This is the story of what happens when husbands give their wives a hard time.Category: Long and Completed
I actually didn't expect to like this, let alone really like it. I usually hate epilogue compliant stories cause the whole being married to not D/G, with kids/etc.
I love this story. I love the fact you haven't made this story all about the kids, but we know they're there, just not a centerpiece.
The scenes of the women discovering themselves were funny, and I really liked how differences in the husbands' personalities. The little details really sell it. The Draco knowing her period, is a lot more amorous than comes across in front of guests is entirely plausible. I never really thought knowing a woman's cycle was hm, I'm not sure what to say, but it comes across as thoughtful and attentive to his wife.
I love some of the lines in here. Especially this:
"She was thankful that, for the next week, at least, she would not have to live with a man who looked at her with such predation. Harry was, truly, a gentleman."
LOL at this: "After today, she decided that she would be getting up at the crack of dawn to bathe, hoping that he would not yet be awake to join her and unaware of whether or not this was of the norm."
I like that you're setting it up to show that D/G, H/A are a better match that what it is currently.
I am super curious how this is going to work out, and I can't see people being super thrilled about it - maybe? Perhaps?
Update soon pretty please?
Author's Response: YAY FOR LONG, SUPER-THOUGHTFUL REVIEWS!! :):):)
First, I totally agree. I usually don't like fully compliant because normally it shows Ginny and Draco cheating, and I don't like that so much :( BUT, I am glad you like it. So thank you!
I think Draco would just be the really observant type, so that's why I thought he would know that detail. Thank you for appreciating my attention to details. I am trying to make them subtle enough between Gin and Astoria so that the husbands wouldn't be stupid not to notice, but different enough so that it's there, you know? I don't think the two husbands would act the same in a relationship. :)
We'll see how everyone reacts ;).
THANKS SO MUCH for the review! I've already begun chapter three, but it's not quite finished yet. I hope I don't disappoint you!
Points to both husbands for noticing the differences in the wives, even though I begrudgingly give Harry points. I was hoping Draco would turn out to be the better husband, but you've shown it's not a matter of better, just different. I feel like Ginny and Draco are perfect for each other and surprisingly Astoria and Harry.
I love how you've written Astoria's character. Everyone has come across with their own personality, which is awesome characterization skills on your part. Serious kudos, and it's usually through the little things - the delicate trailing of Astoria's dress in the ballroom, the way she spoke to George, her sort of quiet, classy demeanor.
The D/G section was hilarious though I'm not sure I buy Draco saying 'I want you to defend...' Seems a little too open, but that's the only minor critique.
Just like everyone else big fan of the end of the chapter. Though again, I'm really surprised I like this story as much as I do. I am equally interested in the H/A parts as the D/G parts, and normally I have negative interest in Harry or Astoria, but it's so fun to follow the girly-girl here and watch as she enjoys dressing up in sparkling shimmering ballgowns.
It's the balance between the two parts of the story - the pretty/comforting/classy H/A and the combative/passionate D/G so you get everything you want out of the story.
This chapter is even better than the first two.
I know you just updated, but update again soon pretty please? I'll even do all my homework :p, or if you'd like get around to posting some D/G stories of my own. Anything to keep reading this brilliant story!
Author's Response: Thanks again! I love your reviews. You always have such thoughtful comments, and I love knowing exactly what you like or dislike. :)
Reread this and favorite lines of the chapter:
almost felt sorry that Ginny would have to spend the week enduring her ego-stroking husband when she was not used to his very dry, sarcastic sense of humor.
and "A lazy, dangerous smirk crossed his lips. " It makes me imagine a predator. And I realize that Draco must be tired of a super compliant wife - I was just surprised at how open he was about it with that line I nitpicked at you for. It's very direct for Draco, but that's just a personal opinion.
Okay so I finished today's homework because of your comment, does that mean the next chapter is up soon? :D
Author's Response: I don't mind nitpick - I like it, actually. Do not stop. :) And I already started the next chapter. Give me a couple of days. :)
So I've been rereading this a few times while waiting eagerly for the next chapter (the story is that good), and I was thinking - one of the husbands is bound to notice. I can definitely see Draco catching on, and manipulating/punishing her if you will - i.e. 'Oh Astoria but we always have sex twice a day' or something along those lines.
