage their public relations after a bout of bad press, Ginny discovers that some relationships just aren't meant to stay strictly professional.Category: Long and Completed
Ahhhh! I absolutely love this fic! It's exactly what I was in the mood for! Light and breezy, with a cute little plot. I also love how smoothly you inserted Draco's adoration. Blaise is also quite a character. You've written their friendship exactly how I imagine it! Their interaction is great. You've NAILED their characters.
But, yeah, I love it. I also love the Malfoy family, as a whole. Nice job on characterizing them. They're easy to like, but you can see how they wouldn't be.
I love it! Great job! I eagerly anticipate the update!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I loved writing Blaise and Draco\'s scene; they\'re total jerks to each other but are best mates anyway. :)
AHHHH! *squees madly* I just love it! LOVE it!
Cutest line: "He hadn't, as Blaise had indicated, been mooning after Weasley all these years, but he had a nagging suspicion that he was about to start."
So adorable! I love the way their relationship is shaping up! And hahaha, ohhh, Blaise! That sly dog. A very nice friend thing to do, though. He can read Draco like a book. :D
Anyways, loved it. Very, very nice job. You seem to be writing exactly the kind of fic I've been looking for!
Brilliant, as usual!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I love Blaise to bits. :)
Ginny wakes with no memory. Should she believe the blond man with the gray eyes? Why would he lie to her?Category: Works in Progress
Ooh, nice and creepy. I knew it'd end up like that. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thank you. I\'m glad you liked it.
Draco and Ginny commemorate a new beginning.Category: Completed Short Stories
The only thing I have to criticize is the lack of conflict. Other than that, hawt.
Author's Response: Yes, not a whole lot of conflict here, and thank you. -seegrim :)