Name: Flipinpenname reviewed Sunburn on Jan 06, 2011 10:08 am

awwww draco likeeeeees herrr. sooo cutee.

Author's Response: XD

Name: Len reviewed The Smallprint on Jan 01, 2011 05:38 am

Poor Draco. I think Ginny won't help him much with his guilty issues (at least at first). But why is Ginny in The Cottage? What issues has Ginny to work out?

Very interesting plot and very nicely written. I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you are enjoying it! n_n

Name: Boogum reviewed The Smallprint on Dec 18, 2010 03:18 pm

Yay, another chapter! This was really good, though I do find sometimes I can't quite place Draco's age. It's been seven years, so I'm assuming he must about 24, but his thoughts sometimes 'feel' younger -- if that makes sense. It's nothing to worry about, though. I think, considering everything, he would have those moments where he is neither adult nor child. And I do think you're writing him very nicely. I particularly liked the lines about the colour and the sun, and how he had to hide in the darkness to really feel it. That was beautiful and tragic all in one.

I loved how you had Lucy insist on Draco calling her Lucy, while Filip insists he get called Mr White. The contrast between them is both amusing and real, and I'm really just loving Mr White. A good, strong OC.

I'm not sure how I feel about Ginny yet. She still seems a bit vague to me, but I'm sure as I read on I will get to know her more.

As usual, I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Yeah, I remember people saying in the exchange that they didn't really get Ginny. She's not the most strongly written, a product, I think, of how much I rushed the story. I had intended to rewrite and add to the story, to put in the things that I hadn't had time to write originally, but now I'm just doing a minor edit and rewrite. Hopefully Ginny will make more sense later on, but for now, she's supposed to be a mystery.

I love Mr. White. n_n I should have used him more. And Draco was about five years younger in the original version of the story. Maybe that accounts for his young feel.

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing. :)

Name: Incognito reviewed Unnatural Selection on Dec 16, 2010 12:38 pm

Don't you love how I say "I'll review this on the weekend when I have more time", yet here I am? *sheepish grin*

What I like about this prologue, is that we actually see Draco being punished for his crimes. In canon (or at least what we suspect of canon) is that Draco was never punished - thanks to Harry. It's nice to know that Draco would be punished. It allows for a softer side of Draco to be revealed - and to be considered plausible.

It's also interesting how you work in the atmosphere of the new Azkaban, juxtaposing Draco's 'new' demeanour, mood. He is a man who has almost lost hope, who has made himself deaf not just to the world that surrounds and threatens to engulf him but to his own guilty conscience. Even now, after seven years have passed, he still seems to be in denial, having Fate shoulder the blame. That is not to say that Fate has no blame, but it is interesting to see how he psychologically represses things.

Yet there is hope. And you show that glimmer of hope through your analogy of a caged bird. It's quite lovely imagery - both uplifting and depressing. And the reader is left wondering where Draco will fly off to. Will he be able to fly, or will he be caught in the storm of inevitability?

Good job, as usual, Jessica. ^_^

Author's Response: Thanks, Lia. n_n I like how you can catch all that. In the beginning, I think I was just writing to be writing (I had such a hard time with this story because of RL things upsetting me, so nothing would come out), but I did want to do something different. I always TRY to do that, anyway. I like to think that Draco would have gotten off without punishment if Harry would have spoken for him, but I wanted to change that for this story. We also normally see Draco as a kind of fighting spirit, in some ways. But I think Half-Blood Prince showed us that he isn't that strong on the inside, though he tries to act like he is. I wanted that to come back out after the war. What else could he do? He messed up, whether he admits it or not. His life is the way it is now because of his decisions, so why should he make decisions anymore? Maybe he'd be better off if someone else made his decisions for him. I really like the imagery of the bird too. In a cage. Like his rib cage. X)

Anyway, thanks a lot for the review. You're very eloquent, aren't you? I think you put into words what I was going for much better than I could have. n_n