I suppose I'll have to wait and see what you come up with :p. So many possibilities it's driving me mad!
Keeping my fingers crossed today is the update day.
Author's Response: It won't be today, I'm afraid. :(
Ginny Weasley had finally grown up. That little girl who dreamed of a fairytale wedding with her one true prince was gone. And good riddance. She didn't care about any of that now. No, really, she didn't.Category: Works in Progress
Chapter 5 Snippet:
"Honestly, sometimes I haven't a clue what to do with you," he muttered before downing the rest of his wine.
"I don't know about that," she said with a playful waggle of her eyebrows. "Experience says you seem to be fairly knowledgeable in that area."
He latched onto the line as she knew he would, irritation giving way to a wicked gleam in his eyes. "Really now, but how long has it been? Perhaps we should refresh your memory just to be sure."
Oh hello good story, plot, and in need of a sequel chapter. I wasn't expecting all of that, so it was a nice surprise.
It has such potential for the next chapter. Though I'm curious to see how you'll work it, because your Ginny seems very stubborn/damaged compared to the average. Just the right amount though from the plot events you seem to have put her through. I will say Draco as a ladies man is a tiny bit cliche though. I would have recommending the pretending approach because he does seem to have a thing for Ginny and doesn't seem like the type to stop until he gets what he wants. That would be my only criticism for the chapter.
Definitely expand it pretty please? I promise to review the next chapter too.
Author's Response: I'll hold you to your promise ;). Thank you for your review. This Ginny has really wormed into my head and is demanding that I tell her story, and you're right that to have it work, she has a long ways to go. As for Draco, when this is expanded on, I think you'll get a better sense of where he's coming from and why he's acting the way he does. He is the type to go after what he wants, but he is also a very prideful and perceptive man who knows just what will set Ginny off. :)
"Weasley," he said in a voice dripping with mockery, "what have you done to your hair?"Category: Completed Short Stories
Ginny groaned and released the red strands, raising her face just enough to glower at him. "What do you think, you idiot?"
"I don't know," he responded, and his lips curved into a smirk. "I can't profess to comprehend the minds of plebeians such as yourself; for all I know you might think that travesty you call a hairstyle is actually fashionable. I mean, you dated Potter. That says it all."
Wow! This was a great story. I thought it might go over into cliche territory, but you did it well so it didn't. The last two sentences were my favorite. The "rare stab of pity" description was interesting; I can't decide whether I agree with it or not. Or rather, I do agree Draco could feel that, but I'm not sure he would act on it in a helpful way without getting something out of it.
And now I reallllly want a second chapter. I liked the Draco POV, and how he was still in character, but a little bit nicer than he usually is. Perhaps the next chapter could be revenge on Lavender? Or showing her up with a new boyfriend? I'm not above begging...
Author's Response: I just wanted to write something light and cute with this, so Draco was always going to be a little nicer. I'm not sure if I will end up adding to it or not, but I've separated it from my other small one-shot collections just in case I do decide to.
In any case, I'm glad you enjoyed it and felt that it didn't stray into cliche territory. That's pretty much the best thing I can hear as an author, so thanks. ^_^
Ginny Potter could become Ginny Weasley for one evening, just like how she would become another woman on any other night. Draco Malfoy wanted Ginny Weasley, and by Merlin he had her. Oneshot for Rowan Greenleaf's Polyjuice Brothel challenge at the DG Forum - rated M for smut.Category: Completed Short Stories
Wow, just when I thought your stories couldn't get better. I tend to avoid reading the Ginny Potter ones but I thought I'd give this a chance since I liked your last story so much.
I really like your Ginny's POV here - it's very touching and painful at the same time. You feel for her. The strongest parts of the story were when she was thinking about herself and the realization it was Draco. I'm rooting for her to pull herself out of this depressing situation and to be happier than her family wanted/left her to be.
Really hoping you continue this.